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This poem sends out ray of hope and enthusiasm for all. It is all about human welfare. Joy, love and justice seem to fill the song and it is going to one that hails peace and harmony. It sounds spiritual and mundane at the same time. Music has the power.
Rhyming-
it is a rhyming verse with the scheme of AB CB. Rhythm is felt throughout the poem. Lines and line endings are after my heart.
Imagery shows the way it could be for all. It shows a glorious place where all are happy and where peace dwells.
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I agree that it is not always possible to keep to desk writing away at will. Life interferes and leaving us to seek those precious moments of dreaming, observing and creating cameos of life.
Fortunately, writing allows us to be ourselves and create something out of our own thoughts and feelings. You have chosen to think of something that allows the reader to "build on". A reader does require to understand the mind of the writer.
I appreciate the clarity and the desire to "create a little bit of art and reach deeper within the soul."
this is a really an entertaining poem. Storymaster's home is well created complete with the attractive paint and decor.
It is like a story poem, which has a surprise end with the mouse. Looks like animals too behave well with visitors at this unique house.
Rhyming is such that it makes it easy for me to read with the rhythm intact.
It is Christmas time! No wonder it inspires a mouse to be mannerly so as to welcome the visitors.
"He offered a cup of hot chocolate,
Showed me a tiny Christmas tree"
Imagery shows a pretty house, a tiny Christmas tree and lively little mouse too.
I admire the way you constructed this four liner with ease. Twenty four syllables, a mistletoe, and a wish for love make a joyous combination.
Imagery shows all the above. syllables are felt and the rest is visual and mind-related as well. I hope the mistletoe would bless you and help your prayers to materialize.
Rhyming and rhythm seem to make the poem flow well.
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Coming to the poem, I find it personal and it is about personal experience of being harassed by someone at home. It must be your better half. I can see that you have never guessed what it was going to be when you first met him.
It is difficult to get rid of nagging nature.
"my feelings get hurt when you push me"
Your informal style and language make it easy for me to understand the content of the poem. The title suits the contents of the poem.
This is a lovely Christmas poem. I appreciate the nice story you told in rhyming verse. The poem has a portrait of a person who in the words of Santa is a "beautiful soul."
"It's beautiful souls like you
Who make my night!"
And it must be you named Terry.
The picture of Terry comes through clearly as she manages her mouse to wander around her favorite site, WDC.
A researched article on the pros and cons of assigning homework to the children. I agree with the point that too much work and too little fun can turn a child into a stubborn and willful person. The school authorities should realize this truth behind forcing the children into doing too much homework.
" Homework, in excess, actually harms children both physically and mentally."
This sentence appears to be the key sentence in the essay.
In India, where I come from, homework is considered a must for all kids in school. They bury themselves in notebooks and textbooks after day's attendance in school. They have very little time for fun activities such as games, or going out with their parents and so on.
They become listless and dry-eyed.
Therefore, I fully support the argument that homework should be kept within reasonable limits and that should not be on a daily basis.
Thank you for sharing thoughts on an important issue pertaining to a child's mental and physical health.
Quite a useful essay trying to tell us what it takes to cultivate the art of making friends. I fully agree with the points made herein.
The author began her method of understanding right at home. The instance of parents' fights only helped her in this technique. Just great! Something positive emerging from a sad and bewildering experience.
Listening to others' itself is a therapy that would help the person talking giving vent to her or his troubles. Indeed listening also helps the listener in understanding the other person's trials and it is possible that a remedy might be the result. Even otherwise, sympathy is something that people thirst for.
Nice language and style. Pretty well researched article.
The World War 1 setting reaches out and makes me imagine the events that you have so well highlighted in these brief but certainly moving letters.
Sid, the soldier must have returned home after action in the war,henceforth.
His thoughts and musings about love and the aftermath of his possible death are clearly imaged.
War being a cruel and unpredictable, none could know or even imagine how things would turn out for soldiers like Sid.
It is a good write telling us about the war without even witnessing it.
I felt happy that you found fearlessness inside you and making progress with life in general. This is the kind of freedom that makes a person shine and even take others along with her or him. Brief but enough information is fed into the article to make it an inspirational write up. Big shout from me for having got rid of the fear complex.
You mentioned the need to be positive in every walk of life. You developed it with regard to job and pregnancy. I like the opinion that,
" "May be there is something good for me in the store and that's why I am getting rejected"."
Lastly, you expressed wonder and belief in miracles. For those who have faith in God, miracles continue to happen. I firmly understand that factor of life.
Pretty philosophical and a practical way of looking at life. If we develop vision of this kind where we appreciate the sweetness and bitterness, we can sail through life.
"I much rather see
All things as they really are"
Perhaps I can take the liberty of taking it a bit further and say that light and shade are part of creativity and so it is with life.
Imagery shows both sweet and bitter things of life and the ability to appreciate them.
"It's impossible not to like
How sweet and bitter honey lemon is..."
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This sonnet on beauty is a personal poem of love. Love is described from your view. I mean how it engulfs your sanity without notice is seen here. All your defenses fall short and things work in her favor.
"An enrapturing gaze fells my vulnerable army,"
Here she is emerging as a winner and the to lose in such cases is not loss but ironically another win. So I might conclude that both the people involved in this love episode are winners.
Whether she is a waking dream or a vision the factual reality is your being smitten by love of a woman, your "heavenly beam".
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The collection of snippets is nicely arranged. The chain of memories is narrated in first person. you have shown each character with clarity. The readers can understand the feelings of the youngest sibling for all his family members.
The times are when there was no fridge yet. That makes the whole perspective very interesting. Life appears more peaceful with the family enjoying their occasional meetings.
I can see there is closeness and bonding between the members of the family.
Language and style are such that feelings and thoughts are well understood. You used simple language and showed every incident as you have witnessed it. Very realistic.
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Content-
The cat and dog play is a great visual. We do have such sights but you caught it in the brevity of a short poem. The eternal struggle goes on. It is embedded in the creation itself.
"Dog barked and howled
Cat growled"
Although there is no message as such, your poem makes me read between the lines.
Imagery-
This poem brings in a variety of visuals. It is not only the two fencing animals but the atmosphere as well, the tree, the shade and the sun come through the word pictures.
Structure-
Short rhyming stanzas tell the whole story. Line endings rhyme well. words are simple and of everyday usage.
"her glare
a scare"
this rainy poem has a lovely rhythm as I listen to the falling rain via your poem.
Structure-
It looks apt that you composed your poem in couplets. Each section has an image and a slice of reality. Eleven of the couplets bring out the facts of life.
"The rain engulfs me
Readily, I know I am alone..."
The poet's eye-
Your observations of the falling rain and its associated thoughts come through transparently. Indeed, nature can be one of the kindest of companions.
"Amisted glorious chaos
Order is acutely regained."
Your choice of words is rare and fine. In the above lines for example, I find the usages like "glorious chaos" "acutely regained" are pleasant and perceptively used.
I have a lot to learn from the likes of you, dear poet.
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This is an enjoyable poem for two reasons. First, the ambiance you created around the night of dancing sounds so real. Second, the facts behind images come through loud and clear.
"and white gloves all around
The mirrored ball in the ceiling..."
This must be a plush dancing hall with ladies and gents properly dressed. It is nice to give wings to imagination and be present at the dance.
"Drinks" is the unavoidable part of a dance. Well, along with it comes the desired effect.
"Drinks spilling...
all over the white tablecloth"
This is a down-to-earth poem, completely true till the last letter.
For a person who is habituated to writing, it is a great stress to pass the day without penning few lines or words. It is difficult to imagine not writing everyday, something or the other, or about this or that.
This essay shows the color and quality of the days without writing. They are spent listlessly, thrown out of gear and unable to decide what to do next.
"Every day was empty, every day was dark, every day..."
Once you understand the impossibility of not writing, you will have no option other than going back to writing.
The concept is attractive and unique. Liking someone who doesn't reciprocate is pretty sportive I guess.
It is only at the end of the poem we learn that her love is one-sided and she doesn't mind it.
"I still like you although you talked for hours, about the woman you loved."
You have shown your love for the person in various and many images. The crush that you have comes through several word pictures you have drawn.
"I like the sound of your laughter."
This free style poem has a rhythm that shows your admiration and affection for the person.
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This is a love poem that appeals to me mainly due to imagery.
You created so many images or word pictures that show the blissful love you have for the beloved.
The theme-
I might be able to call it sublime because the departed lover sends down her heartfelt love to her beloved on earth. That love is eternal and crosses the mundane borders of life and death is shown here. She sends her love on the wings of wind, the waves of ocean, blessings for his weal and welfare in every way possible till he joins her in their heavenly abode.
Form and structure-
With five quatrains, this rhyming poem has the scheme of ab cb. The five stanzas talk of different aspects of love being sent from heaven to earth.
Lines and line ending are found to be rhythmic and of smooth and spontaneous flow.
This is a different kind of encouragement you give to those suffering from shyness and negativity. I think sometimes shyness may not be of the negative kind but negativity, on the other hand may give rise to shyness.
That apart, you spoke of courageous encounters, which I thought would be with the outside world. Shyness is displayed mostly in the presence of the outsiders and the outside world. However, I do understand the kind of courage needed to face self and self motivated actions such as rising from the bed and conducting functions like getting out of home and driving to office and so on.
The message at the end is of great value.
"Courageous encounters are those wonderful things you do to make you feel better about yourself."
Being happy and comfortable with one's own self surely help us gain confidence and courage.
It is true to be ordinary is not easy. There are too many attractions to be in the limelight. Many people revel when surrounded by others, being praised and being noticed.
On the other hand, there those who do useful things, yet go unnoticed. They don't mind. In fact they like it that way, to be quiet and unobtrusive.
"Who don't intend to seek attention from the crowd,'
yet they know
"where to find his happiness!"
Imagery in this free verse shows a simple but successful person.
This free verse contains a tribute to the night. Night is not just darkness but it has therapeutic value for the poet.
"Melting fear, sadness and pain
Only peace and serenity remain."
Night is personified effectively. It is portrayed as someone with soothing presence.
"I race for it's comforting embrace'
Imagery-
Imagery reflects the on coming night with day light fading away.
The poet treats the night with a special affection, which is unique.
It flows well.
Write on!
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