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Review of The Tree  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An excellent introspection by the tree's point of view.
Interesting observation of the cutting of trees for selfish reasons make me think of the mindless acts of human beings.

Lesson to learn is that trees do good while the more intelligent humans do harm to nature that protects us. Does it make the race traitorous and selfish?

The example of one tree mourning its fate of death at the hands of a man makes me pause and visualize the massacre of hundreds of acres of rain forest and other forests all over the world for sheer monetary gain and useless power that accompanies it.

We started experiencing the retribution, which cannot replace the loss of oxygen, rain and food for millions.

Thank you for a wonderful write.

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Review of Farm Life  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Farm life and its ambiance are described with appropriate imagery.

The smell of coffee, the sound of the rooster, sunshine signaling a bright day,the greenery in the garden around the house, dotted with frequenting animals such as, pigs, horses, a dog or two, ducks in the pond gliding at will, rabbits skipping- are the scenic elements that draw my attention.

Rhyming verse appeals with a quite flow of its own.
Visual imagery is the best point of this poem.



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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

It is a useful article with which I can relate. I too try to suppress bad feeling and coat them with a thin cover of positive. I observed that it doesn't hold for long. Somewhere along the line, we break down and it has a bad impact on my mind and body.
So what you are saying is that be sad if you need to be. Don't pretend to be otherwise.

Let symptoms grief come out and live out their lot. Then it feels better and lets you plan your life as per your liking.

"when suppressed or ignored, become amplified, which just sounds like a crappy way to live.'

It is a wonderful piece of writing making a lot of sense.

Language and style appeal to me.

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Glorious and Joyful

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Review of In memory  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi
it is a bold poem in the sense of its philosophy.
"The echo of my impact will linger, as long as YOU draw breath"

The above line to me, appears to be the key line. It states the power of soul despite losing the body depends on the kind of life that she or he lived. However, this is what we believe. And if we observe keenly, this could be true.

You have shown quite transparently, that memories make a person memorable. His or her impact is seen on those around him.
It expresses a sincere admission of a life well-lived.

Imagery appeals to the mind's eye.

Rhyming and rhythm are well matched.

The last line is soothing and it takes away the edge of finality that comes with death.

An appealing read with a great flow.

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"kin ship"
(kinship)

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a fast paced action poem.
Its imagery does the magic of reading with as much speed as the lines move. In other words, the poet makes us gallop along with the mare.

Reading poems of the above kind helps grow my own pacing of poetic writing. Emotions and the physical movement drive us on. Speed also makes you say the suitable word.

"Riding out in the rain,
You must think I'm insane."

Lines like the above and its tone casual, reminds me of the poems of Robert Frost.

Impressive beginning makes us curious as to how the rider is going to reach a safe destination in rain and thunder and lightning too riding a nervous horse.

"Asking her to gallop, we ride as one,
Together we move, underneath the sun."

Talking to an animal is also an art, I can see.

This rhyming poem flows well.(AA BB)

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Glorious and Joyful

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Review of Faith  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Chris,

this nonfiction story told in a detailed manner tells us what "faith" really stands for. You not only had it in your mind (as shown in the first example), but it also was shown in actual participation in life.
The organization you worked in,as a Salvation Army chaplain obviously contributed to forge faith in a deeper way.

I can see the commitment you had for a cause. Working as a "prison minister" doesn't sound easy. Yet, you took it up and about sign for the job.

Your example works as inspiration for many of us to have faith in the Lord and go ahead with duty.

A well written article with a message relevant to everybody.

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The colorful glory of sunrise.
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Review of Broken Circle  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Caroline,

Your Grandmother's portrait put poetically is an interesting one. You had shown her past and present, both raked up my curiosity. I see her in her domain dressed and ready for action with ease.

"Quick to laugh but not distracted"

She must be brilliant to do so many things simultaneously.
Words like kettle, cake, long walks, trails, tourist etc. show her varied interests.
Her way dwelling on selected details of the past shows her attitude to that which not necessary to talk about in the present. Bury the past and live in the present, kind of philosophy is truly healthy and joyful.
No doubt, she had been through fire and doesn't like to repeat it by visiting old places of ancient memories
Her courage and determination leave me rather amazed.


Free verse flows well.

So much to read between the lines as well.

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Review of What a Christmas  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A feel-good story.
It shows that the spring of humanity is not yet dead. As long as there are kind-hearted people on mother earth, that long happiness exists.

You have created a story that has a sensible beginning, a middle and an end. It was well paced and takes us through smooth transformations.

Characters are etched out well, each behaving according to the demands of that particular character.

Dialog could be expanded a bit to bring in more clarity about situations.

Please put the dialog in separate paragraphs with a double space between each of them.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Udayadhi,

it was a nice read. I like the way you created the situation where a young girl travels by herself and meets this girl when the cab stopped.

I enjoyed the conversation between the two.

However, you haven't shown whether the girl on the road is alive or a spirit.

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Review of Haunted  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lori,

I came across this piece of non-fiction in your port. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

This story is touching and it is written in all seriousness and sorrow. I can feel how lonely and how meaningless life appears at the moment of being alone without your husband by your side. No one can fill the vacuum brought by his passing away.

It is natural to feel his presence even in his absence. Mind refuses to accept the harsh reality. You also knew it in your heart of hearts.

" Just my imagination I suppose, yet, sometimes it feels so real."

They say time heals. Someday you will recover and find peace.

You have done a great job in writing something, which is difficult to express.

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Review of Shoebox of Memory  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a lovely sonnet that shows the shoe-box of memory. As the poet visits mother's attic and chance upon these old photographs of the family, he is overcome with the thoughts of people of long time ago.

"These images are stiff and monochromatic,
Yet every detail makes them more alive."

They lived their lives like we do now. The pictures of the past make them come alive in our minds.

The importance of preserving memories in photographs comes through this telling sonnet.
Imagery makes me see and feel the presence of those long-gone lives in the snapshots.

It flows well.

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Review of Memories  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lobelia,

this is a lovely poem that shows the waste of past alongside its value and relevance to the present. Past cannot be erased entirely. We may do away with the physical objects but certainly not that past, which we carry in our hearts and minds.

"In a comforter blanketing
T he grit of now;
Warming me
And I smile."

It keeps the mind fresh and the face glowing very much like a drink of fresh water from the mountain spring.

Imagery shows the poet busy with the task of emptying the past yet it gets filtered leaving its imprint. Memories as said in the poem are "relentless". Their effect on the present comes in a beautiful image.

"Translucent sheen
Coloring today."

So, I need my past to live a happy present life despite the "sheets of regret".

I love this free verse, scrolling down the page dotted with well-chosen words and touching visual imagery.

It flows right into my heart.

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The colorful glory of sunrise.
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Carly,

I came across this vocal poem in your port. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of one more year of creative association with the WDC. Have a lovely day!

This poem is very well constructed. All the resolutions are stated before telling the reader your intention of following them. This, I find is the cutting edge.

The ambiance surrounding the New Year is conveyed in appealing images.
"Drinking champagne
And trying not to get tipsy."

The scene is usual, yet in your poem it comes anew.

There is a note of boredom because this happens every year. I appreciate the candid expression.
"Now I search the faces marred by time and experience"

Yes, indeed. Life can be irritating. But your decision to realize those wonderful resolutions is elevating.
The end is done on a note of hope and enthusiasm.

The whole poem is well structured, words and line endings show the command you have on writing poems.
Imagery is sensory. I can go on.

It flows well.

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Review of Frankly Speaking  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Patrice

even as a draft, you have something interesting to offer. I am reviewing this story for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on your creative association with the WDC for another year. Have a lovely day!

Coming to the contents of this personal story, I realize the importance of a partner in life. That "official" meeting you mentioned that Linda was about to have with Frank at the end of the story, speaks of something significant coming into your life.

That aside, your character portraits, all the three including yours are lucid and to true to life. I am also highly taken by the sense of humor you splashed throughout the story. That I think lent an attractive shade to life you wrote about.

I hope you will continue with this nonfiction much to the reading pleasure of many of us.

Wishing you luck,

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Donna,

I find this non-fiction story very interesting and decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on your association with the WDC for one more year. Have a wonderful Anniversary.

The story is well told, making sense out of the paragraphs, which are well spaced. Each of them is linked in a lucid manner. Your language and style are smooth and spontaneous.

Jeff is the center of this personal story of memories. It is built around the Thanksgiving day. You take us down the memory lane showing the important and inspiring people and events.

The past here is definitely path-showing and added to your and Jeff's strengths of mind and character.

Every person described in the story had contributed to family happiness and support. In truth, families are our strengths in moments of sadness as well as gladness.

Thanks for sharing the experiences.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Dark Warrior,

Between the two static items in your port, I was attracted by this small introduction to I presume, for a big book. I am reviewing this for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for one more year. Have a lovely day!

The Utopian concept is interesting. Unlike Thomas More's original book, you have present day issues to face at the core of the story. The four departments you have mentioned are of great relevance to today's world. Your outline is pretty arresting.

You also talked of your family: father, a military person, Mom who fell sick and gone and yourself rendered homeless.

So how do you go about the future of this story that already has a germ of the idea to develop on. I think the kid needs to be educated first to understand the problems that his country has to address and later find solutions.

I look forward for further additions. Here's wishing you good luck for the same.

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Review of An angel's love ~  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Richard,

I came across this beautiful Shakespearean sonnet and I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing yet another year of association with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

A traditional poem with high imagination and telling imagery.

The poet discovers love of an angel in delightful circumstances. She, obviously had a mesmerizing effect on him and took him to the shores of pure love.

Description shows images of the two deeply in love.
"She taught me love there 'neath that azure sky,"

What appeals to me is the fact that the poet is as much in love with nature as he is with the "angel." Every line is punctuated with a blissful image of nature.

"Faint sounds of crystal waters dancing by,"

Precisely following the ab ab, cd cd, ef ef, gg rhyme scheme of the traditional sonnet, this poem flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The experiences you have shared here are well detailed and hold a lot of value. I understand that you value your grandfather above everything and above all others.

It must have been a hard life for you working in the store and having problems of husband and work place as well.

Mountains seem to be of capital importance for you. Indeed they are impressively described here. Only a person who loves them can portray them so well.

To a great extent you have talked about your family and the extended family as well. In my opinion our families are our strength.

You must have believed in certain statements you made like each person who died is an important part of our lives.
" Each person in your past can hold a key that will unlock the door to the future. "

I enjoyed the story and learnt a lot from your life.

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Review of Quietly Believing  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The most appealing aspect of this poem is that despite the absence of the soulmate, the poet feels his presence and is glad to accept the silence between them.

The strength and support that a soulmate can extend is seen through the poem. She is always full of his memories and so his presence is felt by her.

".in your quiet moments
listen within the depths of your soul"

This is love that is beyond the world, beyond the physical. This is forever.

Poem has a sweet ambiance about it. It is written with full commitment.

Free style poem flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Memories of childhood, of love and care and affection come flooding through this poem.
Each couplet shows a different aspect of the past where we pause and take delight alongside the poet. In the retrospect, the past always looks happy and more appealing than the present.

"My brother shared his boy toys 'cause he loved me somehow,"

Yet, childhood has its own pains, which go without expressing them.
"Seems my little brother David got all the good toys,"

The pain erases in the rush of other pleasures and the poet remembers only the joys of childhood.

Imagery shows a little girl trying to climb the gate to get out of the yard.
Her parents and brother busy in their own daily routine.

Rhyming couplets appeal to me with a smooth flow.

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Review of A Trip to Georgia  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sierra,

this non fiction story is quite appealing. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of one more year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

I find the trip to Georgia is well written, well detailed. All through the trip by road I can see the underlying tension about reaching Georgia as well as leaving Stella, North Carolina. This particular storm called Florence left a lot of destruction in its trail, I read. It was a devastating occurrence of a natural disaster that left many homeless. You have done the right thing at the right time, i.e. moving away from danger to a safe place.

The dogs suffered more than anyone else I understand. Road travel leaves us all very tired and hungry. I admire your patience and endurance. Trying to take care of the family under the threat of destruction is not an easy matter.

Every part of the trip is well shown and described. We can see the way your vehicles, three in number moved on the busy highway.

Language and style are a draw and it is my pleasure to read the whole episode and to get first hand information on Florence.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Chris,

I like this poem on love and decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year at the WDC as a creative writer and more. Have a wonderful day!

From the start of this rhyming poem, the descriptions you have given for love fit it like so many gloves. As I could see and feel, love has several faces and phases. Each and every one of them was a time-tested value. Love is for all times no matter which generation, age or country.

If there is one thing that binds humanity, it is love and a strong feeling that we belong to one family.

"Love will pay down fits very life
It endures despite the problem or strife"

Lines and line endings appeal to me.
Imagery too is a clear mirror to your thoughts.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting and curoius.
You described the undercurrent of tension that surrounded your lives.
I can visualize how tough it must have been, especially as kids to look over your shoulder to watch for danger. I can see it is not a free country anymore.
The boy must have realized some facts of life and saved himself from further damage.
Written in lucid and clear style, it makes as I said earlier, an interesting read.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Quite a vocal poem on love and the experience of being in it.
It sounds pretty special, when you said love brings not only passion but peace as well. Such a love is absolute bliss.

“It is peace that everybody needs”

The description of each day being a pleasant experience sounds so true. This is possible only with genuine love that surrounds you.

The rhthm adds appeal to the charming portrait of love.
It flows well with visual imagery

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Review of Love Slips Away  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The pain and hurt are clearly visible. It is a personal poem written in the rhyming scheme of AA BB.
Winning hearts is like winning a crown. Love is not physical attraction. Love is not love the changes over a period of time. It is enduring and endearing.
This poem shows that the lover forgets the present looks for new sights. For some, variety is the spice of life.

"She has clearly won"
Winner takes it all.

Imagery shows the highs and lows of life, of love in particular. Title is suits the content.

It flows fine.

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