Quite a vocal poem on love and the experience of being in it.
It sounds pretty special, when you said love brings not only passion but peace as well. Such a love is absolute bliss.
“It is peace that everybody needs”
The description of each day being a pleasant experience sounds so true. This is possible only with genuine love that surrounds you.
The rhthm adds appeal to the charming portrait of love.
It flows well with visual imagery
The pain and hurt are clearly visible. It is a personal poem written in the rhyming scheme of AA BB.
Winning hearts is like winning a crown. Love is not physical attraction. Love is not love the changes over a period of time. It is enduring and endearing.
This poem shows that the lover forgets the present looks for new sights. For some, variety is the spice of life.
"She has clearly won"
Winner takes it all.
Imagery shows the highs and lows of life, of love in particular. Title is suits the content.
The difficulty of celebrating Christmas in bleak circumstances is shown here. Through imagery and rhyming, the poet paints the picfure of “rumble of thunder” and the “ sorrowful dirge.”
The storm is personified and its “face” is apprehensive.
Composed in rhyming couplets, with telling imagery, it flows well.
Writeon!
This is the ultimate truth. Life owes us nothing. What about hope? I think we need to seek hope and happiness in life. The way to get the best out of life.
Going against the current would be a wasteful effort. We lose everything by doing so.
The way you talked about life is impressive..
Hi Roger,
This New Year poem is well composed. All that which could not be done might be achieved in the New Year.
“we anticipate what is yet to come”
Indeed, New Year starts like a bud and it blooms like a flower.
Imagery shows the aspirations we carry with us as another year dawns. Time to rejoice is here again.
This shows how dismaying the “writer’s block” is.
Poet’s regret is conveyed through a number of images like, “endless void” “candle flickers” and so on.
It is indeed strange that sometimes the pen refuses to put one sensible word on paper. Yet, the urge to write persists. I think this longing to write in itself is indicative of finding your voice again.
If I cannot write today, tomorrow I will certainly do so.
Thoughtful and true is how I found the poem. The common feeling about “walls” is a negative one. They cause differences and isolation.
This free-style poem is just the anti-thesis of that opinion. You showed their need for society.
It is amazing the way you brought in comparison of walls with poetry. The points are vital for growth and becoming of a society, a country.
A feel-good poem, bubbly and spirited.
Conversation shows fun and laughter. Images of two people free and fun-loving.
Hope and frankness can lit up a personality drawing others your way.
“silly
Happy
Perceptive”
Great ingredients to spread brihtness around.
Free-style poem that flows well.
There is no doubt that true love exists. The difference is that it cannot be defined comprehensively. Each person has his or her vision of love that is beyond the mere mundane. My view of it is to give affection and care unconditionally. There is no end to giving. There are no limits set to give and love.
If there are sacrifices to be made I am most unaware of them. My set goal would be just attend to the needs of the loved one, make him or her feel secure in your care and affection.
Without God's love there is no possibility of ever finding happiness. Love to fellow human beings is equal to love of God.
This article made me think of what love means to me.
The effect music is well visualized in this free style poem.
Each player does his best to bring out the immortality of music. Music to me, is a therapy for the mind, body and soul. Nothing transforms the world from misery to glory like music does.
"I float into the mist of the clouds."
Poet used imagination and emotion in equal proportion to bring out the impact that the music has on her or him.
Imagery focuses on the way the body and mind appear when waves of music surround the person.
This poem about anger is relevant to our present state of society. Anger at injustice, anger at poverty, illiteracy, corruption found everywhere, unjust way of treating the poor and many other things is seen all over the world.
As the poem indicates, it is anger that instigates the people to take to arms and violence.
"all the shooting and riots"
The chaos and confusion triggered by hot temperaments is well shown.
"The yelling, screaming, and slamming of doors,
And everytime worse than before."
Solutions to problems of this kind come from unexpected quarters. Each thinking person is a messiah to save our situation.
I find this poem quite powerful and it has a healing touch.
Many times I too am surrounded by darkness and life bewilders me. There are times when I stand completely lost thinking of what happens next. Life no longer is well planned. Mind and body submerge in a limbo. Everything is in suspension. It may fall apart soon.
It is during such periods of numbness that poems like this help me fight it and come through in one sound piece.
"I feel I am stuck in a quantum leap
and fumble around in the dark to try and find my way."
I wait for the inner light to shine on my darkness and find my way out of it.
It flows well with visual and mentally appealing imagery.
this poem about the undersea beauty is an appealing one. I chose to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of creative writing at the WDC. Have a wonderful Anniversary!
What is dominant about this free style poem is its color imagery. On the blue surface I visualize the various colored fish and sea plants and am amazed at the spectrum.
"Colours of pink, blues and reds.
A wonderland of coral."
Under sea, in the calm atmosphere, where the fish move in colonies, where exotic plants grow, must be a wonderful world of nature.
Appealing spiritual writing that bears some facts of our lives. Life is so full of different phases of thinking and understanding. Mind is in the process of evolving and becoming forever. Every day brings in new experiences that change attitudes and thinking patterns and processes.
You have mentioned quite a number of ways in which and why thinking happens.
"Comes the crumbling down the walls of bereavement, comes the fluency of fulfilled achievement. Never a loss, forever the gain, and you will become you over and over again."
The spark of hope and the shine of aspiration cannot be missed. Though there are a number of upheavals in life, to be positive is the key to stay collected and contented.
this tribute to your mother has an appeal for this reader. I chance upon this poem to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC.
Have a creative day!
Your memories of mom are vivid and fresh. You remember her touch, scent and the movement of her fingers on your hair. You must have been pretty close to her and being loved by her very much.
The piece sounds like a poem but not exactly so. It might be close to being a prose poem I guess. Imagery and imagination complement each other.
A mother is always loving and giving whatever be the age of her child. she is one of the supreme figures on earth.
I chose this spiritual verse to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year with the WDC. Have a lovely day!
You spoke to God as though He is your friend and companion. I could see the proximity you enjoy with Him. It seems as though He is your sap and energy, He is your hope and aspiration and He is the ray that shines on your personal darkness if there is any.
"You’ll be my Peace, my Strength, my Guide
Till Heaven’s gates are opened wide."
Nothing goes wrong for those who believe in Him as the way you do. The peace you seem to draw from His strength appears endless and blessed.
Imagery shows the devotee on her knees before Him and her devotion to Him is absorbing.
I picked this romantic verse to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year of association with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This poem is romantic to the core. The person frankly admits his unconditional love for his beloved. His, love, his time and his whole being is dedicated to the happiness and love of his ladylove.
"My Love, my Time, my Life
This I give to you"
Refrain-
Each stanza ends with the refrain, "This I give to you". It sort of lends a tone of commitment and dedication to the person addressed. It makes the reader believe the promises made in the poem.
A simple poem with lines and word endings have a rhythm of their own. Imagery appeals and the flow is spontaneous.
I came upon this nice poem on nature to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year with the WDC. Have a great day!
This is a nature poem that explores the beauty of the night and the glory of the day. The sun and moon are the ruling elements which you have done your best to show in bright colors.
In the first stanza you showed the grassy fields, made me listen to the rhythms of air. You evidently love your "moors."
Land's beauty attains a new glow in the moonlit night.
"The moon did its job of lighting the fields."
I find a steady rhyme scheme in the second stanza.
I am reviewing this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of association with the WDC. Have a delightful day!
This a nice lyrical poem with which I can relate. You talked about a man waiting to whisk your heart away. Exactly what I too anticipate. He is waiting somewhere to find me and bring me to his side. Needless to mention I too wait with equal fervor.
"Oh, I am here and waiting
Through sun and wind swept day"
Your imagination finds equal images. Imagery appeals to me. It is sharply visual.
Lines and words are simple and set to win the praise of the reader.
I understand how it feels when others don’t share your love for nature. In these times of social media, the cell phone can provide sights and sounds of nature, world and the universe.
You have a fine way of convincing the family of your good intentions. Well, looks like they prefer phone messages to breath-taking vistas of nature.
Wife’s guess is proved right.
May be subsequent excursions might be found more interesting.
This happens to be an expressive poem on hope. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of association with the WDC. Have a lovely day!
To go into the arms of hope consciously is not an easy task, especially if surrounded by darkness.
"And as I lay in
quiet darkness, "
A narrow "crack" under the door is enough to let the light seen by the one in darkness. Darkness and light are shown simultaneously, which is what life comprises.
It is through appealing imagery that I could see the grief and its antidote prompted by God.
The recovery program is well expressed in this poem. The bleed in the brain, the result of inaction and numbness are well pictured in this Synchronicity. As explained in the end, all the incidents are meaningfully related.
The twist that occurs at the end bodes well for the sufferer.
Imagery shows the first alarming state. Progress too is expressed in detail with brevity.
" to read,
Walk straight, drive, open doors and be
Normal."
It seems as though death is striding through the world plunging on unfortunate victims.
"I stalk your night in dress of blood,
a trail of bodies clings to me,"
The list of sufferings and the means to die are true to life pictures.
The whole poem is painted in dark and the face of the killer is hidden behind the mask of bloodshed and pain which are a way to appease his thirst.
I enjoyed this non-fiction story and feel glad to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being an active member of the WDC for one more year. Have a wonderful day!
This story is well detailed and the events that took place are shown with clarity. I am impressed that Martha and Emil have such friends, who wouldn't hesitate to come out in a blizzard to help them.
You have described the weather and Emil's fears regarding taking his wife to the hospital safely in appropriate terms.
By God's grace everything went well and the first-time-parents had their "Gift of Love" safely delivered to them.
The prose style is unimpeded and makes it easy for me to read and enjoy the story.
Write on!
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