This may be fiction, but it's so real that it did have me crying at the end. Yes, technical language is included, but as you indicated, it was necessary for the story.
Another wonderful storoem. Maybe it's the emotional time of year, or perhaps the words were just right to touch my heart. But the tears did come with this one.
To me, anything is possible at Christmas, and you've proven it again.
Angela, dear, it's never too late. You're only in your 30's and I know you have computer access. Today, there are so many ways to complete classes over the Internet - starting with GED and going through college degrees.
Some classes don't even require that you've completed high school. If I were you, I'd do some checking into that.
You're right, though. We all must learn to disregard what others say when they think we cannot do something.
This is a good incentive for anyone needing gift points. Between this and contests, it helps those who have trouble having enough gift points to buy or renew memberships.
I stopped by after I noticed another reviewer asking how one could "cheat."
I've often wondered about those public reviews that have just a word or two and a huge signature or links to the reviewer's portfolio. Hmmm.
As always, you have the answers for those who care to find them - this time about the daily review rewards.
My goodness, this one made me blush. Yes, I still do that even though I've reach the dinosaur age. That made me wonder if this should be rated higher - 18+.
Anyway, I do have one suggestion:
What we maily hear (Should be mainly)
Have to rush off now. Not sure if it's that blushing thing, a hot flash...or something else.
I saw this mentioned in public reviews. It is an excellent idea for a forum - writers with disabilities. I'm amazed as I visit with writers here, how many are suffering some kind of disability.
I have lots of things going on physically myself. Haven't worked (except for a short 6 weeks) for over 2 1/2 years.
What fun this was! You can't go wrong, in my mind, writing about your pets. I love this format too. Glad you mentioned the wet kisses. Nothing better than your best fur buddies kisses.
Good job! I like the repetition. Even though there doesn't have to be any "formula" for a poem like this, I still might shorten a few lines if it were mine.
Interesting thoughts. I think punctuation is necessary. It allows us (not tells us) to pause to take a breath as we read aloud. And as you so aptly pointed out, if there was no punctuation, the words would almost be at war with each other.
Well done! To be able to describe loneliness or being alone in so few words takes talent. I'm impressed. Good word crafting. (And I guess I do envy folks who can weave meaning with few words. I can't!)
Well done! To be able to describe loneliness or being alone in so few words takes talent. I'm impressed. Good word crafting. (And I guess I do envy folks who can weave meaning with few words. I can't!)
I love it! Rhyme, rhythm and message are all wonderful. This is simple enough that a child could read and understand. Especially the beginning lines. But the message is both simple and deep.
A pretty good poem. Probably familiar feelings for many, since long distance relationships seem to be on the rise.
Some here will suggest that capital letters and punctuation make poems easier to read. Perhaps they do, although there have been famous poets who ignore them.
I might change some things - making the lines have a more even rhythm.
For instance:
yellow crayon sunshine, skies of ocean blue
I'd make that:
yellow crayon sunshine,
skies of ocean blue
Interesting poll. I think the thing that bothers me about our borders not being secure is what was covered on the news yesterday - that terrorists can enter easily.
Having lived in areas where there were lots of illegals working - in FL and in TX - I can tell you that they usually took jobs no one else wanted. That's been the case for years and years.
Yes, those businessmen could be forced to pay better wages so that Americans would want the jobs. That would also mean that we'd all pay more for the crops they pick.
Good job. I was at St. Patrick's myself as a teen - many years ago. I've never forgotten the visit, nor the feelings I had while inside. Like you, I wasn't a Catholic. But the beauty of the place was amazing. And I did feel God's presence there, I'm certain.
Your description was good. I imagine you cut and pasted from another program, so you might want to format differently here.
And...be sure to let us know what happened to the building.
This is beautiful, got words?. I'm sorry your lost your Father. But these words that comforted you, might comfort others as well. I've put this in my favorites folder, in fact. My own parents are elderly and not well, so I may need this reminder myself one day soon.
I liked this! It's short, but it does say quite a bit - about you and about your writing too. "Gravid dreams"...good phrase, good description! (Some might even have to look that one up!)
Amen! Well written and well said. I love titles and they often draw me to a piece of writing. But I am certainly turned away just as quickly at the accompanying description that begs for ratings or, worse, tells that the poem or story is lousy. Indeed. Why bother.
You've said it all...
Blessings,
Kenzie
P.S. Folks could take a lesson from your own description. It does explain quite well.
Cute story. Makes me think of my own brother when he was a kid, though. If someone had told him there was a sock monster, he probably would have never worn socks again or gone near the dryer either. (Someone did tell him there was something in the basement and he didn't go there for 2 years!)
Whew. You've told this horrible story so well. My heart is still pounding - as if I had actually experienced the storm. (Maybe since I've lived on the Gulf Coast of FL and TX I really can "feel" the experience.)
I know one individual whose home was tortured by the 4 storms that went through FL. With each one, FEMA gave him a check to repair, but contractors were all tied up. When the last storm struck, there was not much left. But he and his pets survived.
I think that's what's really amazing - that so much material destruction happened, but lives were saved.
Thanks for sharing. I've considered moving back into hurricane land...but after this year, I'm just not so sure...
I love you title! And your article is right on. Sometimes it is okay to use the passive voice. (I wonder...have you been on the receiving end of some reviews saying otherwise? I know I have!)
Thanks for the reminder. You're right. There are no absolutes.
Good poem - and story. Sorry if you've had some bad results in reviewing. We all have. That doesn't mean we should give up.
And you know...about this verse:
And those ones who cannot write,
Well, I'll just bid them goodnight.
Ha! Let them write complete dreck,
It's no skin off my, er, neck!
I've been reading and writing for longer than lots of folks here have even been alive. Sometimes...folks who start out writing horribly are the very ones who get published. Go figure.
Blessings,
Kenzie
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