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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Way to go, dear. Glad Crystal is walking.

Your writing is always good. Funny, though, going back and reading some of these chapters now does make me wonder just a tiny bit whether Crystal and Erik sound "real." Maybe they sound like we all wish things could be.

Hugs,
Mmmmmmmmmm

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Review of 1969  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Good job. This certainly took me back in time. I was telling someone just the other day that I knew my bank had ATM services available in the early 70's. You just confirmed that. *Smile* You were born in a great year for music.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
What an experience...and you told it so well. *Bigsmile* I'm certain we'll all rush to this doc real soon. Not.

It is amazing that medical professionals(?) can learn so much but not have any social graces.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

P.S. I'm one of those who can't see the big "E" without my contacts.
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a great list of recommendations/favorites. I had to check out a bunch of them, and I have to agree that they're tops!

There are some dead/invalid links in this one, though, since it's been a while since you updated it.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
These are some excellent words of wisdom. I love that you used sardine sandwiches and whales to make your point. *Bigsmile*

I particularly loved these lines:

Don't be afraid to be different and mix it up if it works for you and your readers. If your readers tell you that what you are doing is confusing, listen to them, especially if they tell you something is not clear.

However, if your readers just recite archaic rules that they don't really understand themselves, don't let it change the way you write.


Of course, as you pointed out earlier in this one, knowing the rules is pretty important before trying to break them.

The only thing(s) I might change on this one would be changing sentences that end in prepositions. But that's me. *Smile*

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Interesting poll...and results thus far. To me, sayings are wise words passed on from generation to generation. They've lasted...so they must have some value to them. *Smile*

A suggestion:

When a person is having problems or dealing with a difficult situation there are saying that are given as advice. Some of these saying are irritating and not helpful at the time.

Which of the following saying irritate you?

Didn't you mean "sayings" in each of these lines?

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of THANKS, GOD!  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I'm glad this one was mentioned in the Spiritual Newsletter. It's a great poem/pray of thanks to God. I'm certain He was pleased.

Human folks, however are a bit more picky than God. *Smile*

May there lives be filled with cheer
(Should be their}

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Smile*"Hearing" a song about hunger and G8 reminded me of ballads of the 60's about all the world's ills.

My only problems were:

A child
That (I'd say who)

And...

What if they...(Since it's one child, I'd say "What if he" or "What if she.")

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie


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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome to Writing.com. We're glad you're here.

These are some good questions. I do think, however, that talking about one love as "they" sounds a bit off.

Instead of asking:

How do you know they are "the one"?
Is it thier smile?
Their Laugh?


Wouldn't it make more sense to ask:

How do you know he/she is "the one"?
Is it his/her smile?
His/her Laugh?

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of The Nature of Man  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wooo. This surely makes man out to be something pretty horrible. I never thought of mankind being so bad. I know humans are selfish folks, but I really hate to think that we only interact with others who can be of use to us. Yikes.

The only thing I would suggest is in formatting: I would put spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read.

Thanks for sharing. (I think.)

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Way to advise writers! There are many famous writers whose books will never clutter my shelves, but that doesn't stop them from writing (and selling!). *Bigsmile* We can never please everyone. The important thing is to write because we must. As you said, "Is writing something that feeds you, something that makes you stronger, that makes you want to live a few days longer?"

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

P.S. The first time I read (raced, more accurately) through this, I thought I saw one place where a question mark should have been used instead of a period. But as I went back over it, I couldn't find that place again. Maybe someone else can help.

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Review of The Final Goodbye  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful story. *Smile* One has to be sorry about the loss of a loved one, but happy that the loved one was able to say good-bye in this way. It also proves that kids are so much more able to accept things that just shouldn't be.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Tonight  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed "seeing" this poem. *Smile* I guess as a writer, it's easy to imagine words that "dance out of reach." Some will probably comment about the need for punctuation. No punctuation in a poem doesn't bother me as long as the breaks (and breaths) are evident in the writing. Yours are. *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing. And welcome to Writing.com.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of A Hole in Me  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Bless your heart. Formatting this a bit differently - more like poetry - would help. It is poetic. *Smile*

Another reviewer thought there was a confusion here, but I think that confusion is what it's all about. Too many have never really known their dads.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought for sure I had already read and commented on this one. I know I read the explanation piece. *Smile*

For me, this one required two readings to get the meaning. But that's not always such a bad thing.

Perhaps there is a bit too much repetition of some words, which does tend to make one's mind wander. (Mine anyway.)

I might change this string:
smiling faces, sleeping faces, peaceful faces, joyful faces

to:
smiling faces, sleeping, peaceful and joyful faces

Threads, of course, are your main focus. (Besides the window/eyes.) But I wonder if you might use another word for thread now and then as well. Just a thought.

Anyway, thanks for making me ponder.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Independence Day  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
And excellent recount of your escape. Those last sentences say so much:

No, it was not only independence day for me, but also independence day for future generations in my family. The circle of violence was broken; I had won the war.

That's what women who fear leaving should remember. It isn't only the woman who is hurt in abusive relationships. Kids suffer too. (And in Michigan at least, the abused parent is held just as responsible for keeping kids in such an environment.)

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of "Quailty" is King  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Some more interesting thoughts and opinions. *Smile* I might add something about the affect unions have had on our country. They certainly had a purpose years ago. And I must admit that my dad was a union man, so I know my family benefited. But that greed factor certainly crept into unions. Big time.

Recently, I worked in a union job myself for a few weeks. What I discovered was that I would pay dues each pay period for a year before I'd ever see any real benefits. And then they weren't very good ones. The union had almost no power anymore to help its members. But because these particular jobs are mostly union ones, it means that the workers are paid astonishingly high wages for pretty simple tasks - answering phones mostly. *Smile* I liked being paid about $16 per hour in training...until I realized that was part of the reason why everyone I know pays so much just to use a telephone.

Anyway, good writing. Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of My Biography  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Joan Author IconMail Icon. We're glad you're here!

I wondered if you didn't want to use this as your bio block, rather than take up an item in your portfolio.
If so, go to my account and you'll find the bio block space there.

Also...you misspelled level.

Thanks for sharing and welcome aboard.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
These are wonderful words about your mother. It's also rather short. I'm betting there's a bit more to tell - and what she's done for you and about how you were saved (although those might be two different writings).

Thanks for sharing and welcome to Writing.com. We're glad you're here.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of My Legacy  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's good to ponder what we will leave to the world when we pass on. And you have some good ideas here. Indeed, writing is something wonderful to leave behind!

Some suggestions:

I might try reading this one aloud. That might show where you could add or subtract a word here and there to make this flow more evenly.

Also:

A persons value is not measured by what they have when they die,
But by the things they do and the people impacted by their life,

Since you're talking about one person here, it follows that he/she shouldn't be referred to as "they."

Better:
A person's (you do need the apostrophe) value is not measured by what he has before he dies,
But by the things he does and the people impacted by his life,

And...

It is a voice looking for a home be can not be simply said,

I'm not really sure what's wrong or missing in that line. Maybe it should be "but cannot be..."?

Thanks for sharing. And write on!

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Jonah's Journey  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Bless your heart. I just read all the entries in this journal/book and by the third one the tears were streaming down my face. Writing this has to be good for you. It will help remind you of all the good things, as well as the "bad" about having such a special child. It should also be helpful to those whose children are just as challenging. *Smile*

As I read through this, I realized how "easy" I had it with my son, since his Asperger's Syndrome is just a mild or high-functioning form of autism. But I also realized why my son was the only one in our neighborhood who could help with the kid with "real" autism - because he did understand. And now that he's an adult, our discussions touch on what it was like to be in his own world as a kid.

And as we both hear things in the neighborhood that no one else seems to hear and see bugs crawling on the ground that no one else even notices, I wonder if I, too, had this mild autism. Or did I learn to be "different" like my son so I could relate to his world.

Thanks again for sharing this one. I'll come back another time to read more about Jonah. For now I'm cried out.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Rating Inflation!  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
There's some good advice here - for writers and readers. Good for you.

It has been rare that I've found something to read here that warrants a 1 or 1.5 (unless it was for a contest where the writers were trying to write badly). When I have, though, I have preferred reviewing/rating privately. Some disagree with my thinking on this, but I do think praise (and mild criticism) may be done in public. Harsher criticism, in my opinion, should be done privately. But that's just me.

The only thing I would change on this one would be this line: Ratings are not worth anything substantial, while grades are.

It may not be totally incorrect, but I just don't like ending sentences this way. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
If this one is passed along, you'll likely get some angry responses. *Smile* I think you've stated the case well, along with links to substantiate your allegations.

I did wonder if:

the person that turns to them for leadership, for council, for empowerment?

...might be better as:

the person who turns to them...

As I read this, I remembered something my college boyfriend's roommate said to me way back in 1970. I've never forgotten it. He said, "If I can't convert you, I have to kill you." That prompted quite a discussion about the differences between Muslims and Christians, and we agreed that religious fanatics are pretty much all the same. Still, his comment both haunted and frightened me at varying times throughout my lifetime.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Unused words  Open in new Window.
Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is some word search. Some of my regular dictionary companions *Smile* didn't even have the definitions for some of these. I had to dig deeper.

Thanks for sharing...I think. *Smile* It made me realize how many words are still out there that I haven't yet me.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome to Writing.com. We're glad you're here.

Perhaps this story needs some breaks where the scenes change. It's a bit confusing without them.

Also:

i have to go back to my business.
Should be "I".

which he have so patiently tried to put together last night.
which he had...

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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