This is quite good. It reminds me almost of a forbidden love. The type of love that is just unattainable. Your poem had good form and meter. It's easy to read and there are no errors. Your descriptive wording builds an image in the readers mind that carries through the poem. Nice work.
I love cats and I really love this poem. It is very well written and the words flow so freely from the page. I can see the precious little kitty all curled up soft and warm. The form and meter are great and it has no errors. Thanks for sharing this poem.
There is much to think about after reading this poem in my opinion. It is very inspirational and poses many solid questions. The content of the poem is great but I do feel that the form and meter could be approved upon. With that being said, I didn't find any errors and this is very good writing. Happy writing my friend.
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"Flower"
What a beautiful description of a flower's life. Through your words I was able to see the flower in its splendor and also in its demise. I would have preferred to see this wonderful item in a different form though. I feel the block paragraph takes away from the elegance of this piece. Good luck in the challenge.
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""No More Softball for You!""
The end of this story made me cry. I know parents just like Tori's dad that blame everything on their kids. My mom did that to me once in the exact same situation here. I wasn't even home when it happened. Really great story, well paced with no errors. Thanks for sharing it.
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"The Last Job"
I have to hand it to Joe for doing what he did for those girls. I'm just sorry it was too late. This is an awesome story. Your characterization of Frank and Joe is perfect. The reader gets to know them through your words. Nice form with no errors, this was a good read.
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"The Ghost of Balsam Lane"
What a story! I was convinced that there was actually a ghost and the twist at the end was not at all what I expected. This is very well written. There are no errors and it has great form. I really enjoyed this story and the message it brings to the readers. Awesome work my friend.
You tell an amusing little story here. I find the humor mostly in man thinking he can fix everything. Will they ever learn. Your story is well paced and easy to read. There are however a few spelling and grammatical error. They can be fixed easily with spell check. Overall though, you did a great job. Good luck in the challenge.
This is an amazing collection of poems and short stories. I am truly in awe of your talent. These are all well written and have great form and meter. The short stories are well characterized and very easy to follow. I would be quite proud of these. Wonderful work my friend.
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I have never done any travelling in my life but after reading this I feel like I have been in your beautiful Friuli. The vivid imagery in this story gave me goosebumps as I have never experienced anything so beautiful. This piece is flawless. Thanks for sharing it.
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There is something about this poem that sparked a response in me I never expected. This poem is not like any I have read before. I find myself drawn to it trying to absorb its essence. Remarkable writing, great form and meter and no errors. Write on fellow poet.
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Overall Impression
This is certainly a very interesting story with the characterization of Cancer as a creep. You told an awesome story about the afflictions of this deadly disease and the role it plays in one's family.
Form & Meter
The form and meter of this story are well done. It is well paced and easy to read.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors were found in this piece.
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Overall Impression
I find it's always easier to say on paper what we can't in person. I believe it was quite hard for you to write this but you did a great job. It shows true emotion and regret.
Form & Meter
Both of these elements are well done
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I did not see any errors throughout this item.
Ideas & Suggestions
Let your creativity flow.... write on!
It seems like you have had your share of ups and downs. I am so pleased that things have worked out for you and that you found a place where you can feel validated. Being a part of WDC makes us feel like we have family all over the world. I truly enjoyed your heart-warming and inspiring tribute.
In your intro you said "I found all that I needed when I joined WDC", that to me says everything. For all of us on here it has something we all need in one way or another. I admire your courage and tenacity for not giving up. This tribute is beautifully written and is error free.
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"Viranda, the Hunted"
What an awesome poem. It gave me chills as I read it. It portrays, in my opinion, the true essence of a vampire. Your told the story well. This poem has terrific form and meter and there were no errors found. I truly enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the challenge.
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"Freedoms last hope"
What a lovely poem. It speaks of hope and joy and the possibility of freedom and the words flow ofthe page with ease. Nice Work! It has great form and meter, the rhyme scheme is well done and I didn't see any errors. This was certainly a joy to read. Write on my friend.
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"Bhadraksh"
You told this fisherman's story very well. It's well composed, light-hearted and educational. It gives the reader some insight as to how this man lived his life and the losses he suffered. I found it very easy to read and there are no errors. Keep up the good work my friend.
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Overall Impression
This poem is beautifully written. I feel that the message you were trying to send comes across loud and clear. It almost makes the reader feel sorry for the subject of the poem because his or her feeling aren't reciprocated.
Form & Meter
Both of these elements were done very well.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors were found in this poem.
Ideas & Suggestions
Write on my friend, you have an admirable talent.
Very powerful and deep poem. Speaking from experience it will get better. As hard as this was for you to write you did a remarkable job. The form is great and the words flow freely from the page engulfing the reader temporarily into your world of pain. Great poem, keep up the good work.
I hear you! Coming from a walking pharmaceutical I certainly can relate. I like the form in which you wrote this. It's carefree, whimsical and quite funny. We all need more humor in our lives, maybe we wouldn't need as many PILLS!!!!! Nice write but the form and meter could use some work. Good luck in the challenge.
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"Angels Sliding On Rainbows"
Wouldn't it be nice if we all could have just one day in the land of make believe. Your story is filled with the joys and pleasures of a fantasy world and sounds like alot of fun. It's uplifting, cheery and gives the reader a burst of sunshine. Good composition with no errors. Nice job!
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"Another World"
What a remarkable and well told story. I feel as if I met your aunts with you. Your characterization of Edna and Celia is terrific. I didn't have a hard time at all envisioning them. This piece has very good composition, is well paced and had no errors. I enjoyed reading this and getting to know a part of you.
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"Trees in Summer"
I have always been amazed at how something so short can say so much. The same is true with your poem. I have a very large tree out in front of my house and it is astonishing how it seems to go from "twiggy" to abundantly leafy almost without notice. I think your poem is simply lovely. It's fresh, has good form and meter and I didn't see any errors. Good luck in the challenge my friend.
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