My name is Damiana.
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"Prism bands reflected upon my soul!"
This is a beautifully vivid poem with great form, rhyme and meter. The words flow freely from the page and allow the reader to be swept away. It's refreshing and uplifting. I truly enjoyed reading it. There were no errors throughout this piece. Nice work fellow poet. Write On!
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My name is Damiana.
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"Horror Story"
This isn's a bad story. It has a good plot and enough suspense and mystery to keep the reader interested. I do feel however that the story is rushed. You have crammed so much into such a little story, I feel it take away from the full impact this could have. I think if you drag it out a bit more, shorten your paragraphs and add more drama, this story would be awesome. I did see one or two errors but nothing that takes away from the story. The above are only suggestions. Good luck.
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You have painted such a wonderfully vivid picture with this story if was as if I too could smell the cherry blossoms. It is written perfectly, had great form and meter with no errors. I think you did a fantastic job with this. Keep up the good work my friend.
How true the words in this poem are. I think it is lovely. It's well written, spoken from the heart and carries alot of meaning and purpose. Additionally, it it had great form and meter and no errors. I hope you have enjoyed my open and true review.
Sincerely,
Damiana
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I found that looking for everyday words was much harder than looking for specific things such as names or places. This puzzle was more challenging than most I do but I still had fun. My time of 4:24 wasn't too bad. I thought the words were laid out differently than most puzzles too. They were mostly all at the bottom. I don't think we have control of that though. Great puzzle, thanks for sharing it.
I almost drove myself crazy with this one. Alot of the words were in the puzzle more than once. It was pretty hard. I like the challenge though. Just the kind of thing one needs to get them up and on the go first thing in the morning. Thanks for sharing it.
When I saw the title jealousy I assumed this was going to be a very harsh poem. The green-eyed monster type but I was suprised by this very subtle and well written piece. You have captured the essence of jealousy in it's mildest form. The poem has nice form and meter and no errors. Great write poet.
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My name is Damiana.
I will be reviewing your entry for this weeks Challenge!
"The Invisible Line to Middle-Age"
This was a pure delight to read. I have to admit I am there too... Although most of my friends tell me I don't look my age. What does that mean anyway? Your story was awesome, light-hearted, funny and well written. Your form and meter are right on as was the spelling and grammar. Bravo! Good Luck in the challenge.
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Short, sweet and to the point. A nice read to take your mind off the stressors of everyday life. Simple in it's composition but strog in the message it brings. Good form and meter and no errors. Nice work fellow poet. I wish you well in the challenge.
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My name is Damiana.
I will be reviewing your entry for this weeks Challenge!
"employee of the month"
What a cute little story. I have to say it is rather original and unique. Who would have thought it would cause hate and discontent within the family. I guess most kids react the same way no matter what the competition. The story had good form and meter and I didn't notice any errors. Nice write my friend. Good luck in the challenge.
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A truly painful subject to write about but the way this poem comes across is quite good. The harsh reality of what really happened during the holocaust is hidden between the lines of this poem and what we get is more appealing to the eyes and heart. All of us have suffered the injustices of this horrbile memory in one way or another. I feel this poem pays tribute to those who were most effected by it. Great work fellow poet.
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This is one of the most uniquely designed poems I have ever seen. Interesting concept as well. The way you described empathy with the use of colors is very original. Nice job. You have good form and meter, the poem is easy to read and I didn't notice any errors.
Good luck in the challenge.
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This was quite an interesting and funny little story. I feel bad for the poor old Vamp, he gave away everything he had for nothing. I guess the moral of the sotry is always do what you are told. I should read this to my kids. I felt the story had good form and meter, and I didn't see any spelling errors. Great job my friend, good luck in the challenge.
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You have a wonderfully descriptive poem here that allows the reader to become absorbed into the cool and refreshing essence of the river. As I read it, I could almost hear the water rushing past me as it flows over the rocks. It was a great way to start my morning.
The poem has good form, the meter is fine and there are no errors that I could see. Nice work fellow poet. I wish you luck in the challenge.
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My name is Damiana.
I will be reviewing your entry for this weeks Challenge!
"Trees in Spring"
I often find that short poems really don't say enough for you to grasp the contents of what the person is trying to convey. This poem on the other hand is completely different! With just a few short words you have captured the essence of Spring and new life from a budding tree. Wonderful job poet. Good luck in the challenge.
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Wickedly challenging puzzle but I completed it in 7:35. I didn't think it would take me that long. Some of the easiest names were the hardest to find. Thanks for sharing it.
This is spectacular. The photo you included with this story is breath-taking. I had never heard of this lake before but after reading this short story it feels like a place I would like to visit. Your memories of it seem to be etched in your mind as if you were there just yesterday. thank you for sharing a part of your past with us.
The way you have described this place makes it sound like heaven. This is simply a beautiful work of art. The words flow so freely from the page and the mental image you get from the words had me sighing, wishing I was there. It is majestic. Well written, great form and meter and no errors. Great work Judity.
This is quite good. Your characterizations are well done, the storyline is great and the ending was awesome. It leaves the reader wanting more. Great work. I felt that the form and meter were well done too. I didn't see any errors either. I hope you don't edit it too much, I think it is great as it is.
Some of the experiences you write about in this poem are shared by many. I found this poem to be full of raw and powerful emotion. It seems that the subject of this poem has seen the error of their ways and it ready to make a change.
The form of this poem is good and the meter is fine. The rhyme shceme works well in this poem too. Keep up the good work.
Poor Jake...he certainly seems to have gotten himself into a heap of trouble. Violet Blue seems to be the cause. This story is getting very interesting. I am anxious to get to the next chapter.
I found this segment to be well written with good form and meter, and I didn't see any errors. Keep up the awesome writing.
The title of this story got my attention and now that I have read it I have to say I am impressed. I found it to be light-hearted, funny and uniquely spiritual. I got a good laugh when she found out who was going to wash her feet. Wonderful write my friend.
The form and meter of this story are very well done, however I did see one or two small spelling errors. Good luck in the challenge.
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You have painted a very vivid picture of a forest fire. I could see it burning out of control as I read this piece and could picture life restoring itself after the damage was done. Great work.
The form, meter and rhyme scheme in this poem are superbly done and I found no spelling errors. Good luck in the challenge.
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My name is Damiana.
I will be reviewing your entry for this weeks Challenge!
" Dust Bunny"
I absolutely love this poem! It's cute, funny, colorful and so easy to read. It would be perfect for children. I plan on reading it to mine later. And I am sure all of us can relate to the dust bunny. I know I can with 7 cats and one big hairy dog!
Your form and meter are divine and the rhyming pattern is spot on. There are no errors in this poem either. Really great job, good luck in the challenge.
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