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" Dust Bunny"
I absolutely love this poem! It's cute, funny, colorful and so easy to read. It would be perfect for children. I plan on reading it to mine later. And I am sure all of us can relate to the dust bunny. I know I can with 7 cats and one big hairy dog!
Your form and meter are divine and the rhyming pattern is spot on. There are no errors in this poem either. Really great job, good luck in the challenge.
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You did a good job with this poem. I found it to be light hearted and whimsical. It even gave me a chuckle.
Your rhyme scheme is great but the meter is off slightly. Not so much as to really effect this poem though. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors, so all in all, this is really good work.
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"A Moment in Time"
Great write poet. I really enjoyed the way you constructed this piece. It shows the reader how the simple things in life can make lasting memories for years to come. From the things we see in childhood all the way into our golden years.
The form and meter are well done and I only saw one error: facinated=fascinated.
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I found this poem to have a very strong message attached to it. You chose your words well and they made this poem sing. The form and meter are well done and I didn't find any errors. I think the last line is the most powerful of the whole poem. Great work poet, good luck in the challenge.
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What a lovely work of art. I can feel the emotion you put into this piece as I read it. It has a very serene quality to it and made me feel warm and relaxed.
The form and meter are great and it flowed wonderfully. There were no spelling or grammitcal errors. You did a really good job with this. Good luck in the challenge.
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What an awesome start. Your characterization is good and the content of the story gets the readers attention.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Although no rhyme pattern is present, the form of this story is very well done and the meter is great. The paragraphs are spaced evenly so that the reader isn't getting caught up in a bulk of a story.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't find any errors at all.
Ideas & Suggestions
Great start, let's see where chapter 2 goes! Write on!
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I have always wanted to learn to play the organ but never did. This story reminds me of the days I used to sit in front of my little lap organ crying because I couldn't get the songs right. I am glad you had more structured lessons. This is a great story. I really enjoy reading about your life. thanks for sharing it with us.
Form & Meter
I don't see any problems with these. The form is very well done.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors were found in this story. It is written very well.
Ideas & Suggestions
I have none for thi story.
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This is quite a comedic little story. I would have called it "Procrastination". It's something we all can relate too. I know I'm guilty. Your story gave me a much needed chuckle today, thanks.
Form & Meter
The meter in this story wasn't bad but I do feel that the form needs some editing. I find it very difficult reading something in block form. If you seperated your paragraphs, it would read easier and also be aesthetically pleasing.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
The only error I found was at the end, you forgot the "r" in resource.
Ideas & Suggestions
None other that the one previously mentioned.
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"Did You Daddy?"
Tragic, heart-wrenching story but unfortunately very true for many children. Reading things like this, true or not, make me cringe. You evoked powerful emotions in this reader and for that I have to say "Great job".
There were no spelling errors in this poem and the meter and form are fine. I wish you luck in the challenge.
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"Face at the Window"
Very deep and disturbing poem. Part of me can relate. Your message is clear and the feeling and emotion you put into this piece are felt by the reader.
The form of this piece is well done, as is the meter. I didn't find any spelling mistakes either. Great work poet. Good luck in the challenge.
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"A Pocketful of Starlight"
Superbly written story. I can relate to this on a personal level and it touched me deeply. Miscarriage is one of life's great mysteries. Unless you have experienced it, one will never know what it's like.
This story takes the reader on a roller coaster ride of emotions. The form and meter are well done and the only error I saw was the period at the end of the word "exhilaration", it was over one space too far.
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"It Could Happen To You Too...."
I got the best laugh I have had all week from this story. Awesome write friend. The best part was that I could actually see you standing there mortified. And knowinf myslef the way I do I would be just like your mom! Oh no two of us!!!
Form and meter are great. No spelling errors were found. Great job!
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"Just Yesterday"
Oh how time flies! All parents I think feel the same way when it comes to their children growing up. Your poem gives a light-hearted look at this. I often joke about mine and how I couldn't wait for them to walk and talk, now it's sit down and be quiet. Nice write poet.
I felt the form and meter are fine and no spelling errors were found. Good luck in the challenge.
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"Heard With New Ears"
The struggles you face in this poem are made very clear and so are the emotions. They come out strong and bold and catch the readers attention. Nice write.
I found the form and meter in these lyrics to be well done and there weren't any spelling errors. Good luck in the challenge.
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"One Last Time"
This is a lovely heart-felt poem. I am truly sorry for your loss. You expressed yourself well in this poem.
This poem reads like a free form so I don't think that this outline works well. The meter is fine and I didn't see any spelling errors. Overall, this is good writing.
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Well I think I have heard it all now. This is a very amusing little poem. I can remember back in my younger years saying alot of the same things. Kids still find it pretty funny.
You have good form in this poem but the meter is slightly off. Try and adjust it so that the flow is seamless. I found the rhyme pattern quite good and I didn't see any spelling errors. If you need any help you can visit the forum below. Good Luck in the challenge.
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This is really good and you are right most women do love flowers. I do too but I would much rather receive 1 real rose and a bouquet of artifical ones. Why you might ask? Because they die. If I have a dozen beautiful artificial roses they will last me a lifetime. Just as long as the love in my heart for the person who gave them to me. Call me weird but I like to think of myself as one of a kind.
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What a beautiful story full of loving memories. I enjoyed this story and it made me think back to the times I spent with my family. Great write friend.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are all very well done.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't see any errors.
Ideas & Suggestions
This is wonderful the way it is.
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The struggle for peace on this earth amongst all the evil is a life long battle. Your poem is a good representation of that. Good work.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are all ok.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No spelling errors were found but I do feel that each line should start with a capital letter.
Ideas & Suggestions
Only those mentioned above.
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