Overall Impression
What a cute poem about a tough little princess. I can relate, I have 2 of them. This is sweet and brought a smile to my face.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No problems with any of these.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are all well done. I did find one small problem with this line:Dressed in purple and pink, the flow in this line doesn't match the stanza. If you added an "in" in front of pink, the probem would be solved. Just a suggestion of course.
Ideas, Suggestions
Other than the above mentioned, none.
This is absolutely remarkable! You made this sci-fi/fantasy story so believeable I am taken aback. The flow and progression of the story are wonderful, and the grammar and punctuation are fine for the most part, except for this one line: You would be temporarily disoriented would should be will. Overall, Sam this is an A++ story.
Overall Impression
It's a scary reality that most of us don't want to believe, but this poem may be looked at as a prediction of the future. You have written it well and your message rings out loud and clear.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I saw one spelling error:We struggle, strive amd carry on, The "amd" should be "and". The rest of this poem is fine.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
All of these are ok.
Ideas, Suggestions
None for this item except for the one mentioned above.
The description of this poem tells us that this is a teenage confession of love. In my opinion, it is written with maturity that some teenagers I know lack. It has great form and flow as well as superb spelling. Awesome write poet!
Overall Impression
You have described something in this piece but I wasn't exactly sure of what it was. Fear was the first thing that came to mind but I could be wrong.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't see any mistakes.
This poem spoke to me. I think it's because I can relate to it so well. I too have many things that I am dealing with and it is hard to know what to do first. I wish I could wash my hands of them all. This is well written, has good form, and it flows well. Good write.
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Overall Impression
Doubts can be overcome if you give yourself the courage to believe. I learned that very important lesson not long ago. You wrote this well but I think you are too hard on yourself.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No errors were found
Form, Rhyme & Meter
No particular rhyming pattern in this poem, although the meter and form are good.
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Overall Impression
Fantastic story. It is well written and detailed. The characters are believeable and it has an air of suspense and mystery. Great Job!
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
In this line: It hadn’t be the police visit. I think the "be" should be "been". No other errors were found
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Overall Impression
What a cute little story that I'm sure young children would love.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
You do have a few spelling errors and the beginning of some sentences aren't capitalized.
anoyying=annoying dul=dull mum=mom ever=every
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Not too bad
Ideas, Suggestions
Fix up the mistakes, and keep writing!
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This is certainly an interesting look at the definition of a woman and her traits. I can't say I would agree but it does give one a chuckle.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All ok
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Fine
Ideas, Suggestions
I would capitalize the beginning of each line. For aesthetic purposes more than anything.
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Absolutely wonderful! I am a BIG food network fan and I laughed my butt of reading this. Ina and Emeril's lines were my favorite. I had often wondered about all her friends. Terrific piece my friend.
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This is really good. You lead into the suspense portion of the story very well and left the reader hagning at the end. This ensures they will return to finish reading it. I know I will.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't find any errors.
Rhyme & Meter
Quite good.
Ideas, Suggestions
Instead of leaving this in block form you should break it up as the topic changes. For instance after this line: Kristen didn’t like being home alone so she decided to call her friend Katherine to see if she wanted to come over, you should start a new paragraph. At the beginning of the sentence when you mention the short conversation with Katherine you use the word "after", you use it again at the beginning of the next line too. I think if you used: Once they were settled in ...it would sound better. These of course are only suggestions and it is your story.
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Overall Impression
You have a very powerful and emotional piece here. Your feelings of abandonment are evident. Nice write.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I think this piece would benefit from capitalization at the beginning of each sentence. You also have believe spelled incorrectly.
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I read the lyrics you wrote for little Meghan and cried my eyes out. I saw this today and decided to take a look. It was nice to see the story behind the words. You seem like a very loving and caring person and I am honored to have read your work. This story is lovely and a true tribute to Meghan and Shane.
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The devotion that this character has for their beloved is very clear. It's described in a unique way that makes you feel bad for them.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I noticed a few spelling errors: akward=awkward tha=that. I also see that you have an I that is not capitalized, and not at the beginning of the 5th line.
Rhyme & Meter
It isn't bad but I do feel that this reads more like a story than a poem. The flow is slightly off.
Ideas, Suggestions
Work at this piece to get the flow smoother and change the form a bit.
I am laughing hsyterically at this delightful poem. This is certainly one that deserves a 5. It flows well, there are no errors, and it was a pleasure to read. I think the part I enjoyed the most was when you spoke about the shrinking parts. Men don't have it easy. Awesome write poet.
Overall Impression
This is an amazing story. You wrote it as if you lived it. The reader is taken on an emotional rollercoaster as the story progresses. Although it was disappointing for Chloe to find out that Maren wasn't her mother, I think things turned out well for her in the end.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No errors were found in this story.
Wow, this is absolutely incredible! I can see why you won the award. My eyes were glued to the screen and I have goosebumps all over. I am in awe of your talent. This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I did notice on typo though. Near the end when Tony is at home, you wrote:Tony shivered with feaver, fever is spelled wrong. Other than that this was A++
Overall Impression
Heart breakers don't have it easy. I am sure that many of of has experienced some of these feelings at one time or another. I like the way you wrote this piece. Good work poet.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I saw no errors.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Not bad
Ideas, Suggestions
I have none for this piece.
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