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You have an interesting piece here and I can see how it would hold many different meanings. You chose the perfect subject to include in this piece. Mona Lisa doe have an air of mystery around her. Well done poet!
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't come across any errors.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
The form is great and has no particular rhyming scheme. I do feel though that the meter needs some adjusting. The syllable count for the lines in each stanza aren't equal.
Ideas, Suggestions
Work on the meter to see if you can even it out.
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Accept Me (13+) After all these years, loneliness was still her only friend. Nothing had changed... #1078183 by Snowleaf
It is quite sad to know that the only thing a person can count on is their loneliness. Your story progresses well and the meter is very good. Good write!
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Article (E) This country is getting worse by the day #1079044 by ocktune
It is sad to say but this essay speaks the cold hard truth. Parts of this are quite amusing in the way you portray them. Thank you for sharing this with us it's great.
There are no words to describe how much these lyrics moved me. The sorrow I felt reading them made me cry for the loss of this innocent child. You have done well by her and her family with this loving song. Thank you so much for sharing it.
What a truly inspiring and beautiful poem. It is written wonderfully and the sig you added to it is exquisite. Sin in any form ungodly, but even harder to bear when it is against one's you love. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem. I am honored to have read it.
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This poem is quite dark but I can see the purpose behind it. Many of us feel this emotion at one time or another I know I have. Love can make us weird....
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What a gutsy, thrilling and dramatic story. It is awesome. You told it in such a way that I could almost hear you talking. Truly a work of art.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
Meticulous
Rhyme & Meter
Wonderful
Ideas, Suggestions
I hope you add on to this, I would love to read more.
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This is a beautifully written heart-wrenching poem. It takes you through a full range of emotions and leaves you breathless at the end knowing she is gone.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No errors were found
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You have showcased some very volatile emotions in this poem. As I read it, I was drawn to the character and felt like wrapping her in my arms and rocking her. Beautiful work my friend.
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Suicide is a hard subject to write about but you have outdone yourself with this story. I assumed it was going to end up like every other one you read but this one surprised me. Superb ending and a great write!
I am quite impressed by the views you express in this piece. It is a unique perspective. I didn't see any spelling, or grammatical errors and the meter in this piece is superb.Well done!
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This is quite an interesting dream. Have you figured out it's meaning? All dreams have a certain significance.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I did notice some spelling errors as well as grammatical. There are also a few lines that don't read properly. Take another look at it.
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You have a very interesting concept here with this piece. I found though that it was formed more like a poem than a story. In my opinion, that made it difficult to read.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
There were a few mistakes as far as punctuation and grammar but nothing that can't be edited.
Rhyme & Meter
This story didn't flow as well as it could in it's current form.
Ideas, Suggestions
Work on the form of the story, keep the paragraphs detailed but short and seperate each character's dialogue to a line of it's own.
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Overall Impression
Pamela loves dolls! That is certainly evident in this piece. I do feel however, it lacks originality. There is no descriptive wording used at all.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
On the other hand your spelling and grammar are very good.
Rhyme & Meter
I found this piece to be monotonous.
Ideas, Suggestions
Add more description. It's not necessary to say what different types of dolls she owns. A simple statement that lets the reader know she owns dolls from all over the world would work.
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Fox's Box (E) A rhyming short story I wrote for language class. #1075819 by Joey12794
This poem rhymes, that's for sure but I found it very hard to read. There were too many words that rhyme and it gets rather confusing. On a good note, your spelling is fine and I didn't find any grammitcal errors. Write on!
What a touching poem. Losing someone is never easy but you have paid your father a loving tribute in this piece. Your spelling and grammar are fine as is the punctuation. This poem flows well and is easy to read. Great job poet, write on!
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Lost Soul (E) This is about my nephew who was adopted by my sister. #1075661 by mom24paws
This poem is very deep and contains raw emotion. You tell a sad story here. I admire your courage to place this piece here for us to read. I didn't see any spelling errors but I do feel that the meter needs a bit of tweaking. Overall, this is a great poem.
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Overall Impression
What an absolutely wonderful story! Maggie is awesome. You couldn't have done a better job creating her. You have a great beginning here i hope you continue it,
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All perfect
Rhyme & Meter
The story is well paced, has good form and reads easily.
Ideas, Suggestions
Write on!
Damiana
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