Overall Impression
It's pretty amazing when we come to the realization that our parents were right all along. This is a beautiful letter to your mom, I am sure she is very proud.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All is fine except for one spelling error:stubern=stubborn
Overall Impression
Not a bad little story you have started here. I love Unicorns and that's what drew me to this piece. Good write.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
You have quite a few spelling errors in this. I will point them out for you.
for her has been named
decendents=descendants
disire=desire
relizes=realizes
truely=truly
once=ounce
conection=connection
There are a few errors as well with the grammar. Take a look at it again and see if you can edit the errors.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Not too bad
Ideas, Suggestions
Fix all the mistakes, have fun and write on!
Overall Impression
I absolutely love this story! Want to know why? I met my current partner at work. She was a supervisor, not mine though. I was, as you call it, a subordinate. We are living together now and she is helping me raise my 4 kids.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't notice any errors
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I can honestly say that I am glad this is ficticious. You have written this story well but it is hard to believe that this could happen.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I found no errors.
Rhyme & Meter
The story flowed and progressed very well.
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What a great venting session. If what you say about your friends in this poem are true, then they aren't your friends. Time to move on and find better ones. You asked why do they treat me this way? I have been there before too and they do it because they can. You are allowing it, maybe not consciously but that's what going on.
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I admire your courage for opening yourself up to this writing community. I can certainly understand the feelings you experienced surrounding the death of your brother.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All of these are perfect
Rhyme & Meter
This story progressed well and the flow was great.
What a tragic story for Duke. I really feel bad for him. This story is written brilliantly. The spelling and grammar are perfect and the progression and flow of the story are great. Well Done, good luck in the challenge.
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You have an interesting piece here and I can see how it would hold many different meanings. You chose the perfect subject to include in this piece. Mona Lisa doe have an air of mystery around her. Well done poet!
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't come across any errors.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
The form is great and has no particular rhyming scheme. I do feel though that the meter needs some adjusting. The syllable count for the lines in each stanza aren't equal.
Ideas, Suggestions
Work on the meter to see if you can even it out.
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Accept Me (13+) After all these years, loneliness was still her only friend. Nothing had changed... #1078183 by Snowleaf
It is quite sad to know that the only thing a person can count on is their loneliness. Your story progresses well and the meter is very good. Good write!
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Article (E) This country is getting worse by the day #1079044 by ocktune
It is sad to say but this essay speaks the cold hard truth. Parts of this are quite amusing in the way you portray them. Thank you for sharing this with us it's great.
There are no words to describe how much these lyrics moved me. The sorrow I felt reading them made me cry for the loss of this innocent child. You have done well by her and her family with this loving song. Thank you so much for sharing it.
What a truly inspiring and beautiful poem. It is written wonderfully and the sig you added to it is exquisite. Sin in any form ungodly, but even harder to bear when it is against one's you love. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem. I am honored to have read it.
This piece has touched me in a way that you will never know. I have lived this and thankfully it is over. This poem is truly astounding because I think everyone can relate to it on some level. Your rhyme and meter are reat and the grammar and spelling, meticulous.
Thanks for sharing this very informative piece on your Excursion in writing. It has taught me some things and I am greatful for that. Reading your work, as many as I have, has given me a better understanding of poetry. I admire your talent and look forward to enjoying more of your work.
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Overall Impression
This poem is quite dark but I can see the purpose behind it. Many of us feel this emotion at one time or another I know I have. Love can make us weird....
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What a gutsy, thrilling and dramatic story. It is awesome. You told it in such a way that I could almost hear you talking. Truly a work of art.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
Meticulous
Rhyme & Meter
Wonderful
Ideas, Suggestions
I hope you add on to this, I would love to read more.
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Overall Impression
This is a beautifully written heart-wrenching poem. It takes you through a full range of emotions and leaves you breathless at the end knowing she is gone.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No errors were found
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You have showcased some very volatile emotions in this poem. As I read it, I was drawn to the character and felt like wrapping her in my arms and rocking her. Beautiful work my friend.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All are fine
Rhyme & Meter
Meter is fine. No rhyme pattern
Ideas, Suggestions
I have none
Damiana
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