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Overall Impression
What a cute little story that I'm sure young children would love.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
You do have a few spelling errors and the beginning of some sentences aren't capitalized.
anoyying=annoying dul=dull mum=mom ever=every
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Not too bad
Ideas, Suggestions
Fix up the mistakes, and keep writing!
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This is certainly an interesting look at the definition of a woman and her traits. I can't say I would agree but it does give one a chuckle.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All ok
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Fine
Ideas, Suggestions
I would capitalize the beginning of each line. For aesthetic purposes more than anything.
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Absolutely wonderful! I am a BIG food network fan and I laughed my butt of reading this. Ina and Emeril's lines were my favorite. I had often wondered about all her friends. Terrific piece my friend.
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This is really good. You lead into the suspense portion of the story very well and left the reader hagning at the end. This ensures they will return to finish reading it. I know I will.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't find any errors.
Rhyme & Meter
Quite good.
Ideas, Suggestions
Instead of leaving this in block form you should break it up as the topic changes. For instance after this line: Kristen didn’t like being home alone so she decided to call her friend Katherine to see if she wanted to come over, you should start a new paragraph. At the beginning of the sentence when you mention the short conversation with Katherine you use the word "after", you use it again at the beginning of the next line too. I think if you used: Once they were settled in ...it would sound better. These of course are only suggestions and it is your story.
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You have a very powerful and emotional piece here. Your feelings of abandonment are evident. Nice write.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I think this piece would benefit from capitalization at the beginning of each sentence. You also have believe spelled incorrectly.
Hi Billy,
I read the lyrics you wrote for little Meghan and cried my eyes out. I saw this today and decided to take a look. It was nice to see the story behind the words. You seem like a very loving and caring person and I am honored to have read your work. This story is lovely and a true tribute to Meghan and Shane.
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The devotion that this character has for their beloved is very clear. It's described in a unique way that makes you feel bad for them.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I noticed a few spelling errors: akward=awkward tha=that. I also see that you have an I that is not capitalized, and not at the beginning of the 5th line.
Rhyme & Meter
It isn't bad but I do feel that this reads more like a story than a poem. The flow is slightly off.
Ideas, Suggestions
Work at this piece to get the flow smoother and change the form a bit.
I am laughing hsyterically at this delightful poem. This is certainly one that deserves a 5. It flows well, there are no errors, and it was a pleasure to read. I think the part I enjoyed the most was when you spoke about the shrinking parts. Men don't have it easy. Awesome write poet.
Overall Impression
This is an amazing story. You wrote it as if you lived it. The reader is taken on an emotional rollercoaster as the story progresses. Although it was disappointing for Chloe to find out that Maren wasn't her mother, I think things turned out well for her in the end.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
No errors were found in this story.
Wow, this is absolutely incredible! I can see why you won the award. My eyes were glued to the screen and I have goosebumps all over. I am in awe of your talent. This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I did notice on typo though. Near the end when Tony is at home, you wrote:Tony shivered with feaver, fever is spelled wrong. Other than that this was A++
Overall Impression
Heart breakers don't have it easy. I am sure that many of of has experienced some of these feelings at one time or another. I like the way you wrote this piece. Good work poet.
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It's pretty amazing when we come to the realization that our parents were right all along. This is a beautiful letter to your mom, I am sure she is very proud.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All is fine except for one spelling error:stubern=stubborn
Overall Impression
Not a bad little story you have started here. I love Unicorns and that's what drew me to this piece. Good write.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
You have quite a few spelling errors in this. I will point them out for you.
for her has been named
decendents=descendants
disire=desire
relizes=realizes
truely=truly
once=ounce
conection=connection
There are a few errors as well with the grammar. Take a look at it again and see if you can edit the errors.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
Not too bad
Ideas, Suggestions
Fix all the mistakes, have fun and write on!
Overall Impression
I absolutely love this story! Want to know why? I met my current partner at work. She was a supervisor, not mine though. I was, as you call it, a subordinate. We are living together now and she is helping me raise my 4 kids.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I didn't notice any errors
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I can honestly say that I am glad this is ficticious. You have written this story well but it is hard to believe that this could happen.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
I found no errors.
Rhyme & Meter
The story flowed and progressed very well.
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What a great venting session. If what you say about your friends in this poem are true, then they aren't your friends. Time to move on and find better ones. You asked why do they treat me this way? I have been there before too and they do it because they can. You are allowing it, maybe not consciously but that's what going on.
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Overall Impression
I admire your courage for opening yourself up to this writing community. I can certainly understand the feelings you experienced surrounding the death of your brother.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
All of these are perfect
Rhyme & Meter
This story progressed well and the flow was great.
What a tragic story for Duke. I really feel bad for him. This story is written brilliantly. The spelling and grammar are perfect and the progression and flow of the story are great. Well Done, good luck in the challenge.
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