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"Did You Daddy?"
Tragic, heart-wrenching story but unfortunately very true for many children. Reading things like this, true or not, make me cringe. You evoked powerful emotions in this reader and for that I have to say "Great job".
There were no spelling errors in this poem and the meter and form are fine. I wish you luck in the challenge.
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"Face at the Window"
Very deep and disturbing poem. Part of me can relate. Your message is clear and the feeling and emotion you put into this piece are felt by the reader.
The form of this piece is well done, as is the meter. I didn't find any spelling mistakes either. Great work poet. Good luck in the challenge.
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"A Pocketful of Starlight"
Superbly written story. I can relate to this on a personal level and it touched me deeply. Miscarriage is one of life's great mysteries. Unless you have experienced it, one will never know what it's like.
This story takes the reader on a roller coaster ride of emotions. The form and meter are well done and the only error I saw was the period at the end of the word "exhilaration", it was over one space too far.
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"It Could Happen To You Too...."
I got the best laugh I have had all week from this story. Awesome write friend. The best part was that I could actually see you standing there mortified. And knowinf myslef the way I do I would be just like your mom! Oh no two of us!!!
Form and meter are great. No spelling errors were found. Great job!
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"Just Yesterday"
Oh how time flies! All parents I think feel the same way when it comes to their children growing up. Your poem gives a light-hearted look at this. I often joke about mine and how I couldn't wait for them to walk and talk, now it's sit down and be quiet. Nice write poet.
I felt the form and meter are fine and no spelling errors were found. Good luck in the challenge.
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"Heard With New Ears"
The struggles you face in this poem are made very clear and so are the emotions. They come out strong and bold and catch the readers attention. Nice write.
I found the form and meter in these lyrics to be well done and there weren't any spelling errors. Good luck in the challenge.
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"One Last Time"
This is a lovely heart-felt poem. I am truly sorry for your loss. You expressed yourself well in this poem.
This poem reads like a free form so I don't think that this outline works well. The meter is fine and I didn't see any spelling errors. Overall, this is good writing.
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Well I think I have heard it all now. This is a very amusing little poem. I can remember back in my younger years saying alot of the same things. Kids still find it pretty funny.
You have good form in this poem but the meter is slightly off. Try and adjust it so that the flow is seamless. I found the rhyme pattern quite good and I didn't see any spelling errors. If you need any help you can visit the forum below. Good Luck in the challenge.
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This is really good and you are right most women do love flowers. I do too but I would much rather receive 1 real rose and a bouquet of artifical ones. Why you might ask? Because they die. If I have a dozen beautiful artificial roses they will last me a lifetime. Just as long as the love in my heart for the person who gave them to me. Call me weird but I like to think of myself as one of a kind.
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What a beautiful story full of loving memories. I enjoyed this story and it made me think back to the times I spent with my family. Great write friend.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are all very well done.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't see any errors.
Ideas & Suggestions
This is wonderful the way it is.
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The struggle for peace on this earth amongst all the evil is a life long battle. Your poem is a good representation of that. Good work.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are all ok.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No spelling errors were found but I do feel that each line should start with a capital letter.
Ideas & Suggestions
Only those mentioned above.
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Nice write poet. Many people suffered and still are from Katrina. They say time heals all wounds, if there enough time to get through this?
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These are fine, no errors found.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No mistakes in this poem.
Ideas & Suggestions
None for this piece.
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This was an interesting look at the relation between the sun and moon. Nice write.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
I do feel the form and meter need a bit of work. It doesn't flow as well as it could.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I did notice a few errors here. Your second stanza needs editing. There are a few spelling errors and the last line needs to be re-written and it doen't make sense.
Ideas & Suggestions
None other than what has already been mentioned.
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