Despite your name, you write some very good poetry. This is truly a wonderful poem. You have captured some of the best aspects of love. This poem is well written with great form and meter, as well as no errors. Thank you for sharing it.
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This is truly a miraculous story. I had goosebumps the whole time I was reading it. I felt drawn to your words and I was enveloped in this extraordinary story. The imagery in this piece is wonderful. The story is well written and error free. Thank you so much for sharing your experience with us.
This is absolutely hilarious. I was thinking two things at the beginning of this story. One was a diner that sold gas and the other which is clearly evident by reading this story. You did a great job. This is well written, funny and there are no errors. Write on my friend!
This short poem asks one very important question, "what does it mean to be me". I have to admit that I don't know the answer if I were to ask myself that. This poem has really made me think about my life and the direction it is going.
Short, simple and to the point, this well written piece gets the reader thinking. It provokes ones mind to really search for the answer.
This poem sends out a good message to those who also may be recovering from an addiction. The content of the poem is great but I do feel the form and meter need some work. The rhyme scheme is ok but could be greatly improved once the form and meter are refined. This is a good start, work on it. I guarantee you will be quite pleased with what you come up with.
This is truly amazing! I absolutely love the way this poem reads. The form is wonderful, the rhyme scheme is awesome and the meter is superb. There is nothing negative I could say about this piece. It is pure perfection. Thank you for sharing it.
Another great lesson on the wonders of Google. It is much easier to learn all of these things by reading about if first. I find I get very frustrated when things don't go my way. Then I just abandon everything.
Your articles have given me more than I ever thought possible. Thanks for sharing them.
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I truly admire your strength and courage for taking the step to write this piece. It has a wonderful healing effect one you get it out and on paper. Well virtual paper in this case.
Form & Meter
The form of this story is good. It is well paced and flows easily.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't come across any errors in this story.
Imagery & Characterization
The imagery in this story is quite good. The reader is able to form a mental picture of what is going on. As far as the character goes, I am sure that you will progress with her and become a little more personal.
Ideas & Suggestions
Keep up the good work.
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Well... I am not sure if I know where to start with this one. It certainly isn't what I expected but it is so well written even with all the the blood, gore and murder I enjoyed it. It would make an excellent horror movie. It is easy to read and well paced.
Spelling, Grammar & PunctuationThere were no errors in this story.
Imagery & Characterization
You outdid yourself in these areas. I can't say I have read much that has been more graphic than this story.
Ideas & Suggestions
None for this story.
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This poem certainly is not like anything I have read before. The topic is quite different but very interesting.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
These three elements, in my opinion, were all done well.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't find any errors in this poem
Imagery & Characterization
I think the imagery in this poem is where you excel. It is uniquely descriptive and it allows the reader to form an image of what is happening, however disturbing that may be.
Ideas & Suggestions
I have none for this item. Nice work. Write on.
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Intersting choice of topic, however I don't feel that this poem comes together right. It seems almost strained in places.
Form
The form has been followed perfectly.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There were no spelling errors in this poem but it lacks punctuation. Adding commas or periods at the end of each line would give the poem better flow.
Ideas & Suggestions
My only suggestion would be to try and get this more streamlined so the line don't feel so forced.
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I think this would have to be someone's worst nightmare but the harsh reality that this can happen and probably has to millions of poeple is dreadful. I think you captured very well all of the emotions, fears and sadness that would accompany a tragedy such as this.
Form & Meter
I do feel that some of the larger paragraphs could be broken down some. Specifically when the topic changes.
Imagery & Characterization
Although this is a very well put together story, I do feel it lacks in both of these areas. I see at the top that you plan on doing some editing. I think that would help a great deal.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors were found.
Ideas & Suggestions
Just the ones mentioned above.
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What a lovely entertaining story. I am sure your daughter must have loved it. It's full of childhood wonder and innocence. It truly was a joy to read.
Form & Meter
The composition of this story is great, it reads well and had great form.
Imagery & Characterization
Both of these elements are very well done.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I found no errors.
Ideas & Suggestions
Keep the adventure alive. You have got a winner here.
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Awesome story! I can't think of one thing I would change. The storyline is great and the plot is even better. I had goosebumps as I was nearing the end because I knew something sinister was going to take place. Really terrific writing.
Form & Meter
This story was easy to follow and increases in intensity the farther you progress.
Imagery & Characterization
Superb!
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors were found.
Ideas & Suggestions
You can't improve perfection.
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Words can be a very powerful and harmful tool. That is very evident in this poem. It evokes a feeling of empathy in the reader.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
The form and rhyme scheme in this poem are terrific. However the meter needs a bit of tweaking. Some of the syllable counts are slightly off.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't find any errors in this poem.
Ideas & Suggestions
I think if you were able to even out the meter this piece you be perfect.
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You are such an asset to this site I am honored to have made you aquaintance. This stuff is mind boggling. I am flabbergasted at the amount of things you can search for on this site. I just found song lyrics. I am a definate google-a-holic now. With the success I have had, I can't see me using another other search engine. Brilliant writing my friend.
This is fabulous. I can't believe there is so much to know about google. I applaud you for writing these articles and bringing this information to the attention of those you didn't realize it was there. Since I read your first piece I have used it alot more and the results are amazing. Thanks again for sharing your knowledge.
This is a very informative and helpful piece. I have used google a few times but I wasn't aware of all the things you could do with it. I'm impressed. I think after reading this I will be a more loyal "googler". This is well written, had great composition and mo errors. Thank you for sharing your knowledge.
The imagery painted in this poem of the "playground city" is not the happy place I expected it to be. This is a very sad and melancholy poem. It wraps the reader into this awful place and gives them a serious reality check. Wonderfully written, with great form and meter this poem speaks voulumes. This poem is also error free. Nice work my friend.
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This isn't a bad start and I feel this poem has potential. However, I do feel it lacks substance. The simplistic form in which it is written doesn't give the reader enough context to get wrapped up in your words. The form and meter are ok but could be expanded upon anthere are no errors. Good start, write on!
What a joy to read. This story was awesome. It's well written, light-hearted and funny. The "ring bear" part is priceless. I can picture someone doing that. This story has great characterization and imagery as well as no errors. You did a great job. Good luck in the challenge.
I felt quite sad for the porcupine after reading this poem. It made me think about all living beings that don't get the love and affection they deserve. Getting this reaction from a reader indicated to me this is a well written poem. The form and meter are fine and I didn't see any errors. Good job poet. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Wonderful write poet. Carrying a weight of any type on our shoulders isn't easy. Your poem describes how this can effect someone. It is well written, has good form and meter and there are no errors. I feel the free form style you chose for this piece worked out very well. Write on my friend.
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You have got something here. It peaked my interest enough to want to read more. It is very descriptive and creates wonderful imagery for the reader. The form needs a bit of work but the content is marvelous.
Try spacing your paragraphs and /or sentences that change topic at least one single space so that the text of the next sentence isn't touching it. Keep working at it, I would love to finish it.
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