A love like this is something so rare I feel it comes but once in a lifetime. This story is a testimony of love the love and devotion the two of you shared. It is absolutely beautiful. This story is perfectly written, had wonderful characterization and it error free. Thank you for sharing a tidbit of your life with us.
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This is a wonderful poem. The imagery is clear and vivid and allows the reader to be taken into a day dream of their own. The poems flows well creating one fluid thought. It has a feeling of serenity to it and was a joy to read. The Double Acrostic form was followed perfectly and this poem is error free. You did a great job with this.
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This is certainly a poem that gets the readers mind moving. AIDS is a terrible epidemic that I wish never would have surfaced. Your poem speaks volumes and is written true to the Double Acrostic form. It is error free and a good read. Good luck in the contest.
I certainly did enjoy the walk. I have always had a fear of cemeteries and I don't know why. I suppose it is because I fear death. I just can't fathom the thought of never being here again. You have given me soemthing to think about since you found so my joy in the old cemeteries you used to visit. I may just hav to wander through one someday.
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I think you followed the Quinzaine form wonderfully. However, the use of the word "right" at the end of the last line gives this poem an air of uncertainty. Of course this is just my opinion. The poem is also error free. Good luck in the contest.
I don't have a child that is autistic but I do have 3 that are challenged in many ways. You have written an beautiful poem that allows people who don't understand this affliction to catch a glimpse of what it is like. It has good form and flow and there are no errors. Thank you for sharing this with us.
This is a delightful story. Kids are so funny at times. They have ways of amusing themselves that we would never think of.
This story had good form but there are a few run-on sentences that need to be broken down. ie: (I see my boy leaping in excitement, baby blue eyes a twinkle, his honey-chestnut hair bouncing while doing something he knows is wrong but enjoying it too much to care the consequences.)
This line could easily be broken down into at least 3 lines.
The grammar and punctuation are fine and there were no errors. Nice work my friend. Write on!
First Impression
I was very curious about the blue pill right from the beginning. I knew it was going to be that main focus of this story but I did not realize how much of an impact it would make.
Imagery
Startling, unimaginable, horrific but very clear and very vivid.....
Characterization
The characterization of John in this story is amazing. He seems so together but that is SO far from the truth it gives me the chills. I am quite pleased that the story ended the way it did. I just love Timothy.
Spelling
There were no errors found in this piece.
Grammar & Punctuation
Both are perfect.
Additional Comments
This is one of the best stories I have read in a while. You have a gift for writing. Don't even stop. I look forward to reviewing more of your work. Write on!
First Impression
This is a very well written poem. The way you describe the life of the Evergreen tree allows the reader to get a better understanding of how important they are to us and nature.
Form
The form of this poem is great.
Rhyme & Meter
Although there is not rhyme scheme present the meter of this poem is wonderful and it allows the words to float freely from the page.
Imagery & Characterization
With the tree being the main focus of this poem, we have to look at the piece from its perspective. Without truly realizing it we take trees and many other of god's gifts for granted. As far as the imagery goes, you painted a marvelous one for your readers.
Spelling & Grammar
No errors were found in this poem.
Punctuation
Perfect
Additional Comments
Wonderful work my friend. I look forward to reading more of it. Write on!
This is my final review for your win in the raffle.
You speak some very wise words of wisdom in this poem. The world would be a much brighter place if we all took the time to do what you have written here in this poem.
I did find the meter to be staggered in a few places but the form is fine and there are no errors. Overall, this poem inspires the reader to think and to act. Thanks for the challenge. Write on my friend!
Short sweet and to the point, this poem hits home for all those who have been affected by this awful crime. The form is wonderful and the meter and rhyme scheme are superb. I love the way you managed to hit on all of the most important aspects of child abuse if such few words. It brought tears to my eyes. Excellent poem my friend!
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I am here for my 3rd review of the five I owe you.
This is another piece that shows real emotion. Anyone who has suffered or is suffering from this affliction can relate to this piece very well. The feelings in this poem are raw and powerful. They evoke empathy in the reader which in my opinion is a good thing.
This poem has good form, flows well and there are no spelling errors. However, this line:I want left here alone didn't make sense to me. Overall, this was a good poem. Thanks for sharing it.
This is a fantastic piece of poetry. It gave me chills as I read it because I too know this place well. It has good form, it flows well and the reader is able to catch a glimpse of what it's like to live this way, even if only for a moment. There were no errors found in this poem and the punctuation works for this piece. My favorite part of this piece were the last two lines. For me they say quite a bit. Awesome write my friend!
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I am starting on the five review I owe you that you won in Gemini Star's Raffle.
This poem certainly speaks of the love and admiration you feel for your sister and her beau. Your soft spoken words give the reader a sense of kinship that cannot be rivaled. The poem has great form however, I do feel that the meter and rhyme scheme could uses a bit of editing. The meter is quite bumpy in a few places and throws the flow of the poem off. This of course is only a suggestion. Overall, this is a poem filled with love and you can top that.
First Impression
I do have to agree with you that this is a rather dark poem but those who have experienced these feeling may see it very differently. In your subtitle you classify this as moody however, I felt it was more somber or morose.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
The form and meter of this piece are very well done. It does not have a rhyming pattern to comment on.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There are no mistakes to be found in this poem but I am curious as to why each word is capitalized. I don't think they are necessary to get the poems point across. In fact I feel they take away from the piece.
Imagery & Characterization
Understanding this poem from my perspective leaves me with a very dark and vivid image in my mind. It is not pleasant at all. I am sure that is what this writer was looking for.
Additional Comments
Take my suggestions into consideration, you could do extremely well with this piece. Write on my friend!
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First Impression:
I tried very hard to fine the correlation between the poem and the title. To me they are entirely different. Now the effect that words can have seems more realistic but I fail to understand the true meaning of this poem.
Form:
The Pleiades form was done perfectly.
Imagery:
I found scattered imagery throughout the poem but not enough to create one big picture.
Flow & Meter:
Both of these elements were done very well.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
No errors were found in this poem.
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First Impression:
I have taken the time to read this poem more than once but I still can't relate the words written on this page to the movement of Time. In my opinion the is no correlation between the two.
Form:The form is fine. I was followed perfectly.
Imagery:
There wasn't enough imagery in this piece to positively comment on.
Flow & Meter:
Both are very well done.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
No errors were found in this poem.
It has been a while since I read this and I noticed that you have added quite a bit more. I was very pleased with what you have added. The characterization has developed very well and the imagery is fascinating. I feel there is more depth to the story now and the reader is engrossed in every word. There is plenty going on that one could not bore easily with this. Excellent work!
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Short, sweet and a great use of the prompt. This story is beautiful. It isn't complicated with a lot of extra chatter about how this was or that could have been. It is clear cut and concise. The imagery is wonderful and the story itself is very heart-warming. I think you did a remarkable job. Good luck in the contest.
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Overall Impression
This is a wonderful, light-hearted, cheerful and entertaining poem. I truly enjoyed reading it.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
I think you did quite well with the form and rhyme scheme of this poem. I do feel the meter needs a bit of refining. Some of the lines are a bit "bumpy" and don't flow as well as the rest of this piece.
Imagery & Characterization
These are both very well done. I have to laugh when I think of lazy Fred and his "addiction" to radishes. He was determined to have them at any cost.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There were no errors found in this poem.
Additional Comments
I had fun reading this piece. I wish you luck in the contest.
Overall Impression
It seems to me that your world becomes a much happier place to be in when you're in love. Your way of describing it is quite unique.
Form & Meter
The overall form of this poem is fine and the meter is as well but I do feel more emphasis should be put the character since they are the one in love.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There were no errors found in this poem.
Ideas & Suggestions
Good work fellow poet. Write on.
Overall Impression
This is a very compelling story. The Aids epidemic is one of the worst diseases, in my opinion, known to man. I have hope for the future that this will be cured.
Composition
You have combined distinctive parts and elements to create a whole story that educates its readers.
Imagery & Characterization
The imagery and characterization in this story are both well done. You have created a clear picture of the hospital setting as well as the effects of this disease on its characters.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
I didn't see any errors.
Ideas & Suggestions
I do not have any for this piece.
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Overall Impression
A beautiful poem of romance an passion that brought goosebumps to my skin.
Form, Rhyme & Meter
This piece read more like a story for me than a poem. I would even go as far as suggesting that this could could be turned into the beginning of a romance novel.
Imagery & Characterization
Both of these elements we executed beautifully. It made me appreciate the love I have.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There were no errors found in this piece.
This poem is amazing. Knowing about Isis they way I do I am able to understand the meaning behind this poem. The form and meter and wonderful and there are no errors. This poem says so much to me it's amazing. I am so thankful that you decided to share it with us.
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