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"Disguised by imperfection"
Excellent writing. I suffer from major depression and this poem managed to say alot of things I couldn't. I commend your courage for putting this piece out there. I feel it is well written, it speaks volumes and there are no errors. Great presentation too. Keep up the good work.
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Overall Impression
You bring forth in this piece a very interesting perspective of the writing process. I can't say I agree or disagree with it. I'd say I am impartial.
Form & Meter
I fell that the form of this piece could use a bit of editing. The paragraph needs to be broken up for ease in reading and for the variences in subject matter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
No errors found in any of these areas.
Ideas & Suggestions
Consider editing that's all. Write on!
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We seem to share the same admiration for this site and the same first name. I truly love your letter. It is well written, charming and heart-felt. I am sure your family and friends will understand....eventually.
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You certainly have a very strong opinion about writing that's for sure. As far as being addicted to this site I can tell by this piece that your not. Each of us have our place and I commend you for your honesty. Your piece is well written and has no errors.
What a great story. You do very well with these contest prompts. I tried really hard to figure out what little Nathan was going to do with the pool. I can see one of mine doing that is we had one. Thank goodness I don't. This story is well written and has no errors. Another winner Judity.
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Overall Impression
Quite an interesting little tale you tell here. It is very informative and insightful. I like your presentation of this piece. Nice work.
Form & Meter
I feel both of these are done quite well. The story is well paced and easy to read.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation
There are no errors in this story for any of these elements.
Ideas & Suggestions
I have none for this story. Keep up the good work.
This was absolutely wonderful!!! I never would have guessed for one minute you were talking about a cat and mouse. Terrific writing my friend. Your presentation of this story is superb and flawless. It's entertaining, suspenseful and truly a joy to read. I love your version of this classic fable.
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"Time"
Life passes us by and before we know it "bang" we are broadsided by reality as the mother was in this story. We all hate to see our kids grow up but it happens. This story gives us a wake up call as the lines in Julie's play for sure. Great writing, good composition and no errors were found. Write on!
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"Is Camping a Vacation?"
This is an absolute riot!!!! I am laughing so hard, being middle aged and after having 4 kids you know what I have to do!!! My chair almost had a shower. I can't say I disagree with you one bit about this camping jig. You forgot to mention being eaten alive by mosquitoes and black flies. Great story, no errors and a joy to read. Keep up the good work.
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"Why Does Fate Separate Me"
The admiration of your position in this band is a great focal point in this poem. The frustration you felt by not being able to be there to support your comrades is evident in this piece. This poem had good presentation, form and meter with no errors. I hope you recovered from this accident and are doing well today. Great work fellow poet.
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"Waking Up The Trees" What a wonderfully constructed piece of poetry. In just a few short stanzas it tells a story all on it's own. The fact that you ended it with an explanation of what the "ents" were, for those who didn't know was brilliant. This poem is well written, has excellent form, meter, rhyming pattern and no errors. Great work poet. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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I just re-read this adorable poem and Juan looks like he is right at home. I don't think this could have worked out better for either of us. Your poem is awesome and I know kids will just love it. It's fun, easy to read and filled with so much of the things kids really love! Terrific job my friend.
You had me right until the very end. Awesome story. You painted such a vivid portrait with your descriptive wording I felt as if I was right beside the character. My heart was racing as they tried to escape "the beast". You ended this superbly. I did see one error:This caused me to (fell) flat on my face. fell=fall Other than that I think this is great.
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"THE ONE I MISS"
What a loving tribute you have written. No one but an amimal lover can truly understand how much our pets become a part of our lives. I call mine my babies, and I have 4 kids! In this story you give the reader a great mental image of him running down the beach and playing frisbee. Nice write, good form and no errors. Keep up the good work!
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"Civil War Reunion at Pennypacker Mills"
I am not personally familiar with the events of the civil war but after reading this I have gained some knowledge. When I started reading it, it reminded me of the scene in "Sweet Home Alabama". You did a good job with this. However is does have a few spelling error that can be easily fixed with spell check. Other than that I enjoyed this history lesson.
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"Diary of a forgotten flower"
You have brought life to this wilting flower with this wonderful poem. Your words flow freely from the page and give the reader a very vivid image of the abandoned flower. It had great form and meter and I didn't see any errors throughout the poem. Great writing fellow poet. Write on!
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Overall Impression
This is certainly not what I expected but I am not disappointed. This has good composition and characterization. It was easy to follow and keeps the reader in suspense until the very end.
Form & Meter
Both of theses are well done. I wouldn't change anything.
Spelling,Grammar & Punctuation
I did come across one or two errors which can be fixed easily with spell check.
Ideas & Suggestions
Other than fixing the errors, I don't have any.
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Your last two lines couldn't have said it better. It is very clear to me that you have gained quite a bit by being a member of this supportive and encouraging community. Your poem is light-hearted, funny and entertaining. It's also well written.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
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I couldn't agree with you more about WDC being a main staple of our lives. I am thrilled that you have found a place you can call your own. Even with the thousands of members we have, it can still be our safe haven from the stressors of the real world. You tribute is funny but also heart-warming.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
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This is a beautiful, inspirational and very well written poem. The words flow freely off the page and gave me a sense of calm. The way you describe God's power and how he tries to provide for us is amazing. I am truly in awe of your talent. Excellent writing my friend.
This wasn't at all what I expected. Never did it occur to me that Rudy wasn't human. Great job keeping that hidden until the end. Your story has good compostion, the form and meter are well done and I did not see any errors. This is good work. Write on!
This was absolutely fabulous. I am still not sure if I believe the house is haunted or if it is the fault of the electrician. Nice way to leave the reader hanging. Great composition, form and meter. There are no errors anywhere in the story and the punctuation is perfect. Job well done! Good luck in the contest.
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""Rainbows In The Night""
What a beautifully written and loving tribute to your mother. I can see why she loved it so much and why it won an award. The emotions this poem evokes are very powerful and heart-wrenching. Dealing with the loss of a loved one is never easy but it time these wounds can heal. Congratulations on a lovely poem.
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"Swimming With Alligators"
For people who detest abuse, this is a very hard story to read. Although well written it evokes some very strong emotions. As bad as it was for the children, I had a hard time with the kitten.
You did a really good job with this story. Great form and meter with no errors. Keep up the good work.
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I am laughing so hard, being middle aged and after having 4 kids you know what I have to do!!! My chair almost had a shower. I can't say I disagree with you one bit about this camping jig. You forgot to mention being eaten alive by mosquitoes and black flies. Great story, no errors and a joy to read. Keep up the good work.