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I apologize for the lateness of this review.
It doesn't take much to set the scene of a seduction and you have certainly done that with this scintillating poem. The imagery you created with this poem gives the reader plenty to invision. The form is well prepared, there are no spelling errors and the meter is fine. I do feel that more punctuation could be used, but that is just my opinion.
Thank you for hsaring this piece and entering the contest.
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Round 4
Sorry for the lateness of this review but I suppose it's better late then never!
First Impression
You have a good grasp on catching the readers attention and drawing them in. The simplicity of the poem allows the reader to sit back and relax and enjoy what they are reading. Great work!
Imagery
The imagery in this piece is wonderful. Your use of descriptive wording really helps in creating a mental picture of the surroundings.
Meter
This poem have good flow and meter.
SpellingI found on error in the last word : (autum) The "n" is missing.
Grammar & Punctuation
With the particular form you chose for this poem, I don't feel that any punctuation is necessary.
Additional Comments
You have a great poem here Dawn. Thanks for entering the contest. Good Luck!!
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Overall Impression:
You have a very deep and thought provoking poem here. Each passage could be spoken by either man or woman. It's up to the reader to find their own interpretation. I read it several times because each time I found something I could relate to. It evoked a deep emotional response.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
Even though there is no rhyme pattern present, the form and meter are strong on their own.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in any of these categories.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for sharing your poem and entering the contest.
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This is quite a funny work of art you have here. Where would we be without cliches. I could picture the poor guy trying to find the nerve to strike up a conversation. It's pretty sad when you really think about it. The form isn't bad, however, I think it could use a bit of editing. The spelling, grammar and punctuation are all error free.
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I am not going to pretend it is easy to review a poem that only has three lines. The visual effect you created in this poem is very strong. It gives the reader a clear and vivid picture of the swan swooping in for a landing. I like how you described the lake with a "mirrored" look. It's very striking. I would like to know if you had chosen a particular style for this poem or was it something you just did on your own. Technically the poem is sound. There are no errors.
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First Impression
The message that I got from this poem is to be yourself no matter what anyone else thinks. When we compromise ourselves for the sake of others we begin to lose our identity.
Imagery
There is imagery in this poem but I felt it was cryptic. I found it hard to get a real grasp of what was happening.
Meter
The meter in this poem is very strong and one of its best attributes.
Spelling
There are no spelling errors in this poem. I can see you pay close attention to your work.
Grammar & Punctuation
Both are error free.
Additional Comments
I think this may just be one of those poems that I didn't connect with. It is a great poem and I wish you luck in the contest.
I have to give credit where it is due and this poem deserves it. I can't even think of the right word I want to use to describe it. Fantastic, marvelous, terrific; none of them seem to suffice. It is so INTENSE, it grabs you and makes you feel what the two in the poem must be experiencing. This is yet another form that I am not familiar with, but by your definition, you executed it brilliantly. In regards to spelling, grammar and punctuation, this poem has no errors.
I have never heard of this type of poem until I read yours today. It is quite interesting in its concept and form. I am sure many people can relate to what you have written here. I think the last line, which is actually only one word, it the most powerful. I'd like to think it's why we write. To escape reality now and again. You have written this poem wonderfully and without errors. Great attention to detail. Thanks for sharing it. I can see why it won!
This is a very profound poem. I feel it speaks for all of the unknown soldiers that give up their freedom to fight for their country. The poetry form is standard and the meter is fine. The rhyme scheme starts out very well in the first two stanzas but then is lost. I am not sure if that was your intention so I thought I would mention is. As far as errors go, this poem does not have any. Great writing my friend.
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Overall Impression:
I had a good chuckle while reading this delightful poem. The picture you painted with your descriptive wording, gave me a scene like no other. This poem is light-hearted, witty and a joy to read. I would recommend it to anyone who enjoys a good laugh.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form and meter of this poem are fabulous and it has an excellent rhyme scheme. Each line fits perfectly with the next and it not only tells and story, it shows one.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There are no errors in this poem.
Closing Comments:
I immensely enjoyed this comedic poem of yours. Keep up the good work!
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Overall Impression:
This is truly an impressive poem. You have managed to create a wonderful image for the reader by describing these rivers the way you have. I have to say, before I read this poem I had never heard of them before. Or the tribes you mention at the end. Thank you for enlightening me!
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form you chose for this poem is perfect. It flows wonderfully in style and in meter. Superb!
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in the fantastic poem. Great attention to detail!
Closing Comments:
I am honored to have been able to read this poem. I look forward to reviewing more of your work.
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Overall Impression:
This is a lovely inspirational poem that speaks to its readers. It shows us that if we take a chance and open up our hearts; love will eventually find us.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I didn't see any issues with the form of this poem. It had a strong rhyme scheme except for the first two lines. The meter of this poem needs no editing.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
The spelling and grammar in this poem are error free, however, I think you should end each line that doesn't complete a full thought or sentence with some form of punctuation.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for your participation in my contest. Good Luck and Write On!
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Overall Impression:
This is a deep and dramatic poem. It gives the reader an opportunity to see how others perceive something as natural as rainfall. The content of this poem has great imagery and I found it to be well written.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
This poem does has not rhyme pattern but the form and the meter are both executed wonderfully.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I feel this poem needs more punctuation at the end of its line to create a break for its readers. I will also give the poem added impact.
Closing Comments:
This is a great poem and I hope it gets the recognition it deserves. Good luck in the contest.
This is a great way to get to know other members. Not only do you find out some interesting facts, you also get read a lot of trumped up stories. I looked at some of the entries you have in here and I would have a hard time guessing what is the true statement.
The content of this In and Out is well constructed. The directions are easy to follow and I didn't find any errors. When you have another round I may just have to enter. Thanks for bringing more fun to WDC!
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Overall Impression:
I really like the style you chose to write this poem. I also like the blend of the poem with the play. It has an old feel to it reminiscent of something written in the Old English style. It is quite unique.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I found all of these elements to be delivered wonderfully.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
In the second stanza, second line, you have misspelled "knight." I didn't see any other errors.
Closing Comments:
I enjoyed reading this poem that is a bit different from the "norm." Thank you for sharing it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Write on!
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Overall Impression:
This is a deeply profound poem that shows the reader how quickly time flies and how suddenly a life can be taken. It paints a picture of innocence and regret. I found this poem very moving.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The content of this poem is great but I do feel the form needs some editing. By evening it out, you can create stanzas that have a great deal of emphasis. I found no problem with the meter and there is no rhyme scheme to comment on.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in any of these areas.
Closing Comments:
I truly enjoyed this poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Overall Impression:
This piece has potential but I must say I was greatly confused in the middle of this piece where you make a drastic change from "she" to "he." You don't give the reader enough information as to where the "he" comes from. It almost seems as if you have made a mistake by forgetting the "s" on she.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
There is no particular rhyme pattern in this piece and I assume that it because you have this listed as lyrics. The form is fine and there are no problems with the meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
No errors were found in spelling or grammar, however, the piece needs punctuation. It is a very effective way of adding emphasis on certain areas.
Closing Comments:
I hope my suggestions are helpful to you. Thanks for sharing your work.
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Overall Impression:
I think you have a good start here with these lyrics but I do feel more is needed to get a true feel of where this lyrical story is going. I could feel a deep seeded sadness from the woman in this piece. From the reader's perspective, it would be nice to know what caused this.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
Since it mirrors a traditional poem; I will say that it has good meter and a solid form.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There are no spelling or grammatical errors but it does need punctuation to add emphasis to the piece.
Closing Comments:
I feel that with a little work you can bring this piece together. Thanks for sharing it.
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Overall Impression:
This could be considered a controversial piece for those who don't understand Paganism; which is an earth based religion. I do feel you are giving it a negative connotation by using the phrase "Just being a bad girl." Choosing to be a pagan may not be accepted by Christians but by no means is it bad.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I didn't find any problems with the form of this poem. The rhyme scheme is solid in the second and fourth lines, however, the meter is slightly off. I would take a look at the syllable counts to even out your meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I found no errors.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for sharing this item with us. Write on!
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Overall Impression:
It is very clear that you and your best friend share a close bond. It's nice to know that no matter what may happen; you always have someone on your side.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form of this poem is well done. It has a strong rhyme pattern and I didn't see any problems with the meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors with spelling or grammar but I do feel each line should end with a form of punctuation.
Closing Comments:
This is a great poem that you have dedicated to your friend. Thanks for entering the contest.
First Impression:
My heart went out to Todd from the moment I read how the others treated him. All of us on some level I feel have been ostracized by society for something, but to do that to a child is even worse. Kids can be the worst offenders of this crime, but if we teach them how to treat others fairly, this problem can diminish.
Form:
This story has great form. It is well paced, easy to read and understand and the dialog is set as it should be.
Imagery & Characterization:
I found many things in this story that I was able to envision. Great work.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this story. Great attention to detail.
As I read this story my heart wept for this family. I still have tears falling down my face as I write this review. You and your daughter are very strong to be able to come to this family's aid when then needed you the most. I am so proud of your daughter for taking a stand for Jesse and you for writing this compelling story.
I feel silly rating this piece because I feel it merits much more than 5 stars. I also don't feel it right to criticize the few errors I found so I won't. Thank you for sharing their story. God bless..
Hi Brianna,
My name is Lisa. I just read your story about Andy and his dinosaurs and I thought it was great. You did a very good job telling everyone how Andy felt about moving and how much he loved dinosaurs. I don't think Jack is a nice person. He was rude to Andy. I was really happy when I found out Andy got all of the things he wanted for Christmas. I did see a few mistakes in your story that your mom may be able to help you fix. Keep on writing Brianna. You are really good.
First Impression:
You have a wonderful poem here that speaks about God's most precious gift; our children. The poem is filled with love and inspiration, however, I feel the use of all capital letter takes away from the poem. I realize you feel your words are important and should stand out, I just don't think this is the way to do it.
Form:
The form of this poem needs some editing. Since you have chosen to write it with all caps, it spreads unevenly over the page and is difficult to read.
Meter:
I didn't see any issues with the meter of this poem.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors in any of these categories.
Overall, you have a great poem and the suggestions I made are just that. This is your work and you don't have to change anything you don't want to.
First Impression:Talk about being glued to the edge of your seat. Holy moly!!! What a wicked story! My eyes were transfixed on the screen as I was reading waiting for something to jump out at me. There was the perfect amount of suspense to keep the reader engrossed to the very end. The ending surprised me. I thought it would end with her friends playing a prank. Boy was I fooled.
Form:
This story has great composition. Well done.
Imagery & Characterization:
The imagery in this piece is fascinating. Your descriptive wording made is quite easy for me to envision what was taking place.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this story. Great writing my friend.
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The form is well prepared, there are no spelling errors and the meter is fine. I do feel that more punctuation could be used, but that is just my opinion. 
First Impression
