This exerpt is one of the best pieces of literature I have read here on writing.com. I am afraid to ask if all of the Lisa Lansing series is based on a true story. It looks like it will be a fantastic read and this piece has me convinced that I need to start reading it.
Your writing skills are exceptional and I admire your dedication to your talent. This report is superbly written and error free. I certainly look forward to reading more of your work.
You paint a wonderful picture with the descriptions you give in this poem. I don't see any issue with the form and the meter is fine, however, I do feel the poem should have punctuation. As it is now, the whole poem seems as if it is one very long sentence. By adding punctuation, it will give the poem a better overall feel as it is read because it will have a pause where it is needed.
This poem is absolutely fantastic! It's not often that something gives me goosebumps when I read it, but this one certainly did. The meter of this poem is impressive and the rhyme scheme is flawless. If this is a glimpse of what you can do; I can hardly wait to read more of your work. Welcome to WDC!
I am always inspired to create something new when I see a contest that focuses on a specific genre. The best part about it, is that it allows writers to test their own ability in an area they may not have even considered before.
Your rules are simple and straight forward and laid out neatly. All of the text for this contest is error free. I personally appreciate the fact that you may reward a prize higher that originally listed if the entry is excellent.
This is a wonderfully original idea for a contest. It give us a chance to step out of the norm and try something a little different for a change. The way in which you have the forum 'decorated', makes it inviting to others. All of your information is set up in an easy to read format and is free from error. The prizes you are offering are also very enticing.
This is a stunning collection of cNotes. Sonnetwolf does a great job creating these images that seem to be everywhere on WDC. The images that you chose for this collection appeal to a variety of different people and the sentiments are great. The fact that you have them reasonably priced is sure to draw a big crowd. Thanks for offering them to the members at WDC Sherri.
I have so many stories running around in my mind that this contest may be just the right place to get one out. I am like yourself; I love erotica but I have never actually taken the time to write anything in that genre.
You have this forum set up perfectly. The rules are well laid out, they are easy to understand and the prizes are absolutely phenominal! The images are what I like best. I have read all of the information you have listed here in great detail and there are no errors.
Hello and thanks for entering my contest. This review is in conjunction with:
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As a mother I was horrified by the severe postpartum depression expericenced by Kayla in this story. It is something I have never had to deal with or understand.
I have to admit I found this story hard to follow because of the way you have it laid out with each character's story being told. It also seemed that parts of it were back-traching making it even more difficult to understand. I would recommend trying to bring it together more and making sure that the sequences within the story are sequential.
Overall though, this is a great story. It gives the reader an inside look at postpartum depression and how it can destroy a person. Great writing my friend.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are meant to assist the writer in editing their work. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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As I read this poem, I could picture a woman, her head hung low with tears streaming down her face. This to me is the sign of good writing; when you can 'see' what the words are saying.
I have never personally heard of this style of poem so I will take your word about the the way it should be written. I can tell you that this poem is error free and that I truly enjoyed reading it.
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Overall Impression:
I can honestly say that I would never want to hear this lullaby. It would surely scare the poo out of any child. But then again, it was written with a purpose in mind.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I found the rhyme scheme in this poem to be quite good but the meter tends to falter in places. I'd suggest reading it aloud and looking for a 'bump' in the line. This usually indicates where the problem lies.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this poem.
Closing Comments:
This is dark and creepy but it is an excellent poem.
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I can easily relate to this poem and the beast within. You have given the reader just enough to allow them to get a picture of this beast; or is it their own they are seeing.
The overall composition of this poem is very neat and clean in appearance. There were no errors detected and the flow of this piece is great. Nice writing my friend.
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I am tickled pink by this adorable set of cNotes. The clip art you used is some of the best I have ever seen. I would also like to thank you for including the link for the clip art. It's nice to know where it comes from and that is wasn't stolen. The fact that you purchased the images to make these notes makes them extra special in my book.
Thank you for making WDC a brighter more colorful place.
You have a very tasteful and well decorated contest here. I am so glad I happened upon it. The time you have taken to make this forum look the way it does clearly shows. The opening image is stunning!
Looking at the overall layout of the rules and regulations; they are listed in a comprehensive manner which is easy to understand. The links provided are always helpful to those who don't know exactly what bitem is. I would also like to let you know that I didn't find any errors.
I have looked at this contest several times before but I am not sure why I didn't review it. So, I am going to do that now.
I have noticed a trend since a while for "dark" writing. It seems to be a very popular genre. I suppose all of us some 'darkness' within that is looking for an escape. I know I do!
I like the colorful layout of this contest and the image you chose as the head title. I did notice a few errors in the descriptions and rules you have here. Mostly they are spots where you forgot to hit the 'space bar'. For example:
goes bump.Hehe! I Here after bump
NEWAll entries Here after NEW
Note!All winning Here after Note!
There are a few more but I think you should be able to find them.
This is a handsomely decorated multi-purpose forum where members can enter a contest or just share stories and memories with others. By the looks of the entries, it is also extremely successful. Personally I feel some of the images are too big and overpower the page. Since you have a contest here I feel the main focus should be on the contest info but that is just personal preference.
From what I can see you have paid close attention to detail as there were no errors found. Thank you for honoring our veterans.
What a neat idea for a contest! It is certainly original and it seems like it would be a lot of fun. The best part about it is that it challenges the participants to use their creative writing abilities.
The rules are set out in an orderly fashion and are clear cut and easy to understand. The colors add and aesthetically pleasing look to the overall contest. I did find one error on the page and that is in the spelling of 'squirrel'. You have an extra 'l' on the end.
You have an attractive collection of cNotes here in this romantic set. The images are perfectly matched with the sentiment. I love the way you left so much to the imagination with several of the notes here. The ones with the feathers and strawberry are my personal favorites.
I appreciate the time you took to create these cNotes for our community. Thanks!
I simply adore this set of cNotes. The captions you have included with them are priceless. I can hardly stop laughing; especially at the missed period one! I know I will be back for sure to send that one. These are a sure fire way to get a point across.
Thanks for taking the time to make them for those of us you can't think of the right things to say.
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In this fast paced poem of a tormented teen I felt myself holding my breath as I read it. It all seemed so real. As if it were happening right before me. Even though parts of the poem have broken dialog it all flows together uniformly. The punctuation is all correct and there are no spelling errors. Nice work!
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Overall Impression:
The description you give for this poem assists the reader in better understanding what you are talking about. This poem is magnificent! Even though I am not a teacher, this poem was very reflective for me. You have a real winner here.
Form & Meter:
The style you chose to write this poem in works well with the content. The overall flow of this piece is seamless.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
Your a teacher...Do I have to say anything else?
Closing Comments:
Great writing my friend.
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Overall Impression:
This is a deeply profound poem. I originally thought that "Nameless" meant that you hadn't thought of a name for the poem yet. I see now that I was wrong.
Form & Meter:
I would like to see the form of this poem with a bit more structured. I don't think the brackets are necessary in this poem either. I realize you want to place special emphasis on them but I feel there is another way of doing this. You could highlight them with italics and make the font a light grey shade for instance. Like this:
Nameless though you are
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these areas.
Closing Comments:
I am always here if you have any questions. Please feel free to email me. Thanks for entering the contest.
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This poem is simply beautiful. It has a sense of comfort to it and it wrapped me up in a soft warm blanky. I love the colors you chose to highlight this poem.
The flow of this poem is seamless and there are no errors. I have one suggestion though. In the last stanza you have:
a lone voice calls...
calling me home
Instead of repeating the word 'call' might I suggest the word 'beckons' for the first line so it would read:
a lone voice beckons...
calling me home.
Other than that I think you have a wonderful poem here.
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This poem is without a doubt one of the best I have ever read. It gave me goosebumps and such a vivid image of this mystical land. I am truly amazed by and in awe of your talent. I am giving you 5 stars because that is the highest I can go otherwise I would give you much much more.
Technically, you followed the pattern for this particular style sonnet perfectly and there are no errors. I have NO doubt in my mind whatsoever, that some day you WILL be published!!!
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Sometimes is doesn't take a lot of words to make a poem great. You have taken an object, something as simple as a snowflake, and made it seem magical. Most things are when seen through a child's eye.
Your poem is eloquent, yet simple and truly beautiful. The color adds an esthetically pleasing emphasis for the reader. The meter is spot on and there are no errors.
Thank you for your entry in my contest.
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This is an absolutely wonderful poem! You ask some very poignant questions and they are answered with logical responses. There is such deep meaning in your words that I was truly moved by them. If I am right, I believe that the Golden Glow is that of our heavenly father. The power he wields is phenominal.
The poem flows beautifully, there are no issues with the form and I didn't find any errors. Thank you for allowing me the priviledge of reading your work.
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The images are what I like best. I have read all of the information you have listed here in great detail and there are no errors. 
I know I will be back for sure to send that one. These are a sure fire way to get a point across.