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Overall Impression:
I am fascinated by the way you brought this poem together. It didn't seem as if any of the things you mention would fit together but they do and that is amazing. You have an admirable gift.
Form & Meter:
I felt that the form of this poem worked well with the content of the poem. The overall flow of this piece is wonderful.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:The grammar and punctuation are fine, however, I did find one spelling error: "thier" should be "their".
Closing Comments:
You are a wonderful poet and I look forward to reading more of your work.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Overall Impression:
This is an absolutely remarkable poem! The imagery in it is breath taking to say the least. There is so much depth and character to this piece it would be hard for anyone not to enjoy it. You have a wonderful way with words!
Form & Meter:
I went over this poem a few times mostly because I enjoyed it so much and partly due to the fact that it flowed so well I was drawn to it.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
All there elements are flawless. Bravo!!
Closing Comments:
Excellent writing my friend. Don't stop.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Very interesting...This is quite a thought provoking poem. It gives the reader a moment to stop and absorb what you are saying. It sure made me think.
I like the simplistic form you chose for this piece. It is easy to read and flows well. There are no spelling spelling errors and the punctuation is perfect.
I'm pleased that you decided to enter the contest. Good luck!
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Ouch! I have to say that I could feel your anger and contempt oozing out of this poem in droves. I can also say I don't disagree with you one bit. You raise many good points with this piece that some may call controversial. It takes someone with a great deal of self confidence to openly express their feelings like you have here.
Looking at your poem from a technical standpoint, I will say that it contains a wide variety of imagery for the reader. The form is standard, the meter good and it is free of errors.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Overall Impression:
I agree that you need a good sense of humor to appreciate this poem. I loved it! I think you have got what being a 'bride' is all about.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I didn't see any problems with the form or the rhyme pattern in this piece. The meter however, starts to lose its grace in the 5th stanza. Take a look at the syllable count, it might help to even out the meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
No errors were found.
Closing Comments:
You gave me a good laugh with this poem. Thanks for entering the contest.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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I like the feelings you express for the subject of this poem. However, it would be nice for the reader to know why they can't have the person they desire. I think it would add to the overall effect of the poem.
On a happier note, I can honestly say I can relate on a personal level to this poem. It is well written has good form and meter and there are no errors.
Write on!
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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This poem about your father is very touching. I like that fact that you included so much of your history with him. It gives the read a bit of insight as to the kind of person you are.
As for the technical aspects of this poem. The form in which you have this poem suggests that it is free form or free verse but you have included a rhyme scheme. The two don't normally mix. I would suggest breaking the poem into stanzas with about 4 lines each.
I would also take a look at the syllable count in each line and try and keep them as even as possible. This will help with the overall flow of the poem.
On a lighter note, there were no errors found in this poem.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are solely the reviewers. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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I can understand first hand the feelings expressed in this poem. I think that is why I find it so disturbing. When you love someone as much as the person in this poem loves the one they lost, we start losing our own identities. It becomes more of a dependency or obsession than love. Feeling sad, hurt even lost are normal. But when you just can't live without the other person in your life then you know something is wrong.
Your poem conveys many things to its readers. It has good form and meter and there are no errors.
I only mentioned what I did above in case this poem is written from personal experience. I didn't want you to feel you were alone. I hope it helped.
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Overall Impression:
Breaking up is hard to do. We all have been there at one time or another and this poem highlights some of the sore spots.
Form & Meter:
The overall form of this poem is fine but there are a few places where the flow is a bit 'bumpy'. This of course is my opinion and only you know your work best.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this poem.
Closing Comments:
Loving someone is a wonderful thing but being dependent on them for our own happiness isn't. Something to think about. Write on!
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Overall Impression:
As I read this poem I had a few pangs of self pity because I have never really had many friends. This poem gave me a look at what a true friendship is like. The emotions you bring with this poem hit me hard. This is what writing is all about.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
You have a good rhyme pattern going in this poem and solid structure. The poem flows nicely from stanza to stanza without any bumps along the way.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
These areas are free from error.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us here at WDC. Keep up the good work!
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I found my true love almost four years ago so I can relate on a very personal level with this poem. The feelings captured in this poem are full of life. Love is a wonderful thing and so is this poem.
The form is well displayed, the meter is fine and there weren't any errors. I thought the image you displayed at the end of this poem fit perfectly with the theme. Thanks for entering the contest.
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I can tell from this poem that you care very deeply for your brother. The heartfelt sentiment in this poem is wonderful and evokes positive feeling in the reader. I think the form could use some work but overall the rest of the poem is fine. You did very well with the rhyme scheme. In closing I will mention that there were no errors found in this piece. Write on my friend.
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Well done my fellow poet. I have to say I enjoyed this poem and the message it brings. I felt my head nodding along with each line that rang true. The prose style is very easy to read and comprehend. The meter is great and I didn't come across any errors. I especially enjoy the title you gave to this piece. It's very fitting. Keep up the good work.
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Round 4 Review. I am sorry it's so late.
Even though the content of this poem isn't anything to laugh about, I found myself quite amused with it. You have done a wonderful job with this piece and given me a much needed chuckle.
The form you chose is executed perfectly and the overall flow of the poem is ideal. I appreciate the fact that you added the information about the form at the bottom of this poem. It allows readers who may not be familiar with it to educate themselves.
On a technical note, I didn't find any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors in this poem.
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Round 4
Hello,
I must say that I really enjoyed this poem. I have always been fascinated by crows and your poem describes them perfectly. The imagery you create with your descriptive wording allowed me to visualize these mysterious creatures with ease. The rhyme pattern in this piece is marvelous. It flows so well that when I read it, it almost felt like I was chanting. Bravo!
I must mention that there were no spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors in this piece. Nice work!!!
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Round 4 review..I am sorry it is so late.
Overall Impression:
You have a very interesting poem here. I enjoyed the way you described the image you saw of the woman with the Dark Angel. It says quite a bit about your talent. I am impressed.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form you chose for this poem is one of the most popular I see. The meter is slightly off in a few places. The syllabic count differs from line to line however, the rhyme pattern is fine.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these areas. Great attention to detail.
Closing Comments:
You have a wonderful way with words and I truly enjoyed reading this poem. Thanks for bringing it to my contest.
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I have never heard 'love' described in such an insightful way. You certainly have a way with words. This poem is quite unique and I truly enjoyed reading it. The form is great and the meter and rhyme pattern are both excellent. There are no spelling error, the grammar is perfect as well as the punctuation. I admire your writing ability my friend. Thank you for bringing your talent to this contest.
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Round 4 Review I apologize for the lateness of this review.
Overall Impression:
I was deeply moved by the emotions I felt while reading this poem. Sadness and deep regret were what I felt the most. In my opinion, if you can evoke that type of reaction in a person who simply reads it, that is good writing.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I can see that you paid special attention to the syllabic count and rhyme pattern in this piece. This shows me that you take pride in your work. Nice job!
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
No errors were found.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for sharing this wonderful work of art.
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I love the memories brought to mind in this poem. They are ones to be cherished for a lifetime. However, I feel that the rhyme scheme in this poem was forced. This makes the poem quite difficult to read. With that being said, the poem is error free and I did really enjoy reading it. Good luck in the contest.
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Round 4 Review Sorry it's so late.
I love the honesty and simplicity of this fine poem. You tell such a wonderful story about a place you love and it certainly shows in your words.
The form you chose is standard in my opinion but I feel it works well for this poem. You had a good rhyme scheme going in the first part of this poem but it seemed to fizzle out near the end. I don't think it negatively impacts this piece though.
I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors in this poem and the punctuation is perfect. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Good luck in the contest.
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Round 4 review. Please accept my apologies for the lateness of this review.
Overall Impression:
You have a very eloquent way of expressing your desires for Independence Day in this poem. It has an air of maturity to it if you know what I mean.
Form & Meter:
The form of this poem is standard for most poems I read. The meter of this particular poem is very sound. Great work.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I can tell you paid close attention to your work in these areas. There were no errors found.
Closing Comments:
I'd have to say that the last stanza if my favorite. The sentiment of thanks rings loud and clear. Thank you for your entry in this contest. Good luck!
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Round 4 Review. I apologize for the lateness of the review.
Bravo!!! This is a wonderful poem! Even though the poem is about death, you managed to speak about it in a way that isn't ominous. Excellent writing my friend. The form of this piece is superb, the meter is perfect and the rhyme scheme is stupendous!!! I am not sure what else I can say other than I truly enjoyed reading it.
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Round 4 review. Sorry it's so late.
Overall Impression:
I really like the way you describe the life cycle of the trees. It is very unique and adds a great deal of character to this poem.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form and meter of this poem are very good. However the rhyme pattern isn't consistent throughout this piece. I feel it effects the overall flow of the poem.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in this poem. Great attention to detail.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for sharing this poem and entering my contest. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Round 4 Review Sorry it's late.
This poems speaks volumes to those who are brave enough to hear what you have written in these words. I could feel my head nodding in agreement with you and your thoughts; especially the last few lines. Will there ever come a day that these abominations will end? All we can do is pray.
The form of this poem is great, the spelling and grammar are flawless. Great attention to detail. You have a true talent my friend and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Round 4 Review
I could feel the goosebumps form on my flesh as I read this poem. It sent a chill up my spine as I read and become more engrossed with each word. I didn't find any errors and the grammar and punctuation are fine. However, I don't particularly like the form of this poem. I feel the length of the longer lines makes the piece harder to read. The stanzas you have like this:
Splinters in the pane
On the field, a crow landing
Shattered, we both hum
Flow much better and are easier to read. This of course is just my personal opinion. Overall, you have a great poem. Write on!
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It is well written has good form and meter and there are no errors. 