First Impression:
I could feel justice being served in this dark and eerie poem. As I read it, I became more aware of the crimes this person had committed and why he was being punished. I think the punishment was equal to the crimes. Great Poem.
Form:
The form of this poem was very well done. The stanzas are equal in size and very easy to read.
Meter:
The meter of this poem does have a few areas that need some adjusting but I don't feel it hinders the overall flow of the poem.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this poem. Great attention to detail.
First Impression:
It certainly seems that someone finally learned a very hard lesson in this story. You did an excellent job with its composition. The paragraphs are well spaced and the dialog stands out separate from the rest of the story. great writing my friend.
Imagery & Characterization:
I feel both of these elements were carefully created throughout the story. You allow the reader to become familiar with the main character and you follow through with that right to the very end. The imagery in this piece is well done also.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I ran this entire story through MS Word and there were no errors found. Great attention to detail.
Thanks for sharing this story with our community. Keep up the good work.
First Impression:
You have a really good story going here. It has a good outline and keeps the readers interest. I do feel that it is a bit boxy. I would recommend breaking your paragraphs up into smaller sections and making sure all the dialog is on a line if its own. This helps the reader distinguish who is talking.
Imagery & Characterization:
I found that both of these areas were well done. I was able to follow the story with images that matched every scene as it unfolded. You have breathed life into your characters; even the less liked bunch.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I did find a numerous amount of errors here. I would highly recommend a run through MS word to help you clean up all the errors and to fix the punctuation.
You have a great start on an even better story. I hope my suggestions come in handy. Write on!
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Overall Impression:
You did very well with this poem using the lines from the song. While I was reading it I tried to find a rhythm or a tune that it would match with. I have to give you credit for your inventive idea. I may have to try that sometime.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The meter was a tiny bit staggered in a few places but I don't feel it impacted the poem negatively. The form and rhyme scheme were fine.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't come across any errors in this poem. Good job!
Closing Comments:
This was an interesting poem. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!
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Overall Impression:
This poem is well written and quite picturesque. I found parts of it very amusing as well. I haven't tried a sonnet yet but I commend you for doing a great job with this one.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The rhyme scheme in this sonnet is great and I didn't see any issues with the form or meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these areas. Great attention to detail.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for bringing this admirable poem to the contest. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Overall Impression:
This short and sweet poem was a delight to read. I can see it being popular with children. It's fresh, funny and it brought a smile to my face.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The rhyme scheme in this poem is very well done. I found no issues with the form or meter.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors in any of these categories.
Closing Comments:
I really enjoyed this poem. I wonder if you ever considered making it longer. There is so much you could add to this and I think it would be the type of poem that would teach and entertain children. Thanks for entering the contest. Good luck.
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Overall Impression:
I think you brought out the best and worst aspects of fishing in this poem. I love the appeal of sitting quietly with your line in the water waiting for that first bite, however I get very annoyed when you think you got the "big one" but he gets away. Nice writing.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I think the form and meter could use some work. I might consider breaking down your stanzas into smaller ones so everything isn't all bunched together. Watch the syllable count of each line when you have a rhyme scheme. See if you can even them out.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors here but I would suggest the use of capitalization with each line.
Closing Comments:
Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!
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Overall Impression:
This poem puts a new spin on the Sandman I remember. The bringer of sleep and pleasant dreams that a song was written about. There is nothing peaceful and serene about this guy. It's very inventive. I have to give you credit for that.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I didn't see any issues with any of these elements in the poem.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
The grammar and punctuation in this piece are fine but I did notice and error in the intro. "Comming" only has one "m."
Closing Comments:
You poem is certainly an original and I am glad you entered the contest. Good luck.
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Overall Impression:
This piece is absolutely priceless!!! I am still laughing hysterically. I can see why it won an award. I do have to say that parts of it reminded me of Seuss. It is certainly an original. I have to give credit where it is due.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
All three of these elements were crafted perfectly.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in this poem.
Closing Comments:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one of a kind poem. Thanks for entering the contest. Good luck.
Traditionally most Haikus are about nature. I see that you have taken a different approach with this particular one. I am not sure if I fully understand the jist of this poem with time stealing lives. Looking at it metaphorically; I can see the comparison.
On a technical note; I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors in this piece. Thanks for sharing it.
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Overall Impression:
I was completely mesmerized by this fantastic tale. You told it with such animation, I felt as if i were right there watching. I feel sorry for the poor dragon. I know how irritating kids can be when they whine. I think that was my favorite part.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
There were a few spots where the meter was slightly staggered but I don't think it effects the overall flow of the poem. The form is great and the rhyme scheme was fantastic.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these areas.
Closing Comments:
This is a wonderful piece I am sure many will enjoy. Thanks for entering the contest.
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Overall Impression:
This is a sweet poem written from the heart. It shows the reader that love, even at an early age, can develop into something that lasts a lifetime.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I feel that the form of this poem could use some work. For such a short poem it is stretched out over the page making it look disproportionate. Tighten the lines and I think it would look much better. There are no issues with the meter. There was no rhyme scheme in this piece.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found.
Closing Comments:
I am sure your sister was very pleased with this poem. Thanks for entering the contest and sharing it with us.
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Overall Impression:
Color me impressed! This poem is filled with vibrancy beyond compare. It is so detailed and well structured I found it hard to pull myself away. The imagery you created with this poem is astounding. I am truly in awe of your talent.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
Though there is no rhyme scheme present in this poem the form and meter are perfect! You write very well in this style.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors of any kind in this poem.
Closing Comments:
Before I read this piece, I was not familiar with Walt Whitman. Thank you for introducing me to yet another wonderful style of poetry.
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Overall Impression:
Two feelings washed over me as I read this poem. One was joy for having found such a friend, the other was sadness because she is so far away. I know the web isn't the best way to keep in touch with those we care about but if its all we have we must learn to get used to it.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
This poem didn't have much in the way of a rhyme scheme, but the form and meter were well executed.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors in any of these areas.
Closing Comments:
I enjoyed this poem and thank you for entering the contest. Good luck!
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Overall Impression:
This is certainly not the same type of poem that you normally write. I have to admit I had a very hard time with this poem. I found it hard to decipher and understand. Much of it didn't make sense to me, but that of course is my own observation.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
The form of this poem is fine but I did find that the meter was staggered in a few places. The rhyme scheme was very sporadic.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these categories.
Closing Comments:
I hope my comments above weren't too harsh. I didn't intend for them to be. Good luck in the contest.
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First Impression
This is a fun and light-hearted poem. I laughed the whole time I read it. You have a wonderful imagination and a great sense of humor.
Imagery
My eyes were filled with laughing tears thinking about all of the things you could get away with if in fact we were invisible. It would be priceless.
Meter
The meter of this piece is great and the rhyme scheme spot on.
Spelling
I didn't find any errors.
Grammar & Punctuation
There were no errors in either category.
Additional Comments
Thank you for the much needed laughing spree. Good luck in the contest.
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First Impression
I watched the television in horror that day and the many days after. It was very hard for me emotionally to read this poem because I fear death but I forced myself to do it for those who lost their lives. This poem made me cry more than the first broadcast; for now I know their names.
Imagery
I relived that nightmare through this poem. It's heart-wrenching and mind boggling that anyone could do this. I shivered at the images I recounted.
Meter
The meter and rhyme in this poem are great. They work well together.
Spelling
I didn't find any spelling errors in this poem.
Grammar & Punctuation
Both of these elements are very well done.
Additional Comments
I admire your courage for writing this on behalf of the dearly departed. Good luck in the contest.
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First Impression
I have never had the pleasure to see this type of bird where I live. I can tell though, by this poem, you certainly do enjoy their presence.
Imagery
I must admit I did a Google search to see this Killdeer. With a knowledge of what they look like I was better able to see their daily comings and goings. I especially like the black rings they have around their necks.
Meter
This poem has good meter and a consistent rhyme pattern.
Spelling
I found no errors while reading this poem. You are very meticulous.
Grammar & Punctuation
Both are very well executed.
Additional Comments
Thank you for intorducing me to one of nature's beauties.
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First Impression
This poem is very deep and goes straight to the core of our insecurities. I don't think there are many of us that can look in a mirror and be truly happy with what they see. It takes a great deal of work for us to see the good inside shine on the outside.
Imagery
I think the imagery in this poem is basic and pertains to each of us as we read it. No two people are exactly alike, except maybe twins, but we all can see the changes that need to be made for us to be happy.
Meter
The meter in this poem is very good.
Spelling
The spelling in this poem is error free.
Grammar & Punctuation
There were no errors in either category,
Additional Comments
This poem made me take a step back and re-evaluate myself. Thanks for entering the contest. Good Luck.
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First Impression
My heart wept for this poor lonely little girl. You told her story beautifully and in the end I think she won.
Imagery
The imagery in this poem touched my heart. I could see the innocent little babe with wondering eyes. I watched her grow up and become a mother. This poem is very emotional.
Meter
The meter and rhyme scheme in this poem are very good. It was easy to read and had great flow.
Spelling
There were no spelling errors in this poem.
Grammar & Punctuation
Grammar and punctuation are very precise.
Additional Comments
I'm glad that in the end the little girl made the right choice. I think this poem in an inspiration to all that may have lived this. Write on my friend.
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First Impression
I am wondering if it was your intention to write this poem in the ABCeDarius form or if you just wrote it using the alphabet. Either way this is a good poem. It speaks of death and destruction; of hope and rebirth.
Imagery
The images that I saw with this piece were catastrophic. Death and destruction abound. Yet in the shadows, I saw rebirth. The beginning of a new era.
Meter
I didn't see any issues with the meter of this poem.
Spelling
There were no spelling errors in this poem.
Grammar & Punctuation
The grammar in this poem is fine but it lacks punctuation. I feel it is needed to add emphasis to each line.
Additional Comments
You did a good job with this. I wish you luck in the contest.
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First Impression
I am sure there are many people that can relate to the feeling and emotions expressed in this poem. When we care for something with our hearts and soul, then lose it, we have deep regret. I think you expressed yourself well in this poem.
Imagery
I can't say there was much in the way of imagery in this poem. It was more about how someone felt. It didn't describe how the person reacted. Did they cry, or punch things etc. You may want to consider adding some of that kind of wording.
Meter
I found a few places in this poem where the meter could be edited. Look at the syllable count and try to even it out.
Spelling
There were no spelling errors found.
Grammar & Punctuation
The grammar and punctuation are both fine.
Additional Comments
With just a small amount of editing this poem would shine. Good luck in the contest.
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First Impression
This is a very suspense filled poem. I was on the edge of my seat thinking the poor deer was going to lose the battle. You were able to hold my interest until the very end. I am pleased it turned out well.
Imagery
You did quite well in this area. The images of the lioness and the deer were clear and vivid.
Meter
I think the meter in this poem is good.
Spelling
The only spelling error I found was in the main title of the poem. You have prowl as prowel.
Grammar & Punctuation
There are no problem with the grammar or punctuation.
Additional Comments
Thanks for entering the contest. Good luck.
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First Impression
I never learned much about the Holocaust in school but I have read more about it recently and your poem touches the heart of the subject. So many lives were sacrificed for power and control. It sickens me.
Imagery
The imagery is clear and vivid. I can't bear to be reminded of it. The pain is far too unsettling.
Meter
The meter of this poem is great.
Spelling
There were no spelling errors found in this poem.
Grammar & Punctuation
Grammar and punctuation are great.
Additional Comments
This is a difficult subject to write about. I think you did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
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First Impression
The most powerful portion of this poem for me were the last two lines: For the wound of the loss of a loved one, Is a wound that can never be healed. I believe this 100%. I feel it is just something a person can't ever get over. It may get easier but the loss will always haunt you.
Imagery
The image of two brothers on a cliff and one plummeting to his death is horrifying. I could see the whole scene unfold before my eyes quite vividly. It gave me the chills.
Meter
The meter is a tiny bit staggered in a few place. I don't feel however it effects the overall flow of the poem.
Spelling
There were no spelling errors found in this poem.
Grammar & Punctuation
The grammar and punctuation are spot on.
Additional Comments
This is a sad tale you tell in this poem but it is one that evokes emotion in the reader. Job well done my friend.
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