I have so many stories running around in my mind that this contest may be just the right place to get one out. I am like yourself; I love erotica but I have never actually taken the time to write anything in that genre.
You have this forum set up perfectly. The rules are well laid out, they are easy to understand and the prizes are absolutely phenominal! The images are what I like best. I have read all of the information you have listed here in great detail and there are no errors.
I am awed by these exquisitely created cNotes. They way in which you have showcased the authors of WDC is remarkable. Your photography is impeccable and is some of the best here on writing.com. The vivid colors in each of these images are truly amazing and you have them decorated perfectly. Thank you for bringing your artistry here for all to enjoy!
Hello and thanks for entering my contest. This review is in conjunction with:
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As a mother I was horrified by the severe postpartum depression expericenced by Kayla in this story. It is something I have never had to deal with or understand.
I have to admit I found this story hard to follow because of the way you have it laid out with each character's story being told. It also seemed that parts of it were back-traching making it even more difficult to understand. I would recommend trying to bring it together more and making sure that the sequences within the story are sequential.
Overall though, this is a great story. It gives the reader an inside look at postpartum depression and how it can destroy a person. Great writing my friend.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are meant to assist the writer in editing their work. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Overall Impression:
I can honestly say that I would never want to hear this lullaby. It would surely scare the poo out of any child. But then again, it was written with a purpose in mind.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I found the rhyme scheme in this poem to be quite good but the meter tends to falter in places. I'd suggest reading it aloud and looking for a 'bump' in the line. This usually indicates where the problem lies.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in this poem.
Closing Comments:
This is dark and creepy but it is an excellent poem.
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I can easily relate to this poem and the beast within. You have given the reader just enough to allow them to get a picture of this beast; or is it their own they are seeing.
The overall composition of this poem is very neat and clean in appearance. There were no errors detected and the flow of this piece is great. Nice writing my friend.
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I am tickled pink by this adorable set of cNotes. The clip art you used is some of the best I have ever seen. I would also like to thank you for including the link for the clip art. It's nice to know where it comes from and that is wasn't stolen. The fact that you purchased the images to make these notes makes them extra special in my book.
Thank you for making WDC a brighter more colorful place.
You have a very tasteful and well decorated contest here. I am so glad I happened upon it. The time you have taken to make this forum look the way it does clearly shows. The opening image is stunning!
Looking at the overall layout of the rules and regulations; they are listed in a comprehensive manner which is easy to understand. The links provided are always helpful to those who don't know exactly what bitem is. I would also like to let you know that I didn't find any errors.
I have looked at this contest several times before but I am not sure why I didn't review it. So, I am going to do that now.
I have noticed a trend since a while for "dark" writing. It seems to be a very popular genre. I suppose all of us some 'darkness' within that is looking for an escape. I know I do!
I like the colorful layout of this contest and the image you chose as the head title. I did notice a few errors in the descriptions and rules you have here. Mostly they are spots where you forgot to hit the 'space bar'. For example:
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There are a few more but I think you should be able to find them.
This is a handsomely decorated multi-purpose forum where members can enter a contest or just share stories and memories with others. By the looks of the entries, it is also extremely successful. Personally I feel some of the images are too big and overpower the page. Since you have a contest here I feel the main focus should be on the contest info but that is just personal preference.
From what I can see you have paid close attention to detail as there were no errors found. Thank you for honoring our veterans.
What a neat idea for a contest! It is certainly original and it seems like it would be a lot of fun. The best part about it is that it challenges the participants to use their creative writing abilities.
The rules are set out in an orderly fashion and are clear cut and easy to understand. The colors add and aesthetically pleasing look to the overall contest. I did find one error on the page and that is in the spelling of 'squirrel'. You have an extra 'l' on the end.
You have an attractive collection of cNotes here in this romantic set. The images are perfectly matched with the sentiment. I love the way you left so much to the imagination with several of the notes here. The ones with the feathers and strawberry are my personal favorites.
I appreciate the time you took to create these cNotes for our community. Thanks!
I simply adore this set of cNotes. The captions you have included with them are priceless. I can hardly stop laughing; especially at the missed period one! I know I will be back for sure to send that one. These are a sure fire way to get a point across.
Thanks for taking the time to make them for those of us you can't think of the right things to say.
Once again I come across some delightfully decorated cNotes by Dragon Blue. You have a knack for creating images that appeal to the masses. They are bright and cheery and tastefully done. I noticed on the last cNote that is doesn't give the #1 sign you are getting older. I am not sure if that was an oversight or if you left it blank for the sender to fill in. In any case, the collection is still great!
As always dear friend your artwork is lovely and these cNote are beautiful. I love the way you have these images decorated. The messages you have included with the notes are very inspiring. You have done a brilliant job with them. Thanks for sharing them.
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In this fast paced poem of a tormented teen I felt myself holding my breath as I read it. It all seemed so real. As if it were happening right before me. Even though parts of the poem have broken dialog it all flows together uniformly. The punctuation is all correct and there are no spelling errors. Nice work!
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are meant to assist the writer in editing their work. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Overall Impression:
The description you give for this poem assists the reader in better understanding what you are talking about. This poem is magnificent! Even though I am not a teacher, this poem was very reflective for me. You have a real winner here.
Form & Meter:
The style you chose to write this poem in works well with the content. The overall flow of this piece is seamless.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
Your a teacher...Do I have to say anything else?
Closing Comments:
Great writing my friend.
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Overall Impression:
This is a deeply profound poem. I originally thought that "Nameless" meant that you hadn't thought of a name for the poem yet. I see now that I was wrong.
Form & Meter:
I would like to see the form of this poem with a bit more structured. I don't think the brackets are necessary in this poem either. I realize you want to place special emphasis on them but I feel there is another way of doing this. You could highlight them with italics and make the font a light grey shade for instance. Like this:
Nameless though you are
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There were no errors found in any of these areas.
Closing Comments:
I am always here if you have any questions. Please feel free to email me. Thanks for entering the contest.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are meant to assist the writer in editing their work. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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This poem is simply beautiful. It has a sense of comfort to it and it wrapped me up in a soft warm blanky. I love the colors you chose to highlight this poem.
The flow of this poem is seamless and there are no errors. I have one suggestion though. In the last stanza you have:
a lone voice calls...
calling me home
Instead of repeating the word 'call' might I suggest the word 'beckons' for the first line so it would read:
a lone voice beckons...
calling me home.
Other than that I think you have a wonderful poem here.
*The opinions and suggestions expressed in this review are meant to assist the writer in editing their work. They are in no way meant to be disrespectful to the writer. Only the writer can choose what is in their best interest as far as their work is concerned.
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Overall Impression:
The sentiment of this poem touched my heart. This is a lovely work of art. Your dedication at the end of this poem made me cry.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
You have done a superb job with the rhyme pattern and the meter of this poem. They both work well with the form you chose.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
There are no errors to be corrected in this poem.
Closing Comments:
I wish I had memories like this to cherish. You are very lucky. Thanks for entering the contest.
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This poem is without a doubt one of the best I have ever read. It gave me goosebumps and such a vivid image of this mystical land. I am truly amazed by and in awe of your talent. I am giving you 5 stars because that is the highest I can go otherwise I would give you much much more.
Technically, you followed the pattern for this particular style sonnet perfectly and there are no errors. I have NO doubt in my mind whatsoever, that some day you WILL be published!!!
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Sometimes is doesn't take a lot of words to make a poem great. You have taken an object, something as simple as a snowflake, and made it seem magical. Most things are when seen through a child's eye.
Your poem is eloquent, yet simple and truly beautiful. The color adds an esthetically pleasing emphasis for the reader. The meter is spot on and there are no errors.
Thank you for your entry in my contest.
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This is an absolutely wonderful poem! You ask some very poignant questions and they are answered with logical responses. There is such deep meaning in your words that I was truly moved by them. If I am right, I believe that the Golden Glow is that of our heavenly father. The power he wields is phenominal.
The poem flows beautifully, there are no issues with the form and I didn't find any errors. Thank you for allowing me the priviledge of reading your work.
This is actually quite good and as I read it, I kept the Beetle's song in mind. If fits well with the lyrics. I applaud your efforts because I can't imagine this was easy to do.
Overall, your poem has good form, even meter and there were no errors. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I would certainly agree that this is a dark and emotional poem. Despite the fact that it is very difficult to read; it is written well. I could feel the rage and torment this character experiences. Your words are very moving.
As far as the form goes, in my opinion it needs work. The large, capitalized font and the blockiness of this piece is taking away from the poem's character. These really aren't needed to make a statement. I would choose a form that allows you to make this poem look pleasing to the reader without losing its integrity. Good luck.
This is a sweet story of young love. I feel you have the basic requirements for short story writing, however, you have a great deal of errors regarding punctuation. This can be easily fixed up by running this story through any word processing program.
Secondly, whenever you have dialog in a story, each sentence should be on a line of its own. This helps the reader distinguish who is speaking. You should also look at the body of this piece. There should be breaks between the paragraphs so it doesn't look blocky.
I also noticed a spelling error in your Author's Note. "wroten" should be "written"
I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you.
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The images are what I like best. I have read all of the information you have listed here in great detail and there are no errors. 
I know I will be back for sure to send that one. These are a sure fire way to get a point across.