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Review of The Door  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sparky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Door"  because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (March 1, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the idea that it would have been better if the door remained locked. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the repetition of It would have been better if the door had remained locked.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the active descriptions.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Graywriter , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Cabin in the Woods"  because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (March 1, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the flurry of snow across the windshield. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, of thea rustic cottage, I suggest changing thea to the.

My favorite part: I like Professor Samardjic because he is an intriguing and somewhat sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Professor Samardjic.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Graywriter , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "AI Don't Want to Die!"  because I discovered it in "Drama Newsletter (March 1, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Varadkar's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, like a dog running with a torch tied to its tail, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Calvin.

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Review of "1-4-3"  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Serena Blade , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing ""1-4-3""  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker standing on the porch waving to Raul. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the two build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of The Blues  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Vanishing Vapor , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Blues"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first line hooked me. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, Let the bluesman come and play my blues away. I like this line because it climaxes the plot of the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it reflected a blues song.

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Review of Solar Energy  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dave , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Solar Energy"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The second stanza is my favorite because it brought my thoughts back to the title.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject,

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, InkWellspring66 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "I Thank The Lord For Midnight"  because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The third stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because I suspect that is how the Lord feels about many of His lovers.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written prayer-poem a 5.0, because it gave me something to think about concerning prayer.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Espero , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Review of Bitter Tears"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this review hooked me because of the album's Native American theme. The author moves the narrative forward with a thought-provoking and educational review of a little known album.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the explanations of the songs because they educate the reader on the tragedies that were forced on the Native Americans by the white people.

Final Thought: I am giving this educational and thought-provoking review a 5.0 because I learned something from it.

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Review of Quiet Day  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Quiet Day"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with a holiday about everything. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, noise hit me like a brick wall, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Game of Throne  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Hyperiongate , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Game of Throne"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Princess Annie behind bars. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Princess Annie because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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Review of The Train  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, sheepies , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Train"  because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (February 22, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the noise of the train at night. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to continue the finish the mystery/thriller that this story introduces.

My favorite part: I like Frederick because he is an intriguing character with the possibility of being either sympathetic or unsympathetic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this introduction because it aroused my curiosity about the rest of the story.

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Review of The Beginning  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Beginning"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Bella's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Bella and the mouse.

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Review of The Skipper  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What? , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Skipper"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Johnathan trying to decide whether or not to join the game. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Johnathan because he is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Johnathan.

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Review of Blind Faith  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Blind Faith"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Karen mumbling to herself. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Doctor Leonard Moss reference to Gabby's soul visiting a divine dimension.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Professor Albright's crises of faith.

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Review of Destiny  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sumojo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Destiny"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the cloud formation pointing north. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Sarah because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sarah.

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Review of R/V Trip  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "R/V Trip"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the statement about the couple being lost. The conversation and interaction between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the conversation between the couple because it showed their relationship as a family.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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for entry "A Strange Knight" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, BIG BAD WOLF Happy July 4th! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Short Stories and poems"  "A Strange Knight"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Brother Egbert's mule being nervous. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: Possible typo in this sentence, Marcus held his sword. Did you mean Mortus or Marcus?

My favorite part: I like the way the background of the characters are incorporated into the descriptions. I also like the way the various religions of the characters and cultures are shown in this story.

Another thing I like about this story is the battle scenes, because they describe the action in a way that the reader can visualize some of it.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and exciting story a 5.0, because the action and the characters kept me focused on the plot.

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Review of Enemy  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Kyle Curcio , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Enemy"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Aurreiku's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Aurreiku and Pozik because they are intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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Review of Even Prompter  
for entry "Triolet" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Triolet"  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and joyful emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, The ringing repetition sounds. I like this line because it is the essence of the triolet.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the musical sound of the rhythm.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Happy Holidays (NOT)"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The poem at the beginning hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, not only does everything has it's price, but every price has its consequences.. I like this sentence because it is true.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because it sent chills up my spine.

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Review of Explanations  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Explanations"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The questions in the second paragraph hooked me. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a hopeful ending.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Espero , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Si, Senor I Am A Desperado"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, form, plot, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot of the poem with hope and a happy ending.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the active descriptions.

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Review of Nature or Nurture  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Nature or Nurture"  because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the questions. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this as the beginning of a longer story or novel about what happens to the main character over the years.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it suggested that the characters next few years would be unusual.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Sox and Sandals , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A little strange..."  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker liking to be surprised. The descriptions are part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Espero , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Your Past May Catch Up With You"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Joe's success. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because of the lesson it taught.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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