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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, R.S. Cooper , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Beasts that Lurk"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the cottage. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was unexpected and an example of poetic justice.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this take on the story of Hansel and Gretel.

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Review of David's Obsession  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "David's Obsession"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Debbie's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while showing David's persistence. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it showed that sometimes justice is served.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of David's persistence.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, 🌕 HuntersMoon , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "'Twas the Night Before Christmas ..."  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (December 21, 2022)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the clock striking midnight. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the reaction of the children when they thought they heard Santa.

Final Thought: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because they helped build the humor.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Handsome Bill , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Calendar for Christmas"  because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (December 21, 2022)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked with Stephen Harrison being depressed about Christmas. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the characters because they are intriguing and sympathetic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it sent chills up my spine.

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Review of FORGIVENESS  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing " FORGIVENESS"  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the free verse form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of sadness forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, It is one of the hardest thing. I like this line because it states a fact.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, The Puppet Master , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Ghost In My Mind"  because I discovered it under online authors.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with there being a ghost in the speaker's head. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the speaker overcame Bruno.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this well-written story because of the lesson about overcoming fear.

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Review of The Guardian  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean 4th's Loud Here , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Guardian"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Billy digging tunnels in the snow. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the three boys built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Edge Of Time  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, super sleuth , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing " Edge Of Time"  because I discovered it on The Hub under Random Reads.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of sorrow forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, Now this empty shell I call my soul...burns for eternity. I like this line because it closes the poem and gives the reader something to think about.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the emotion of sorrow.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Thorn , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Problem with New Years"  because I discovered it on the holiday genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the New Year being a time to start over. The author moves the narrative forward while giving logical and thought-provoking reason why New Year's resolutions fail.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this phrase, what happens in the holidays stays in the holidays, because it is thought-provoking and makes sense.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this editorial because it gave me several things to consider about New Year's resolutions.

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Review of MISTLETOE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Penelope Moonbeam , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "MISTLETOE"  because I discovered it when I visited your port.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The choice of colors is appropriate to the season. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is joy.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The first verse is my favorite, because it hooked me.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this well-written poem because of the association with the season.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Philippe , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Roddy the Fisherman"  because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Roddy's eyes being blurry and bloodshot. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of Roddy attempting to reel in the stingray.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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Review of Know Yourself  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, 2Troo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Know Yourself"  because I discovered it on the read and review a newbie page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this draft hooked me with listen to the way that you operate. The examples the author gave in this essay about remembering can be used no matter how forgetful a person thinks they are

Suggestions: A word choice in this phase, dirk found its way. Did you meand dirk or dirt.

My favorite part: I like premortem solution because, I know from experience, it helps.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the ideas on how to handle forgetfulness.

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Review of The Debriefing  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JoABuilder , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Debriefing"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise. I also like the description of the planet.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "TV KERF Weekly Challenge "  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of frustration forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way this poem shows how the news causes depression and frustration in people.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its comments about the news.

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Review of That Chair There  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Axton Gard , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "That Chair There"  in response to your request.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem's plot with a lesson.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because the rhythm makes this poem easy to read aloud. This is an excellent children's poem.

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Review of Stopping Time  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Stopping Time"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the reasons Sam Adams wanted to go back in time. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense,

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, especially the part where Sam's wife was jealous of the female robot.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Couples  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Couples"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with You’ll never believe. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the conversation revealed the couple's relationship.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation.

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Review of The Owl in Winter  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dan I Am , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Owl in Winter"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the owl's voice cutting through the night. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while causing the reader to wonder about the owl.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the speaker speculation about the owl, because it gave me something to think about.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this monologue because of the subject.

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Review of Connie Laughed  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Connie Laughed"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Lilly's statement. The conversation between Lilly and her grandmother move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of Cucumber Karma  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Cucumber Karma"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The speaker's statement about a backyard garden hooked me. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part about the cabinets dumping the jars of pickles on the basement floor.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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for entry "The Unconquered" 
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Three Tales of the Solstice"  "The Unconquered"  because I read the other two stories in this book and wanted to read this one.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the metaphor in the first sentence. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this metaphor, shivers jittering down his spine, because it is fresh and descriptive. I also like the way the active descriptions kept me focused on Ike and the movement of the plot.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this exciting story because of the visual and active descriptions.

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Review of Ear Worm  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean 4th's Loud Here , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Ear Worm"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the radio playing the song over and over. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the speaker because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because I learned a new phrase Idée fixe.

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for entry "A Solstice Gnome" 
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Three Tales of the Solstice"  "A Solstice Gnome"  because I reviewed the story before in in this book.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Mandy's life being in tatters. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between Mandy and Ismael built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Ismael because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between Mandy and Ismael.

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for entry "Fire on the Mountain" 
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Three Tales of the Solstice"  "Fire on the Mountain"  because I discovered the book on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Johnny waiting to summon the light. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the descriptions of the fiddles being played, because I could visualize them in my mind.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the visual descriptions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jeffhans , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Mystery of the Coprolite."  because I discovered it on the scientific genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the lab using all backup samples to confirm the initial findings. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. I suggest using this story in a longer short story or novel that attempts to solve the coprolite mystery.

My favorite part: I like the second paragraph because of the gold and the age of the sample.

Final Thought: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story, because they give an authentic feeling to the story.

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