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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Washing The Curtains" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker deciding to wash the curtains in the rented room. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the surprise ending.

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Review of The Plan  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Plan" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the escape plan dawn in the sand. The conversation between the characters moves the plot and laughter forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, PureSciFi Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Mentally and Physically" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the Hub under Recently Plugged Items.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Yanica considering eliminating the Kovinans. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between Yanica and the Kovinans build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Thonia because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction between Yanica and the other characters.

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Review of The Next Step  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Next Step" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker feeling done with the years. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last paragraph is my favorite, because it climaxed the stories plot with hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Review of Down by the Water  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dan I Am Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Down by the Water" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite, because it closes the poem with love.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem, because it is a form I have never encountered before.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Christmas Thoughts" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the tree up and the house decorated. The speaker move the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last paragraph is my favorite because it climaxes the story's plot with a mystery.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this beautiful Christmas story.

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Review of Released  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, soulquest Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Released" Open in new Window. because I discovered it when I searched WDC for "spiritual renewal".

First Thoughts: The poem follows the free verse form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are awe and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the comparison of the power of God to that of the ocean.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the way it showed faith .

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Review of Spaces and Voids  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Thomas Seeker Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Spaces and Voids" Open in new Window. because I discovered it when I searched WDC for "spiritual renewal".

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with questions. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace. The questions in both parts help focus the reader's attention, while giving the reader something to think about.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, a inner question, I suggest changing a to an.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, Listening to the voice of intuition from within, to guide me. I like this sentence because, at certain times in our lives, the voice of intuition is the only voice we have to listen to.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this though-provoking essay because of the description of the way the void transforms an individual.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, s. yassa Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Heart's Desire" Open in new Window. because I discovered it when I searched WDC for "spiritual renewal".

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with the questions. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace. The divisions between the sections assist the reader in focusing on the subject of each sections.

Suggestions: I suggest including the translation of the Bible passages used in this essay. I also suggest including the dictionary reference used to define love, joy, and peace.

My favorite part: One of the things I like about this essay is the prayer before the section on Love. Another thing I like is the questions ask in each section, because they cause the reader to stop and consider how they would answer the question.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this thought-provoking essay because the questions required me to consider love, joy, and peace on a deeper level.

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Review of Dear God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, KJB Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Dear God" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of longing and fear forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: A possible type in this line, Letting Go spells out -. Did you mean God or Go?

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, Who is putting who on the back burner? I like this line because it ask a question that every person ask when they encounter a spiritual tests.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this thought-provoking poem because it gave me something to think about concerning spiritual problems.

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Review of Visiting Santa  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Visiting Santa" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: Andrea's question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while revealing the characters personalities.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Andrea because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it brought back memories of my childhood.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Madelyn Stone Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Procrastinating Fool at Christmas" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, theme, and plot. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and holiday emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poems plot with joy.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the last minute holiday shopping problem.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Star Light Star Fight" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Marcie singing the wishing song. The interaction between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the Dad's solution to the sister fighting because it was creative and logical.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this holiday story about sibling rivalry.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, R.S. Cooper Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Beasts that Lurk" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the cottage. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was unexpected and an example of poetic justice.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this take on the story of Hansel and Gretel.

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Review of David's Obsession  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Damon Nomad Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "David's Obsession" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Debbie's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while showing David's persistence. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it showed that sometimes justice is served.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of David's persistence.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, 🌖 HuntersMoon Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "'Twas the Night Before Christmas ..." Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (December 21, 2022)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the clock striking midnight. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the reaction of the children when they thought they heard Santa.

Final Thought: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because they helped build the humor.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Handsome Bill Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "A Calendar for Christmas" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (December 21, 2022)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked with Stephen Harrison being depressed about Christmas. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the characters because they are intriguing and sympathetic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it sent chills up my spine.

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, The Puppet Master Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Ghost In My Mind" Open in new Window. because I discovered it under online authors.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with there being a ghost in the speaker's head. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the speaker overcame Bruno.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this well-written story because of the lesson about overcoming fear.

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Review of The Guardian  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Guardian" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Billy digging tunnels in the snow. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the three boys built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Edge Of Time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, super sleuth Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing " Edge Of Time" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on The Hub under Random Reads.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of sorrow forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, Now this empty shell I call my soul...burns for eternity. I like this line because it closes the poem and gives the reader something to think about.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the emotion of sorrow.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Thorn Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Problem with New Years" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the holiday genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the New Year being a time to start over. The author moves the narrative forward while giving logical and thought-provoking reason why New Year's resolutions fail.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this phrase, what happens in the holidays stays in the holidays, because it is thought-provoking and makes sense.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this editorial because it gave me several things to consider about New Year's resolutions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Philippe Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Roddy the Fisherman" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Roddy's eyes being blurry and bloodshot. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of Roddy attempting to reel in the stingray.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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Review of Know Yourself  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, 2Troo Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Know Yourself" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the read and review a newbie page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this draft hooked me with listen to the way that you operate. The examples the author gave in this essay about remembering can be used no matter how forgetful a person thinks they are

Suggestions: A word choice in this phase, dirk found its way. Did you meand dirk or dirt.

My favorite part: I like premortem solution because, I know from experience, it helps.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the ideas on how to handle forgetfulness.

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Review of Stopping Time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Stopping Time" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the reasons Sam Adams wanted to go back in time. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense,

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, especially the part where Sam's wife was jealous of the female robot.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Couples  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Couples" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with You’ll never believe. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the conversation revealed the couple's relationship.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation.

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