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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Espero , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Your Past May Catch Up With You"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Joe's success. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because of the lesson it taught.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of The Omega  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Moonstone , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Omega"  because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (February 15, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the type of work that was accomplished in The Omega. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this story the beginning of a novel about The Omega, with Ananova as the main character.

My favorite part: I like Ananova because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Ananova.

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Review of A HEART OF GOLD  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Penelope Moonbeam , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A HEART OF GOLD"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. This is a beautiful tribute to a wonderful person here on writing.com.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the choice of red to highlight the first letters of each line.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it is a tribute to a writing.com friend.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Door Encounter"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Allie’s door being locked. The conversation between mother and daughter moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, Her hair was badly chopped. I like this sentence because it reminded me of giving myself a hair cut at about age five.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Allie.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Hyperiongate , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing " Bye, Bye Miss American Pie"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with death tapping a man on the shoulder again. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "My Perfect Valentine"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first line of this poem hooked me with the speaker's statement I had dreams. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, To have not a Perfect Valentine, but a human one, I like this line because it expresses the speaker's hope of finding someone to love.

Final Thought: I am giving this well written poem a 5.0 because of the way it expresses the emotion of hope.

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Review of Promises  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Promises"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Danny's response to his father's question. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The leprechaun creatures, because they acted like leprechauns are supposed to act.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the leprechauns.

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Review of The Box  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dan I Am , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Box"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Stephen having to empty his parent's house. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was the logical ending to the story.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the wishes.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Scrnwrtr1 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Premonition Beginning"  in response to your request.

First Thoughts: Chapter 1: The first paragraph hooked me with the hallucinations becoming a gossip item.

Chapter 2: This chapter moves the plot forward, while reveal more of Kristen's in confronting her fears. The end of the chapter

Chapter 3: This chapter does a good job of revealing Kristen's mother's personality, while foreshadowing some of the issues Kristen faces.

Suggestions: The change in point of view and voice in Chapter 3 is not distracting. Putting the change in a different chapter helps the reader to understand the change, while giving them a chance to consider Mary's information. Mary's information will help the reader understand Kristen better.

My favorite part: Chapter 1: This chapter does a good job of revealing Kristen's traumas and causing the reader to sympathize with her.

Chapter 2: Kristen's determination to face her fears.

Chapter 3: I like the straight forward way Mary presents her background, because it helps the reader to understand the family dynamics that led up to Kristen's trauma.

Final Thought: I am looking forward to reading the rest of Kristen's story.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jed Hirst , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "When Einstein Went Missing"  because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the sun. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction of the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of the bridge, because I could visualize it in my mind.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile.

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Review of Cake  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Cake"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Alice rushing to the kitchen. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea of a cake turning someone into a dog.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the cake turning someone into a dog.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Dream Recorder Invented"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the invention of the dream recorder. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this dream recorder as inspiration for a novel.

My favorite part: My favorite part is the recorder's ability to let people enter other people's dreams.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the idea of recording one's dreams.

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Review of MAMA  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, SSpark , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "MAMA"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me because of the author's difficulty figuring out her mother. The author's mother sounds like an intriguing and creative woman.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: My favorite part is about the pets, because it made me smile

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story about a creative woman.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Secrets in the Singing Telegram"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Adela Sayed being stuck in Kabul. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the singing telegram because it is a creative way to send a coded message.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "National Chocolate and Pizza Day"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm of this free verse poem moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a decision.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it was about chocolate and pizza.

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Review of A Dinner Disaster  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Charity Marie - <3 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Dinner Disaster"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker unable to find the spaghetti. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because the dog ate part of the salad.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Max.

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Review of Diamondback Bike  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, fufu , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Diamondback Bike"  because I discovered it in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (February 8, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: My favorite part is the description of the author falling off the bike. Even through I rode my bike in town and on a cement walk, this non-fiction essay brought back memories of me falling off my bike.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the memory of the bike.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Massive Friendly Derg , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Valentines Day-LOVE!"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last last stanza is my favorite because it closed the poem with a positive message.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its message about love.

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Review of The Surprise  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Surprise"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Bob saying it did not look right. The conversation among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part where the baby fixed the problems.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the climax.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, zigglezaggle , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "thoughts on why we're here"  because I discovered it philosophy genre page.

First Thoughts: This thought-provoking editorial gives the readers something to think about concerning time and the meaning of life.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea that we make our own meaning in life.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this editorial because it caused me to think about the meaning of live.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Tooth Fairy Tale"  because I discovered it on the dark genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the man at the bar.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the metaphors and similes used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor, his skin the colour of a newspaper left too long in the sun.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile. Harry is very creative in solving his employment problem.

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Review of Early Beginnings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Early Beginnings"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Jeff being in it making a sandwich. The conversation between Jeff and his mother moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because Jeff's mother took the credit for his success.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Morning Walks  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Morning Walks"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: "Look at that!” hooked me and drew me into the story. The conversation between the couple moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the white rabbits because their conversation made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Moon Material  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JoABuilder , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Moon Material"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker statement about the following conversation. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean 4th's Loud Here , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Groundhog Union #33"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the groundhog union having a meeting. Chester's speech moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Chester because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Chester.

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