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Review of Broadsword  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Jordi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing {item:} because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (April 5, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the tapping on the door waking Jaden up. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Keira and Jaden because they are intriguing and sympathetic characters. The conversation and interaction between them show how much the care about each other.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Keira and Jaden.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Writer_Mike , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "In Cadence, Write!"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (April 5, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, rhythm, mood, theme, and plot. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good rate.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the musical rhythm because it made me want to sing the poem.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the musical rhythm.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Stained Glass Window"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (April 5, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the window. The speaker moved the plot and the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Miss Malone and the fact that she chose a shovel as her weapon.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Looking for Lost Treasures in a Drawer "  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (April 5, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza established the form, mood, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moved narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxed the poem plot with the emotion of love.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it is about Sam Adams.

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Review of Detectives  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What? , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Detectives"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The poem at the beginning of the story hooked me. The interaction and conversation among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this word pre-tteens, I suggest changing the spelling to pre-teens.

I suggest changing the spelling of this word, Wehn to When.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise and a happy ending.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023"  "Week 39 - Time Running Out"  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace, while building toward the poem's message.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last line is my favorite because it states the message of the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it reminded me of the swift movement of time in the life of an individual.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, jonblair , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Star Voyagers: "THE B'ALOSIAN PARADIGM""  because I discovered it on the sci-fi genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the reason the Stargazer was going to Vulcan. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax to this part of the story, because it aroused my curiosity about what was going to happen in the next part.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the detailed description of the action and the uniforms.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Paul , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Legend of Grippa"  because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Thoughts: ?The first paragraph hooked me with the hammer standing for 100 seasons without being touched. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this as the beginning of a longer short story or novel.

My favorite part: I like the description of Grippa's last battle because it showed what the hammer could do.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the hammer.

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Review of RESURRECTION!  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Jaiam , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "RESURRECTION!"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are faith and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The third stanza is my favorite because of the rhyme on known and own. I also like the last stanza because it states the message of the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this well-written poem. because of the way it shows the emotions of faith, love, and hope.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Spiritual Dawning , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Woman's Heart Knows Best"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good paced. The main emotions of this poem is love and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the use of internal rhymes in this poem, because they emphasized the emotions of love.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the use of internal rhymes.

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Review of What Happened?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "What Happened?"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of wondering forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it gives the reader something to think about.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the theme.

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Review of Carved in Stone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Archer , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Carved in Stone"  because I discovered it under read a newbie.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the trio going into the forbidden city. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good paced, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A possible typo in this phrase, dodging bus saws. Did you mean bus saw or buzz saw or something else?

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Present Tense , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Door Closes ... Another Opens"  because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the lights and civilization going out at the same time. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it suggested hope and a happy ending.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the speaker included enough background to answer any questions I had.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, TheNoMonster , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "How Dragons Got their Wings"  because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Cait sitting on a stone bench looking up at the sky. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, like a needle and thread through a piece of fabric, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this beautiful children's story because it was about dragons.

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Review of A Hook Crime  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Opal Nerissa , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Hook Crime"  because I discovered it on "Short Stories Newsletter (March 29, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the reason Chief Inspector Anthony Carlton was brought into the station. The narrative move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: In this phrase, opened the up, I suggest removing the because it is unnecessary.

In this phrase, there had been, I suggest changing there to they because it is referring to the twins.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it brought the clues together while revealing a suspect.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the Peter Pan inspiration.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Kåre Enga in Montana , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Spirit of this Place Chapter#4"  because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (March 29, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with life being fragile. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last paragraph is my favorite because it emphasized hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of the descriptions and the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "A Gentle Voice WC -45"  because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (March 29, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem is hope and helpfulness.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, Come to me, the voice does prompt; I like this line because it answers the first stanza and can be either the voice of a helpful individual or God.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this well-written and positive poem because of the way it showed someone wanting to help the speaker.

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Review of Cycles  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dave , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Cycles"  because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (March 29, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are faith and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, if God is willing. I like this line because it reminds the reader that no matter what happens, God is in control.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it expressed the emotions of hope and faith.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Two Rivers Crossing"  because I discovered it on the scientific genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the explosion lifting Harold off his feet. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, time is like a river moving constantly from source to ocean, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking story a 5.0, because of the way it explained the multiverse.

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Review of Hope  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Quiltingmama , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Hope"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the view from the window. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this metaphor, The silver-tongued asp fills my thoughts, overwhelming me., because it is fresh and descriptive.

I also like the way the speaker describes the process of regaining hope.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written a 5.0 because of the active descriptions.

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for entry "~ Confidence Course ~" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, ruwth , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "ruwth is writing..."  "~ Confidence Course ~"  because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Thoughts: The author gives the reader a good description of a Confidence Course in the military. Reading this essay encourages the reader to attempt something they have never before tried.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, tried my palms, I suggest changing tried to dried.

My favorite part: I like the descriptions because they were concise and written in an active voice.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this essay because it gave me a glimpse of something I have never encounter.

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Review of Woke  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Thomas Seeker , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Woke"  because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (March 22, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the questions. The examples given by the author cause the reader to think about what it really means to be woke. These examples give the reader something to think about.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, ever mind in the house? I suggest changing ever to never.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, being woke to something means that you comprehend the truth of something that you had a blind eye to. I like this sentence because of the definition for woke.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0 because it show what it really means to be woke.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, W.D.Wilcox , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Seduction In The Snow"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, plot, and them of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The third stanza is my favorite because it made me laugh.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Review of Ramadan  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Silver , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Ramadan"  because I discovered it when I searched WDC for Ramadan.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative about the holy month of Ramadan forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are faith and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: These are my favorite line. I like these line because they emphasize faith and undity.
The bond of faith smells sweeter,
Unity shines much brighter,


Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it contained information about Ramadan

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Siobhan Falen , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Payment for Temptation"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the black nugget. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way Tony's father handled the situation, because it reminded me of the way my mother handled a similar situation with one of my brothers.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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