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Review of June  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Sox and Sandals , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "June" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with June's homicidal tendencies. The narrative moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the way June revealed she was different.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Clipped Conversation" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, theme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem, because it made me smile.

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Review of Meditation  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What? , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Meditation" , because I discovered it on the psychology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the definitions for meditation. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader several things to consider.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Let anything which a person focuses on without distraction be termed meditation. I like this sentence because it makes meditation easier and gives a deeper understanding of the process of meditation.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because it gave me a different view of meditation.

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Review of Even Prompter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Waiting for Godot (apologies to Samuel Becket)" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way this poem expresses both the emotions of patience and impatience. The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem plot with impatience.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed emotions.

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Review of Intimacy with God  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Intimacy with God" , because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with God waiting for us to call. The moves the essays theme forward at a good pace. The questions ask in each section cause the read to pause and consider what is being said before moving on the the next section.

Suggestions: I found no difficulties.

I like: I like the emphases placed on making time for God in our lives, because it reminds the readers that they have to make time to listen for the Holy Spirit.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the thought-provoking questions.

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Review of First Contact  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Ryan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "First Contact" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I liked reading this conversation because some of it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the conversation among the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, NOBODYLEARNS , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "This is the UFO [2 segments]" , because I discovered it on the legal genre page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the peace treaty between the United Nations and the United Federations of Outer-space. The descriptions in Segment 2 were part of the action and helped move the plot forward a t a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the conditions in Segment 1 because they were logical, clear, and thought-provoking.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the thought-provoking conditions and the action

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Cosmic Contrapunto" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem, while hooking the reader with the first line. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite, because it ask a question that requires me to think about.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0 because it requires me to think.

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Review of Even Prompter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Brevette" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form, looks good on the page, and makes me hungry for a butter sandwich.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the middle line is longer then the first and second line. It reminds me of a sandwich.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Review of The Messenger  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Messenger" , because I discovered it on the cultural genre page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the sphere of prophecy. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Fern because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I like the lesson this story told about God being interested in humanity.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Finder101 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Love Story of My GrandParents" , because I discovered it under Online Authors.

First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with Mary escaping an unwanted marriage. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader enough information to answer any questions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like both Mary and Adam because they are intriguing people.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this love story because of Mary and Adam.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Dawn Embers , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "tools of confusion" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Jason's question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between Jason and Nick move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Garden of Manna" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Melony's question hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, else weeing simple one color tunics. I suggest changing weeing to wearing.

A typo in this phrase, out them in the bag, I suggest changing out to put.

I like: I like Nithos because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of A Fireside Tale  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, OnlyMagicInkGlows , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Fireside Tale" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the old man's inquiry. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the story teller's ancestor received fire.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Dave Ryan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Long, Boring Day" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Louis's question. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the repetition of a long, boring day, because it helped build the laughter.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, jonblair , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Star Voyagers: "THE GREY CONSPIRACY"" , because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ensign Lindsey's request. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Future Mrs. B , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Real Origins of Memorial Day" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the original name for Memorial Day, because I remember my Grandparents always call it Decoration Day.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the history of Memorial Day is presented because it shows unity in commemorating soldiers who passed in way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its subject.

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Review of Shep-herd  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Shep-herd" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jordie playing a handmade flute. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Jordie and Shep-herd.

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Review of Humans  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, PiriPica , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Humans" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The questions in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this word, wan't, I suggest changing it to want.

I like: The conversation between the werewolf and the vampire made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Anna , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Dismantle (CH 1 un - edited)" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the call from the unknown number. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Peyton because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character. I also like the way this chapter ended because it aroused my curiosity about what was going to happen next.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of the Peyton.

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Review of Night and Day  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Mara ♣ McBain , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Night and Day" , because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker looking forward to seeing horses. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were a good choice for this story because they emphasized the emotions and the relationship between the characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it showed true friendship.

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Review of Alea iacta est  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Writer_Mike , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Alea iacta est" , because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. I wanted to know who was dead and why it was important that Caesar knew. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it answered any questions the first paragraph raised in my mind.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of its historical connection.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Bearclaw , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Gunsmoke and Rose Petals" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker still feeling the pen in his right hand. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to continue this exciting story.

I like: I like the climax of this chapter, because it aroused my curiosity about the events in the next chapter.

Final thoughts: This chapter does a good job of establishing the plot and arousing the reader's curiosity about upcoming chapters.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Family of Their Own Making" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Palvon's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the interaction and conversation among the characters because it revealed their relationship.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Getting Too Tall to Be a Giant Too" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jazon pushing YaVoni away from him. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, off his next to, I suggest changing next to neck.

I like: I like the climax, because it was the logical ending to the story .

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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