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Review of Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sum1 Is Home! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Alone"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Chris not feeling young. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between Chris and Marjorie build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like both Chris and Marjorie because they are intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Terry Wylis , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Flash Fictions for contests"  "Office Magick [300 words]"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Andrew's neurotic organization. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the meaning of each of the rocks were explained.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Review of I AM...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jaiam , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "I AM..."  because I discovered it under online authors.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the repetition of I am throughout the poem, because it gives unity to the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed God's love for humanity.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Vanishing Vapor , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "After the Elections"  because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the election turning out to be a disaster. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way Mike threw the woman over his shoulder and dumped her in the punch.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Mike.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lightspeed555 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Buzz me in, Mr. Allison"  because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the difficulty of keeping work life and non-work life separated. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of the music and the angels.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "How To Get There from Here"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza hooked me with the hillbilly minding his own business. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace while building toward the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza climaxed the poem and made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem, because of the hillbilly's directions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Wilderness Dude , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Forgetting Things I Can't Remember"  because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of grieving forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it expresses faith and hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of way it expressed emotions.

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Review of Ill-Timed  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, AliceLvs2Write , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Ill-Timed"  because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's explanation to the officer. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interation among the characters.

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Review of Screaming Witch  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi, Scarypotato is broken , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Screaming Witch"  because I discovered it under read a newbie.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Leah screaming. The conversation and interaction between Leah and Bridget moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, you cone with me. I suggest changing cone to come.

My favorite part: I like both Leah and Bridget because they are intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Louis Williams , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "You Bet Your Life!"  because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the cards dancing in the dealer's fingers. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Jason because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction between Jason and the dealer.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Green Trees Don't Make It "  because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (May 3, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes its form, speaker, theme, and mood. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of trepidation forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, And what do they think of us? I like this line because it caused me to wonder about the trees from a different point of view.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because the questions gave me something to think about.

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Review of Even Prompter  
for entry "Fast Flowers" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Fast Flowers"  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of joy forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The first stanza is my favorite because it drew me into the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the descriptions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, SandraLynn Team Florent! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Dizzy and Dazed Driving in Circles"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker having difficulty finder her client. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the directions that were given to the personal care worker because it reminded me of some of the direction given to me.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the person got lost.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Graywriter , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "To Go Forth Into the Light"  because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (April 26, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the lengths Guillaume d'Auteur would go to to get the manuscript. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like d'Auteur's determination to achieve his goal, no matter what the cost.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of d'Auteur's determination.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, jonblair , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "MATT DUGGAN - DETECTIVE SERIES"  because I discovered it on the crime/gangster genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Matt's statement. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problem.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it arouses the reader's curiosity about Part II of this story.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of BLESS-ED  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Mandy Writes , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "BLESS-ED"  because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Thoughts: The rhythm of this free verse poem encourages the reader to read it aloud.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, simply blessed. I like this line because it states the theme of the poem.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its emphasis on the divine feminine.

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Review of What We Fight For  
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Jeremy , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "What We Fight For"  because I discovered it on the Hub under recently Plugged Items.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Oleksander's back against a barrier of rubble. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Oleksander because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: This is a well-written story that shows what war does.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Dan I Am , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Tripping to Who Knows Where"  because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker wondering about the reality of his situation. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, because of the speaker's decision not to tell anyone.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Review of The Farmer's Pig  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Writer_Mike , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Farmer's Pig"  because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the Moo Shoo's unusual behavior. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last sentence is my favorite because it climaxed the story's plot and made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Moo Shoo.

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for entry "Week 42 - Tranquility" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023"  "Week 42 - Tranquility"  because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The title of this poem attracted me. The rhythm flows easily form line to line, reflecting the theme and emotions of the poem.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea of moonbeams dancing like fairies playing.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed the emotion of tranquility.

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Review of Crazy Driving  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Crazy Driving"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (April 26, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: Allen's question in the third paragraph hooked me. The conversation among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of Alice and Georgie.

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Review of The View  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sum1 Is Home! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The View"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the hair-brained idea. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was the logical conclusion once Rick rejected the fireflies offer of salvation.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the fireflies.

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Review of Fred  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Paul , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Fred"  because I discovered it on the hub under random reads.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the lost connection. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Fred because he is an intriguing and interesting character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Fred.

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Review of Microburst  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, W.P. Gerace , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Microburst "  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Sammy's problems. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of the microburst because it was authentic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sammy.

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Review of The Joke  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Serena Blade , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "The Joke"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Thoughts: The fourth paragraph hooked me with the reason Kelly was moving around in the passenger seat. The conversation between Kelly and Jake move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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