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, I'm reviewing "The Bogosity Factor"

because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's anxiety rising. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the word bogosity because I had to look up its meaning.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because I learned something.

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Review of Passing Me By

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again!

, I'm reviewing "Passing Me By"

because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm moves the descriptions and the emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is frustration.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a decision.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the description of the traffic. It reminded me of driving in Las Vegas.

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#4685040

Review of Just a World Away

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Jatog the Green

, I'm reviewing "Just a World Away"

because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (February 1, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxed the plot of the poem and made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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#4685030

Review of CLEANSING

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Penelope Moonbeam

, I'm reviewing "CLEANSING"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are frustration and hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last line is my favorite because it closes the poem with a positive statement.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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#4684945

Review of Time for a Change

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I'm reviewing "Time for a Change"

because I discovered it on the Please Review page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the screaming. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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#4684903

Review of Final Countdown

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

, I'm reviewing "Final Countdown"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The third paragraph hooked me with Constable Kilkar making a pun. The interaction and conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the term donut batter that Eva Marie used for the handcuffs.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this nonsense story because it made me smile.

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#4684900

Review of Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023

for entry "Week 30 -Weathering the Storm"

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again!

, I'm reviewing "Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023"

"Week 30 -Weathering the Storm"

because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way this poem expresses the emotions of strength and faith in the description of the oak tree.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the lesson in the last stanza.

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#4684800

Review of Cogito, ergo sum

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Mez

, I'm reviewing "Cogito, ergo sum"

because I discovered it on the philosophy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker preparing for a journey. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the readers something to think about concerning their existence.

Suggestions: I found no technical problem.

My favorite part: I like the descriptions in this essay because they give me something to think about.

Final Thought: I am giving this will-written item a 5.0 because it is thought-provoking.

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#4684794

Review of FORGIVENESS

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Penelope Moonbeam

, I'm reviewing "FORGIVENESS"

because I discovered it on the friendship genre page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last line is my favorite because it gives the results of forgiving others.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it shows the importance of forgiveness.

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#4684774

Review of The Doldrums

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

, I'm reviewing "The Doldrums"

because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Captain Ron's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4684772

Review of The Taste of Freedom - Happy to win!

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

, I'm reviewing "The Taste of Freedom - Happy to win!"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the judge's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, it oucld only. I suggest changing oucld to could.

My favorite part: I like the climax because Angela's mother had to eat the ice cream she contaminated.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Angela, who is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

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#4684595

Review of Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023

for entry "Week 29"

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, AmyJo- back to basics again!

, I'm reviewing "Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022/2023"

"Week 29"

because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"

forum page.

First Thoughts: This prayer-poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with the most emotion.

Final Thought: I am giving this poem a 5.0 because of the way it shows prayerful emotions.

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#4684537

Review of Illusion of Solitude

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hi, Zei

, I'm reviewing "Illusion of Solitude"

because I discovered it on the Read a Newbie page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the world. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward while building the suspense.

Suggestions: There are several paragraphs that repeat previous paragraphs. I suggest rewriting or deleting the repetitions. so that the reader is not bored by them.

My favorite part: I like Sarah because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: This is a story with a great deal of potential because the main character is sympathetic. The description show the hopelessness of the population and the way Sarah feels.

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#4684410

Review of Dumbledore's Discovery - Proud to win!

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

, I'm reviewing "Dumbledore's Discovery - Proud to win!"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Harry yelling the password. The conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea of a shoe polish that changes colors when put on the shoes.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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#4684304

Review of Looking Into God's Assurance

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, ♫~ Kenword~♫

, I'm reviewing "Looking Into God's Assurance"

because I discovered it under By Online Authors.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the quote from Romans 8. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while keeping the reader's attention focused on the tests that eventually increased his faith.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way this essay focuses on how Romans 8 helped build faith.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it showed how faith can be found through tests.

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#4684296

Review of A Stifled Song

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Brendan O’Neal

, I'm reviewing "A Stifled Song"

because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with music being forbidden. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this the beginning of a longer short story or novel about how the music effected Atia.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it suggested there was more to the story.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Atia.

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#4684295

Review of Mirror

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Wickedfugitive

, I'm reviewing "Mirror"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's opinion of being the daughter of a sea god. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise. I did not expect Poseidon to be the one with the mirror.

Final Thought: The first person point of view and voice were good choices, because the revealed the main character's personality.

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#4684205

Review of Hamelin Towne

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi, Words Whirling 'Round

, I'm reviewing "Hamelin Towne"

because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: Th first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way both internal and end rhyme is used in this poem, because they build the suspense.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the excellent use of rhyme.

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#4684186

Review of Shopping

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

, I'm reviewing "Shopping "

because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first question hooked me and drew me into the story. The conversation between Pam and Marcus moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because Pam's statement about Marcus being a worry wart made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between the couple.

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#4684184

Review of Lives

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Wickedfugitive

, I'm reviewing "Lives"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's statement that members of her family changed rather then dying. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. The shift in perspective at the end is a surprises, but not jarring.

My favorite part: I like the first person point of view and voice because it shows the speaker's emotions.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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#4684119

Review of With Interest

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Wickedfugitive

, I'm reviewing "With Interest"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker not remembering their father. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a logical end to the story.

Final Thought: The first person point of view and voice was a good choice because they reveal the speaker's personality.

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#4684051

Review of The Northern Lights

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, super sleuth

, I'm reviewing "The Northern Lights"

because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problem.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the spiritual emotions.

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#4684041

Review of Wind, water and the giving heart

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, dlspiritwriter 🙏☯️😻

, I'm reviewing "Wind, water and the giving heart"

because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the rhyme on doubt and without because it emphasizes the emotion of hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed hope.

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#4684040

Review of Last Straw

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

, I'm reviewing "Last Straw"

because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Michel and Pabhu stuffing straw into the camel's saddle. The interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4684039

Review of A Little Luck

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi, Graywriter

, I'm reviewing "A Little Luck"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Dan's telekinetic ability. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the similes used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this simile, his head swiveled like a radar dish scanning for incoming bogies.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the similes.

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