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Review of Aging  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beth350 Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Aging" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the read & review a newbie page.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions in this poem are joy and discovery.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, New places to visit, new songs. I like this line because it shows that finding new joys and songs when one ages keeps a person young in mind and heart.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its view of aging.

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Review of Out of time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sumojo Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Out of time" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the salesman's question. The interaction and conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the explanation about the wrong date on the check.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Song of the Vamp  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Song of the Vamp" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Penelope's statement. The interaction and conversation between Count Yorgi and Penelope moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story because of the characters.

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Review of Invisible light  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Kåre เลียม Enga Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Invisible light" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the sci-fi genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the reflection in the corner of one's eye. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing their ability to survive.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the speaker, the alien, because they are sympathetic and intriguing.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this monologue because of the speaker.

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Review of Crystal Lake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, russelljadams Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Crystal Lake" Open in new Window. because I discovered it under the Friendship Friday post on the community newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with the the prey that the man was hunting. The descriptions and background are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the flashbacks are written into the action of the story, because it is not distracting.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because the action kept me focused on the movement of the plot and Tony Zift.

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Review of My Brother Joe  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dave Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "My Brother Joe" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are pride and mourning.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The first stanza is my favorite, because it drew me into the poem.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it expresses the emotions of pride and mourning.

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Review of Coffee Crossed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, No Sox with Sandals Author Icon, I am Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I am reviewing "Coffee Crossed" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Newbie Summer Beach Party SP Raid" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the chance meeting. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters build the suspense.

What I Like: I like the climax, because it was the logical ending of the story.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way coffee brought the couple together.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi, PennyInPocket Author Icon, I am Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, reviewing "Not Your Average Cup of Coffee" Open in new Window. because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker looking for an exotic cup of coffee. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like this simile, like Mount Saint Helens moments before she blew her top. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.

I also like the climax, because it was unexpected.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because o f the unexpected climax.

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Review of Island Storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, MidnightStalker Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Island Storm" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the Steampunk genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Annabelle running down the staircase. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Martha because she is an intriguing and a sympathetic character, who is a strong woman.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.

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Review of Norman Votes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Madelyn Stone Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Norman Votes" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Norman being nervous about voting for the first time.

Suggestions: I found no technical problem.

My favorite part: I like this metaphor, brain was a ball of mush between his ears, because it is fresh and descriptive.

I also like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Norman.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Obdinagong's Quest" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the fantasy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with some of the instructions being weird. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while making the descriptions part of the action.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this knight in another story.

My favorite part: I like the knight because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Review of No Doubts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, G. B. Williams Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "No Doubts" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Thoughts: This is an inspiring and thought provoking message everyone should read and meditate on.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The fifth sentence is my favorite because we sometimes we all need to be reminded to put our cares in God's hands.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this thought-provoking message because of the way it expressed the hope and faith.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Lynn Author Icon }, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Zombie Apocalypse Chili" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the food/cooking genre page.

First Thoughts: Cleaning out a metal trashcan and using it to cook in hooked me. The narrative moves the plot and laughter forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the last paragraph about guzzling Pepto for dessert.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, lbidler Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Re-Igniting the Flame" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Thoughts: The scripture from Psalm 119 hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while keeping the reader's attention.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is the include the translation of the Bible this verse is taken from.

My favorite part: I like the prayer at the end because I could feel the Holy Spirit flowing through it.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this essay because it reminded me how important it is to read God's word daily.

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Review of Tommy's Request  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Bobby Lou Stevenson Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Tommy's Request" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the holiday genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's best friend asking to be killed. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it fitted the story.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this Thanksgiving story because of the characters.

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Review of A time to burgle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JoABuilder Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "A time to burgle" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Mike crawling across the floor. The action is part of the descriptions and moves the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of The War of Power  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, brom21 Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The War of Power" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the priest weeping. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, a surge of power like lightning was coursing through his veins because it is fresh and descriptive.

I also like the battle because the action kept me focused on the characters and the plot.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this exciting story because of the action.

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Hi, brom21 Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Beast and The Word" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with John's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, swords and spears were like toothpicks to the supernatural beast, because it is fresh, descriptive, and visual.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this inspiring story because of the way John used the Holy Word.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JoABuilder Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Faulty Transmitter" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (November 2, 2022)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the sound. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Chris because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I like the climax because it left me wondering about the contraption.

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Review of Home Renovation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JoABuilder Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Home Renovation" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (November 2, 2022)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Deanna's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the logical way Detective Miller and the police officers went through the crime scene.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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for entry "Hallowe'en" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Le Voyage Magnifique" Open in new Window. "Hallowe'en" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (November 2, 2022)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed a Happy Halloween.

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Review of Maggie  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, ridinghhood-p.boutilier Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Maggie" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the location of the speaker's job. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, giving enough information about her co-worker to show the woman was a caring person.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part about the pearl bracelet.

Final Thought: This story reveals Maggie as an intriguing and caring individual.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, DestinyAwaitsDarling Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Irrefutable Whispers" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are shame and forgiveness.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way each stanza ends with the voice of God.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed forgiveness.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, G. B. Williams Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Ramblings of A Thankful Person" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph of this editorial hooked me with gratitude medical science. The author give items in this editorial that people do not always consider blessing.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, I pray that one day we will value the word of God more than we do the words of man. I like this sentence because it gives the reader something to think about.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written editorial a 5.0, because it gave me something to think about concerning blessings.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, matelot Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Manners Maketh Man" Open in new Window. because I discovered it under Read a Newbie.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with pomposity beating pride to the gate. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Paddy Higgins because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic seaman who knows his duty. I also like the climax because it made me laugh.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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