Hello Poetess4Life and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. Please feel free to e-mail me if you should need any assistance.
I just read your poem, "Seasons Of Change and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: I thought this a lovely poem of the seasons. Of course it can mean life too, we all go through these seasons of change. I liked the way you have rhymed the poem. Traditional rhyming is my preference.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions for improvement, I think it fine as it is.
Hello Jul, welcome to WDC. I have just read your short story, "The Job," and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall impression: I think you did well here for 100 words, horror indeed. I think I would have passed out too after finding that corpse!
Suggestions: Children Asylum, would read better as Children's Asylum, also in line, "Craig found amusing," reads as though there is a word missing, I would have said , "Craig found it amusing." Just my opinion though.
Punctuation/Spelling/grammer: I did not see any error.
Hello Simona, I just came across your poem, "Word," and thought I would leave comment.
It can be very hard to love someone that does not show the same. It leaves us feeling insecure. There is coldness in their words rather than sincerity. Your poem describes this feeling very well.
The only thing I would say is in the lines, "Love you too, I feel is a word," is actualy three words. Perhaps if you took out "you too," it would read better. But that is just my opinion.
Hello Simona,welcome to WDC. I have just read your poem, "The Birth Of Hate," and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: Memories of childhood, some things can have a profound affect on us. Your description of the butchers must have been very frightening indeed.
Suggestions: In line, " On their heads I stop. I stare," Reads as if you stopped on their heads. A comma or fullstop should be between heads and I stop.
Hello my pride, thank you for your entry in the "Invalid Item" Please remember not to edit till after the winner is announced.
Overall Impression: I thought this lovely little poem describing welcoming your little treasure into the world, your world. My favourite lines: "Looking at the little angel, cuddled cozily in my arms."
Hello sai, I am not sure if I have reviewed you before, but if not welcome to WDC.
I have just read your poem, "Hypnotized," and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: I am guessing it is about falling in love with someone, or you are hypnotized by someone's presence.
Suggestions: I think the use of text slang really spoils writing, For example your line, "Maybe cz I did drugs." You have a few lines that have used text slang.
Punctuation/Grammer/Spelling: The same thing really, the text slang.
Hello Jess, thank you for your entry in the "Invalid Item" .
Overall Impression: I thought this a great poem. I love the way you have used the word baby for many things, and of course you are right, your baby can be anything. Mine is a favourite pen.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions, I like it just as it is.
Hello Angel, I have just read your very special letter.
First I must send my heartfelt condolences, I cannot imagine how you must have felt and still do.
War serves no purpose at all, all it does is deprive wives of their husbands, husbands of their wives, mothers of their sons and chldren of their fathers.
Hello Keaton, I do not believe I have ever reviewed you before, yet I have read many of your poems.
This poem has brought me to at last be brave enough to review you.
Somehow those words, "Out there, Where, nowhere clear, just a home of infinite waste," struck a chord . That place is a waste, it is true, it serves no purpose, that time has gone and will never come back, then why do we dwell on it?
I have no suggestions, how could I? Your writing is amazing.
Hello DL, I have just read your ,"Diary Of An Anorexic Poet," and thought I would leave some comments.
It is good that you are writing this down, I think it helps a lot to write when we are suffering some kind of illness, whether it is physical or mental.
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I have just read your biography and thought I would leave comment.
You sound very busy, with your twin girls and a son, but they must be a great inspiration for your writing, especially children's books.
Hello Lynda with a Y, this is one of the cutest stories I have read for a while. Dusty and Tidbit sounded like they were great little dogs and funny too. And then Mr prim and proper dog stealing the food!
A funny read, the only thing I would suggest is to put a comma between "Ate" and "Men," in line, " after we ate the men went into the great room," because at first glance it looks like you ate the men.
Hello Charlie, I am not sure if I have reviewed you before, but if not, welcome to WDC.
I have jut read your poem, "Night Dancing," and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: Mental Illness is a dreadful thing, and very hard to admit or seek help.Like your poem says people do often roll their eyes and shrug it off.
Suggestions/punctuation/grammer. I have no suggestion and see no errors.
I thought it a very well written poem about mental illness.
Hello smile I just came across your short story and thought I would leave a few comments.
Overall Impression: Clearly a teenage thing, I do not think many can be taken seriously at a young age and the note passing was just a game to him. A lesson to be learned.
Suggestions/grammer/spelling: There are a lot of spelling and punctuation mistakes, too many to go in to, but one example "crawl in a hole and dye," "dye," should be, "die."
Hello Zander, I have just read your short story, "A cold Summer's day," and thought I would leave some comment.
Overall Impression: To be honest I am not sure as nothing seemed to happen except it snowed in August. I wonder if you are still in the process of writing it?
Suggestions; In the line, "One small snowflake fell to ground and melted before anyone saw it. And another untill the entirety of the farm was covered in snow and ice." If the snowflakes melted the farm would not be covered in snow.
You may want to revise. It would be interesting to see how the story progresses.
Hello again o, another piece of your work that I came across.
A very inspirational poem, of course happiness can only come from within. We spend so much time looking for it and yet do not realise only we can make ourselves happy.
A good poem, one typo, "I don't not find you anywhere I'd look." should be "I did not find you anywhere I looked."
Hello iamthenez, how are you? I have just read your story, "The Road Home," Which I found on the reviewing page and I thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: Oh my gosh, this is awful, I mean it is not awful, it is very good, but awful if it were true. I cannot imagine what would make someone do that.
You have written the piece really well and I could not stop reading it once I had started.
I am not too sure about the rating, I would have thought it 18+ but that is just my opinion.
Very good story, even though it has left me traumatized lol
Hello Charlie, I have jut read your story, "One Syllable Story, " for a contest prompt.
I wonder how easy or difficult you found writing this, I am not sure I would attempt it. A good little story. However you do have words in it with two syllables. "Into," "little," and I think they may class "TV" as two.
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I have just read your essay, " Thank You For Breaking My Heart," and thought I would leave some comments.
Overall Impression: I do not think we ever forget our first love, and in your case you have more reason than most as he inspired you to write. That has to be a good thing.
Suggestions: I am not about this line, "He would fetch me there," I think probably it should read, "He would take me there." Also ," the entire experience helped me realized," "realized," should read, "realize."
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Overall Impression: I thought this a lovely poem of the seasons. Of course it can mean life too, we all go through these seasons of change. I liked the way you have rhymed the poem. Traditional rhyming is my preference.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions for improvement, I think it fine as it is.
Puctuation/Grammer/Spelling; I see no errors.
Favourite part: The ending, I thought it amusing.