I agree everybody has the right to be cheerful and happy. Unfortunately, for millions of people in the United States they are not able to be cheerful andhappy. I myself sufer from mental illness. There is nothing fun about it. Depression and anxiety bipolar sketsophernia and obscessiv compulsive disorder these are diseases just as much as heart disease, cancer, kidney disease. I wish more people understood the seriousness of these illnesses. Your poem was excellent. It was a superb read. I hope someone more than just one reviews your poem and spread the knowledge. Keep writing, please. All the best, Beeline!
I maybe wrong but i don't see anything wrong with lust. But it is a fantasy most of the time. Unless it becomes an obscession to some as it may very well does. The poem was very interesting. An excellent read. it was good and as said before there is nothing wrong with lust. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
I found your poem to be very interesting. Though, I do not understand it, I finally got it after I read it two times. I loved your use of words. It was a very interesting read after I got it. It was my stupidity on my part.. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
This is a amuzing little poem. It took me a couple of times of reading it to find the joke. As I said, it was very amuzing. The idea of putting formaldehyde in your ear made me laugh. I suppose the fly is the star of the show. it was a great read. Do you just write comedy? I would be interested in reading some more of your material. I can only find tear in my beer material. Email me back and let me know. Happy New year. All the best, Beeline!
This is a sad almost hostile poem. This woman has really hurt you. And of course, there is nothing you can do about it. No tears to shed. No blood to shed. this is a really good poem. An excellent story. If only you could have her back. All the best. Keep writing. Beeline!
Though based on the Greek minotaur, I cannot save my life remember the civilization on that island in the Met. My history faills me. please email me back and let me know. This is an excellent read. Though it took you so long to write it was well worth it. You should be proud. I hope to read more of your material. I'm looking forward to that. All the best, Beeline!
The receipent of these words is a very lucky person. Itis a great read. :Emotions for pleasure,
Emotions for pain,
Emotions to lose,
Emotions to gain."
I particularly liked these metaphors. Exceellent rhymes. Though only a few. They were well placed. Again, this is an excellent poem. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
This is quite a charming little poem. I was hooked by the first line. This person you are writing about you obviously love alot. You use of words was excellent. This person he/she is very lucky to have someone like you. To love them so very much. I see safety in your arms. I am sure he/she is very happy. You've written a great poem. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your poem. It seemed to have a bright outlook on life. Eventhough,the bad times you know the good times shall returrn. This is a well written poem. I see no problems with it. There were a few spellingi mistakes found in the piece. Like the word victimize for one example. Other than that it was a good read. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
I loved this poem. It was well written. It was an excellent read. The compelte story in so few words I am happy that I read the ending. I always love happy endings. You really are a good writer. How long did it take you to write this? I guess he lost out. His loss. You sound like a very beautiful person. You deserve much better. Happy New year. All the best, Beeline!
This is simply a fine read. From the opening lines to the ending it was great. They say misery loves company. Love and lost is a hard pill to swallow. Issues of abandonment its another thing altogether. As the song says love stinks. There was no mistake found in the whole piece. I was interested in what you had to say. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
This was an excellent read You should be proud. I was confuesed about by the ending. I didn't quite understand it even when it was right in front of me. Your rhymes were a nice touch. This was an excellent read. The whole organization of the poem was right on. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
Your poem is a nice read. There is no denying that. I especially like Between happiness and sadness
Between laughter and tears
Between life and death
Those three phrases really caught my eye. I believe you have talentt. You want an honest review? I tried to be honest. I do like your poem. Keep on writing. All the best, Beeline!
Freedom. I am not sure it exists in a pure form. yes, I believe freedom is the ability to do anything you want. Your poem speaks to everybody on the planet. Many people in the world are denied their God given right to freedom. I loved your poem. It was an excellent read. I guess the meaning of freedom will be debated till the end of time. All the best, Beeline!
I can so identify with your poem. you got people going at you from all directions. Everybody needs someone to baby sit their children. Everybody needs to borrow money. it is enough to make you want to go mad. I too would like to go to a place far away. I need some fun. Some private space. I want to get away. All the best, Beeline!
You have a lovely piece. It is about the stars up on high. There is so much about stars of all sorts. However, you have come up with a piece that is very very good. You drew some pretty pictures with your words. it was an enjoyable read. Happy New Year. All the best to you, Beeline!
This is a tragic tale. How can any man be worth enduring so much pain? You deserve better. The poem reads very well. Too well. I can feel the pain along with you. Every thought in between is about you? This was a horrible thing. You shouldnt have to wake up to tears every morning. Pick yourself up and find a man who deserves you. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline! P.S. I wasn't sure if this was fiction or non fiction. But I assume it was non-fiction. I apologize if I am wrong.
The end of the sample was a disappointment. I was expecting more. It was a great read. I just wish there were more to read. What I did see was very good. Now I can't wait for the rest. Alice is gifted.. I can't wait to see what happens. Please send me the first draft. Of course you're not going to do that. I will be waiting anyway. Happy New Year. all the best, Beeline!
I enjoyed your use of words. It was a bit hard to understand at points. I know the basic plot. And its good. I noticed there was no rhyme scheme. AS a song writer myself I find it helps at times. Of course, every song I have written hasn't rhymed. It was an excellent read. I found no technicai problems. You did use a lot of metaphors. Again, there is nothing wrong with that. I think you should be proud of it. Happy New Year. Beeline!
Eventhough, I don't agree with your point of view that doesnt' mean we have to agree on every detail. Theree are many religions in the world. No one is better than the other. I do believe in God. And you obviously worship Him. I believe God loves everybody. No matter what race, creed, color, or nationality. My God is benevolent. So, I do see and understand your point. God isa loving God. And He forgives you for everything. I do not believe in religion. I find it to be a form of government. They collect money from you. The churches have their leaders. I do believe that Jesus preached in the open. He had no huge cathedreal. So why should we have these massive churches? But it sounds like I am preaching now. And I hate that. I enjoyed your poem. Forgive my rant. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
This poll is a very interesting one. There is enough darkness in the world today. The light reading makes one happy and joyful to a certain point. There is always someone who will disagree with me on this issue but I stand by my feelings. I hopeyou have a Happy New Year. All the best to you.
This is a very depressing poem. I know you were having a bad day. But, my God, you sound suicidal. Nonetheless, it was a very good read. The words flowed. It was an enjoyable read, as i have already said. You were really having a bad day. All in all it is an excellent writing. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
This was a very sweet poem. It could be a screenplay for a movie. You wrote so much in such a short span. You told a beautiful story. That could possibly end in tragedy. I've been in your position before. There is no easy way out. The picture is a lovely one. You are hoping for the best but you know it would end badly. For you dont' like saying Goodbye. I completely understand where you are coming from. Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline!
The violent but interesting song. I myself am a song writer. And I can't find my way to finish this song. Its got me a littlle confused. it is a good song. Don't get me wrong. You didn't show us where the chorus was. So, I can't identify with this anything but a poem. It is a very good read. I enjoyed it. Happy Holidays. All the best, Beeline! Further, I wouldn't know which group or singer would find a place to sing this. How about Evanescence?
Your poem was spectacular. AS a musician, I totally identify. I have to hear music every day. I agree with everything you say in your poem. I could have written it myself. But you beat me to the punch. There is nothing like music. It inspires you. It fills your imagination. As for me, it makes everything right when all is gone all wrong. Please continue to write. By the way, do you write songs with music? Happy New Year. All the best, Beeline! P>S. If you write music to your songs, then please take a look at my port and see the songs I have there.
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