So you love yourself, do you? The funniest line.This was a very well written poem. I enjoyed every minute of it. And found it amusing at the end. is this a true story? Or something you came up with? I enjoyed the way the poem flowed. it just struck a chord in me. Were you really being selflish? or just protecting yourself? i'm looking for more material by you! All the best, Beeline!
I just read your short poem The Difference. I thought it was written very well. It was short and to the point. I'm assuming this is non-fiction. She must have really done something rotten. I can feel the emotion in your words. You do paint a rather stark picture. It is a very good poem. You should defniitely keep writing. All the best, Beeline!
Sounds like you are a single parent. It is hard to have the children every other week. However, this review is about your piece not about anything else. it was a good read. It was with pictures one could see. How special it is for you to write something like this. You did a good job. Your structure was good. Keep writing. You're good at it. All the best.
AS I read your short story, I discovered there was nothing about a lack of serotonan or depression. I was disappointed. I suffer from mental illness myself. I was hoping to read something aboutr depression. Which is what i suffer from. The short story was very well written. It was a perfect length for me. And you painted a nice picture. But not of mental illness. Please email me and explain. All the best, Beeline!
this was picturesque. It was beautiful. i could see the snow flakes falling. I could imagine the blue and pink sky. It was a very good read. Your use of words were superb. The structure was good, also. I liked the part where you included the Maker in this piece. That is so true. He is the One who does all things well. Keep on writing. All the best.
I read your poem indeed. However, I could not quite understand certain parts. Is this my stupiditty? Perhaps, I didn't read it close enough. It was very well written. And a good read. I have this problem alot lately. I think perhaps I am coming down with dementia or at least an absent mind. It has been going this way for a while. I love the structure and the fact that you didn't kill us with rhyme. Please email me to explain what I have missed, meaning all of it. Thank you. All the best, Beeline!
I couldn't make much of your poem. That isnt' to say it isn't good. It was just my mind having a brainfart. I couldn't really catch on. i really wish I could understand this for it was very well written. I enjoyed reading it. Again, I just didn't understand it. But you said to intrepret this for yourself. So,, maybe I will do that. Or you could email me and explain it to me. In your opinion. I like that one better. Please keep writing. Maybe I will catch one I can understand. All the best, Beeline!
Sounds like paradise. Too bad you cant continue to stay. Sounds like a wonderful wonderful place. I'd love to be on a tropical island. I'm sure I'm misinterpreting all of this. Perhsps,, I 'm getting it right. Your poem is nicely detailed. Very well written. A nice read. Well, it is about it. All the best, Beeline!
I read your song Moments Turn to Memories that has to be the best hook for a song I have heard in a long time. I am a musician myself and I write songs. This one was very good. it flows very well. Your story telling is excellent but I can't get over the hook of the song. Moments turn to memories. I wish I would have come up with that. You wrote this one very well. I'd like to see some more of your songs. Would you mind if I visited your port? All the best, Beeline!
Your poem was spectacular. Tragic and depressing. None of which is a bad thing. I'm not trying to criticize you the ending blew me away. No pun intended. Witth every word I read, I looked forward to a happy ending. But life doesnt' always have a happy ending. Evan got all his wishes including the final one. I loved the poem. I hated the ending. It was very well written. It flowed well. You painted a perfect picture of this boy's life. Please continue writing. But please do something happy. All the best, Beeline!
This is a tragic poem. So many relationships head down the same path. I know I have certainly been there. AS he bolted out the door you should have shot him in the butt. Don't worry you deserve better. And you will find it. Just takes time. You wrote your poem very well. Your structure was very good. And the rhyming scheme was great. Look forward to the future. Some day your tears will dry up. All the best, Beeline!
I read your poem it was quite short. Nothing wrong with that. I think I got the gist of the whole thing. The ending line was written very well. Ini fact, for such a short piece it was all written well. When you hit your head, something good came out of it that was this poem. All the best, Beeline!
Your poem was an excellent read. I totally agree with virtually everything you said. I say stand up to those who are wrong or are oppressive. But when your friends do not practice what they preach not only does it anger you but it hurts. Your poem was well written and laid out. And straight to the point. All the best, Beeline!
What a tale! You had me right up to the point of you becoming a vampire. There are greater things to become moreso than a vampire. i feel for you though. I would want blood too if I were a vampire. You did a very good write. it was an intereting read. Your structure was well done. Keep on writing. You're good at it. You made me believe that you were really a vampire. That is the sign of a great writer. You got it.
This is a very nice poem about cliches. I never knew you could write a poem about cliches. Half of my vocabulary are cliches. You just can't avoid them. it doesnt' mean your stupid it just means that you can't think of anything else to say. I do try to avoid them. But its a bad habit. Sometimes I actually enjoy saying them. Your poem is wellwritten. Structured well. And tells a nice story. Next time I speak a cliche I will think fo ot his poem. All the best, Keep writing from the Islalnd and obviously I did read this. Beeline!
This is a somewhat cynical poem. Which makes me like it evenmore. The end is BE AWAY FROM ATTACHMENT' excellent. I agree wholeheartedly. Attachment romantically usually ends in heartache. BE it from infidelity, mutual distrust,, so many things make up the demise of a relationship. Everything else you have said in your poem rings true. You wrote your poem very well. I enjoyed reading it. I love your rhyming scheme and the structure was excellent I hope it works out or has worked out. You're a good writer. Keep it up. All the best, Beeline!
I read your poem today. I was very saddened. I'm not sure who you lost. But I suppose it really doesn't matter. Anyone from a child, brother, or sister, mother, or father it doesn't matter it 's all a great loss. To lose anyone, any friend, is a tragedy. You have written a good poem. I could feel the emotion. It was an excellent read. I hope you are getting over your loss. All the very best, Beeline!!
i read your poem. It was very sweet and tender. I don't come across many poems like this on WDC. You can tell you care fo your lover very much. I have been in he same situation butr love and lost. I hope you two care for one another for a very long time. Your poem was a lovely read. it was very well written. Your lover sounds like a very special man. I am sure you are as well. I'd like to read more of your work. Please let me know when you are posting something new. All the very best, Beeline.PS: Long life to you both.
Your poem was very eloquent and very well written love story. I wish I could go through something like this myself. Or at least have a significant other who could write so beautiful and colorful. You wish upon a star. There was the old English in this poem. I liked that very much. I think you did an excellent job with this and should be proud of your accomplishment. All the best, Beeline!
I truly did enjoy your short story. A small boy waking up on the other side of how he went to sleep and was too frighten to get out of bed or do anything. This is adorable. I remember as a small boy myself waking up in the middle of the night while everyone else was asleep and wishing I could go back to sleep. But sleep eluded me. It was a very good read. And very well written. my only wish was that it was longer. Keep writing. You're very good at it. All the best, Beeline!
Dear Sir,
This is a heart wrenching poem. Very very sad. I can sympathize with what you've gone through. I believe everyone has gone through it at one time or another. it was a very depressing poem. But very well writen poem. I don't know if you have done any writing before but if you haven't you should try it. You would be good at it. Again, I can sympathize with you. To have someone you love in love with someone else destroys your heart. This was a very good read. I loved it very much. All the best and keep writing. Beeline!
I read your poem in great detail. You made some excellent points. I only disagree two times and that is too minor to even mention. It was an excellent read. I anticipated the ending. You did a great summation. I agree life is not worth living without love, to quote you. A very good poem all in all. Keep writing. You're good at it. All the best, Beeline!
You wrote a lovely poem. I can see myself walking through a nice wooded area. Enjoying the outdoors . The leaves falling.Squirrels playing Just enjoying myself. You made me feel as if I were right there. Completely relaxed. This was an excellent read. simple. Yet enjoyable. Wish I could have written it myself. All the best, Beeline!
I didn't quite understand your short poem. I didn't get past the title. Something about a mood swing. I was thinking of mental health. But I don't understand your poem. It would not be fair for me to review it. I wish you would email me and explain your poem to me. Thank you, Beeline!
Dear Wolfmoon,
What a beautiful dedication to your daughter. Very short but you said so much in that short period of time. It was very well written. You are a good writer. I haven't seen anything else but this by you. I llike your rhyming scheme. It was a very good one. It was a very good read. You should continue writing. All the best, Beeline!
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