Dear Crused Prince,
I loved your piece. It had a slow depressing beginning that built to an excellent ending. I think you're a great writer. It was certainly well written. I enjoyed reading this piece. It evoked emotion in me. I have been in the same position you were in. So, I sympathize. Hope things get great for you. Keep on writing. All the best, Beeline!
This is very original. Very cute. the details were very good. You painted a very good picture. It was the picture of a bird and a boy. The descriptions of the bird was excellent. I would love to come home to find a bird in my window. Keep writing. All the best, Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your short story. So, my review will be short. Just joking. I didn't quite understand it. I was hoping you could lemail me to explain it to me. Its hard to review something you dont' understand. It was structured well. You painted a good picture. I will be hoping to hear from you. All the best, Beeline!
This was absolutely rhetorical, yet,it was very entertaining. it shed some light on the Christian church. Though I don't know if you didn't go too far. After all, it is just fiction. I hate to judge. But this was not what I expected. When I picked this to read and review, it sounds like a bit of a joke. I had to laugh. Just please don't go any further. Keep it up. Beeline!
I think its great. You guys have found each other. But dont' you think you are putting her on a pedestal? I'm not trying to crash your party but love isn't always beautiful in the stars. Sometimes you have to come down to earth. Its the day to day fight nothing serious but you have your separate day to day lives here. I'm sorry I'm putting a damper on things. Again, I don't mean to crash y our party. I' m being negative and don't mean to be. it truly is a wonderful thing when two people find each other. I apologize for all the negative comments. I really wish you the very best. You're lucky. Wish I was. All the best, Beeline!
Dear Michael G. Smith,
There are others out there who share your feelings and your pain. Reflections of ugliness you have made yourself I don't believe that for a minute. Depression is not taught. it simply exists. It affects millions acrross the country. Including myself. I sought help and the use of therapy and medicatiion I am not leading a full life yet but a better one. Please believe there will come a day when you will feel better about yourself and your life. Try volunteering with the mentally ill. Or just volunteer at a local church. It is a good start. Wish you all the best, Beeline!
I liked them. Very mature for someone in middle school. The next to the last one is my favorite. I wonder where you got the inspiration for this. Usually a girl in middle school is only thinking of boys, popularity, and maybe the cheerleading squad. Not write deep lyrics to poems. But each one had a great structure I love the fact that they didn't all rhyme. Keep writing. You're pretty good at it. All the best, Beeline!
A cat Huh. Would you think that would keep you from being discovered? I love cats. I believe they are the way you described them. This is a cute comedy piece. It was an excellent read. VERY well written. I found it very humerous. At first I wasn't sure if it was comedy or sarcasum. Keep writing. All the best, Beeline!
Yes I believe in individuality. I think that everyone should strive not only to be ourselves but to be unique. It doesn't take much to make you stand out and not be a clone. Your piece says you become "nothing ,more than a copy just like them. I totally agree. Too many people try to be just like everybody else. This is a very good piece. Well written. Well structured. I enjoyed it. All the best, Beeline!
This was a wonderful poem. It was sad and tragic. it was a good read. It truly wasn't fair you could not touch this man, kiss him, and yet who could mourn him. I'm not sure if this is pro-gay piece or if this is just part of the story. If this is a pro-gay piece I appreciate your thoughtfulness. it was a wonderful read. Again, sad and tragic. All the best, Beeline. P.S. You have spoken for so many of us gay men thatt I want to congradulate you on a good piece. It affected us as to what you had to say. I think it stands true for every gay man who loves another that serves in the forces. Thank you.
I enjoyed your short story. I had just read a story of selfish story about how you can make your life better. Not about helping others around you. But helping yourself. Which you do in part have to help yourself. But I believe in what youare writing here. A smile,a kind word, a good deed, all these things will help make you happier. I once again I truly loved the story. It made total sense. Please keep writing. You're very good at it. All the best, Beeline!
I loved your poem. Especially the ending. One full payment in advance. Love that line. The entire structure of the poem though short was very good. It was a good read. it was kind of dark comedy. I loved your use of metaphors. Dark comedy is at least how I saw it. But I have been known to be wrong alot. All the best, Keep writing. Beeline!
Dear Elena,
I too live with guilt as we all do. it reminds us of our past , of our past mistakes, and our future ones. Guilt keeps us in line. Not only does guilt reminds of our past, it reminds us of the pain. Pain of everything done wrong in our lives. Your poem flowed very well. it was a good read. You really made me think. All the best, Beeline!
This is superb. It really a blessing to have the Outreach Program. The Angel Army is a great group, too. I have a friend who is a member of the Angel Army himself. So, he knows the greatest way to help another person. I would be considered a Veteran now since being with the group since the 11th of June of last year. I thank you for spelling things out to me and hope that many will read what I read and have a great time in WDC.
your poem was comedy at its best. It reminded me of a skit from Saturday Night Live. This was hilarious. I can imagine it really happening in real life. It was an excellent read. You have a flair for comedy. Maybe you should write more. Comedy is very hard to write. You really have me going with this. I can just picture in my head this piece. Well, keep it up. Keep writing your comedy. All the best, Beeline!
Dear Insane,
I read your poem. It was VERY coldhearted! The only thing I don't' understand is what the point is in killing this man? I suppose you intended it to be that way. It was very brutal. But also very well written. Even with the subject matter, I still enjoyed it. Though murder is not my thing. You made it very true to life. Insane, I believe you are. Ha ha. Keep on writing. You've got a certain talent. All the best, Beeline!
Your poem was a very good read. It asks alot of questions. I don't have any answers to. Or I wished I had the answers. It was very well written. Your structure was excellent. The final question who answers? Mine. Can it be this way? I'm probably wrong, correct? Or is there no right or wrong. Once again I enjoyed your poem. Keep writing. You have the talent. All the best, Beeline!
Dear fivesecondfury,
It seems that 18 is a magical number. You get to do so many things. You get to see this and thait and other things, too. I liked your poem. It was a good read. The sobering thought is what you said in the last couple of lines. "You're still you" stands out to be the number one thing that makes all the difference in the world. You did a good job. All the best.
This was the sweetest poem I have read in a long time. Kids are wonderful aren't they? They're curious to the point of driving you crazy. I loved the structure of your poem. It was so cute. Wish my son was a young boy again. I miss those days. Everything is a play toy. Everything he sees out the window is something to play with. Your poem was a nice read. I enjoyed it much. All the best, Beeline!
Your poem was short but a very good read. it took me several reads for me to understand it. I'm still not sure I have a grasp of it. Is this man leaving his wife and family? What's the picture falling off the wall? Sure you're not knocking it down. I wish you would email me and explain your poem to me. Though I enjoyed reading it I would like a better understanding of it. Thank you. All the best, Beeline!
Tell me again exactly what this poem is about. Is it suppose to be the way it is? I thought it was cute though confusing. it was a good read. Bravery. I love that word. Just had to say that. I'm trying to be too criticial Lord knows I have written some pretty crappy songs. I am not much on poems. I did enjoy your poem though. Pardon me if I was too harsh. Send back an email with a few curse words if you feel like it. All the best, Beeline!
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I read your short story. Which wasn't really that short. It was a good read. Just longer than what I am used to. Tells you something about me. It seemed to be repetitive at point. Though I agree with everything you say. You had a lot of good points. I think I will read them again. To let it sink into my skull. Maybe I better understand it. But again it was a good read. All the best, Beeline!
Your two pieces were just fine. You had me going though with the elves. The second one was most sensibie. It is a tragic thing to have died on the opearating table. It is something else for the doctor to bring you back to life again with the paddles. One could see the whole thing going on. You made it so believeable. You made a believer out of me. That is the sign of a good writer. keep writing. You're good at it.
I read your song with doubt. However, it turned out to be a pretty good song. I am a song writer, myself. and I have a preference for a rhyming scheme. Though not all songs I have written have rhymed/ That was the only thing I found out of agreement with the usual way songs are written. otherwise, you have a good song on your hands. Keep writing. you're pretty good at it. All the best, Beeline!.
I didn't quite understand your short story at first. As I read, it all came to me. it is really tragic. it is hard to believe that someone so good looking could be so unhappy. Then again,good looks don't buy you the world. It is a very sad story. I can imagine the ending other t han what was written. It was a very good read. I enjoyed it very much eventhough it was such a serious subject it kept me glued to the screen. Keep writing. You''re good at it. All the best, Beeline!
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