What a lovely poem! I wish I could find what you seem to have. It really was very lovely. I wish that I had a significant other, too. A voice to make me feel the way that you do. It was an excellent read. I saw no mistakes. There was a picture in this one. It was of romance and love as you described. Please continue writing.
All the best, Beeline!
I loved the rhyme scheme. The poem was very dark and as you said, very cynicial. But I suppose that was your intention. It was a very good read. I enjoyed it immensly. I would like to read some more of your material. I am sure that is good as this. Keep up the good work. All of my best, Beeline!
The world seemed so magicial. Innocent and calm. It sounds like the perfect place for me. This piece was a great read. The detail was superb. It made me want to be there in the moment. If only it could be Glacialus wouldn't it be wonderful? I enjoyed your structure of your piece as well. It seemed to flow easily. I enjoyed your world as much as you. All the best, Beeline!
It was an enjoyable read. There were many colors used in this to paint a picture. Sonnets are not my forte. But this was lovely. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece with the exception of the word realization. Noticed that it has a z not an s in the word. Aside from that it was a great read. All the best to you, Beeline!
This is a supurb poem/song. I loved the rhyme scheme. It flowed very well. I wish I could have done it. You are a great poet/songwriter. I wil continue to visit your port. It was a great read. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It is quite lovely. All the best, Beeline!
The poem was very dark. I agree temptation is part of human nature. But certainly not murder. Surely you are tempted to cheat on your husband/spouse. Surely you are tempted to pick up that diamond necklace and put it in your purse. Surely you are tempted to spend too much money on that new car. I agree with you except for the murder part Personally, I have never been tempted, to murder kill another person. However, your poem was a nice read. You got me thinking aboutt the darker side of human nature. All the best, and keep writing. Beeline!
I found this piece to be peaceful. Lovely. And a little thought provoking as yourself said. It was a good read. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within it. Alot of color. Again, I found it very peaceful. No anger. Only happiness. And that's all that anyone knows. My compliments. All the best, Beeline!
This was a beautiful poem with a little humor. I, myself, have not experienced it. But it sounds wonderful. And I find nothing to laugh at. I am glad that you have found happiness. In a book closet, and the love you two shared sounds wonderful. The structure was good. It was a very good read. Please keep writing. All the best, Beeline!
I believe you are correct it makes a better poem than a song. I, myself, am a song writer. I enjoyed reading your poem/song. I think it was worded well. Good structure not too much overkill. I think you are a good song writer/poet. Keep up the good work. All the best, Beeline!
I found your poem to be very interesting. Though, I didn't completely understand it, that seems to be my problem. I thought it was about the woes of a generation. And I suppose it was. It takes a little more simplicity for me to get it. But it was a very good read. I hope to come across some off your other material. all the best, Beeline!
What a miraculous thing is birth in the first place! In the second place, there is joy upon joy for the realization of giving birth to another human being. It is a great thing. I can't begin to know the pain you had in giving birth for I am a man. I do know that it is a matter of life and death to the woman. I think you did an excellent job with this piece. Thank you for sharing your story. All lhe best.
This is a nice poem. I like the subject. I never really thought about time. In the sense of how fast it goes. I now am thinking about how fast time flies. And soon you will draw your last breath. What happens between birth and death you can't predict. Again, I enjoy your poem. It is what I call short and sweet. Keep writing. All the best, Beeline!
This is a great piece. There were some big words that I didn't understand in the message. However, the structure was good. It was a good read. I congradulate you on being a newbie. It is great to have you here. Keep writing. Read and review all you can to help yourself to write even better than this. All the best.
Have you ever considered writing for day time drama? Your poem was very good. It took me a while to read. But it was a good reading. The drama was over whelming. Reminds me of my own life. I think you could turn it into a screen play. All seriousness, of course you'd have to make it longer add some more characters . What would you call it? Well, all the best, Beeline!
I think that you are wrong. You are definitely a poet. This was an excellent poem. The structure was nice. It flowed very well. Have just a little confidence in yourself. And you'll see you can write very well. You wrote this well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a good read. I would like to see something else you have written. Do not be shy. There are times when I feel I can't write either. But then set down with your pen and it starts to flow. I think that it will be easy for you. Again, just a little confidence. Keep on writing. Beeline!
Dear anyway,
Your poem was a good read. But as a friend commented you seem to be setting yourself up as a Devine One. The concept of you being your own god is one I haven't heard by anyone before. I don't like it. However, that is just me. Still, again, it was a good read. All the best. Beeline!
This is all a bit troubling. Wrote an awful lot very quickly. I assume you know what all this means. There has to be some sort of rhyme or reason I like it. Because I can't make heads nor tails out of it. It is a very professional jumble of mumbo jumbo. Sorry for the criticism but I couldnt' do any better. Write on. All the best. Beeline!
This was a poem that got close to my heart. I knew my own grandmother and though she never grew flowers she would piece pieces of cloth together to make the top of a quilt.. It was great knowing her. I could see the imagery in your words. I could sense the love that you have for her. I know it is an ongoing love for you made it so in your poem.
There is true romance here in this piece. It is a piece that transcends all others that I have read in a good while. It is a piece that would be nice to keep on reading. There is so much here. There is love that is obviously seen. There is love in every word. All the best to you now and always.
I didn't thoroughally understand this piece. It seems you were leading someone to do something to you. The structure was good, though. Your choice of words was good. It was really off beat. I suppose you intended it to be that way. I like to read some of your other works. Please keep writing. I am sure I can find something I can understand. This is my ignorance. All the best. Beeline!
I'm not sure I completely understand. IF I do, this is an excellent poem. I love your use of words. The structure is very good. It seems a bit down troddened. But I suppose that is the way it is supposed to be. I like to be the author myself. But wishes never come true. Keep on writing. Beeline!
I am a very cynical person. The glass is half empty. I try not to be that way. But ;love knows no bounds. Love brings guilt. Love brings happiness. Love brings wonder. I enjoyed your poem. I like to read something else you have written. Keep on writing. Beeline!
I found your poem to be quite interesting. The structure was very good. Though there were times I didn't understand it completely. Still, it was interesting. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a piece like I havent' seen before.
Is this poem true to life? It is very sad. I've been in the same situation myself. I know its no fun. In fact it hurts very deeply. It seems that you can see right through you without a bit of emotion. You have my sympathy. The structure was really good. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. All the best. Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your piece. Eventhough, I didnt' understand a word of it. It was very interesting. My small mind just cannot comprehend. It wasn't your fault it was mine. I like to have you email me and explain it to me. I am sure that it would be more interesting if I could comprehend it. Please do not be offended by my tactless review. Sorry. Beeline!
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