This piece was great.. I totally identify with it. I have been in a relationship that way. And ended the same way. It is not fun being told your less than a person. Good for you. I am glad that you woke up and saw the light. You carry on and make a great life for yourself. All the best. Beeline!
Dear Beliz, I am sure you are amazing. If you have written this about yourself remember the end of the road is a good place to turn around and rock bottom is pretty solid ground. I wish you the best. It can only get better. If you try to block out the negavity you'll see what I mean. All the best. Beeline!
Team you are right. this is very cynical. Nevertheless, I found it amuziing. I enjoyed reading it. Frankly, it was more than cynical it was cruel. Nothing wrong with that. You could have put a few funny lines in it. But it is fine as it is. Thank you for letting me read it. Beeline!
I loved this piece it's filled with joy and happiness. Your words were very eloquent. It was full of color. It lifted my spirits. It gave me a calming piece of mind. i loved the arrangement and the rhyme. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a good write. Keep up the good writing. Beeline!
I so know how you are feeling in this piece. Depression is a very difficult disease to overcome. The lonelinenss, the heartache, and everything that comes with it and of course you feel like your the only one. I really enjoyed reading this piece. I just happen to stumble upon and thought I would give it a quick read and there was totally identifying with it. It was a lovely piece. I say again I did so enjoy it. Keep on writing.. Beeline!
This wasn't really short. I enjoyed reading it though. You have done a good job. You have done well. There was a mistake with the word "breath' when the word "breathe" was the right word. Other than that there were no mistakes. Please keep writing. Beeline!
This was a very enjoyable piece. I find it hard to put into words how well this made me feel. i AM LOOKING FOR THE NEXT RAINY DAY. There was no mistake found in the whole piece. It was a very good write. You have done well. You did a good job. Keep writing. Beeline!
This has to be the sweetest yet tragic poem I have ever read. The ending really shocked me. I was really in favor of the butterfly. I enjoyed it very much nevertheless. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a very good write. Please keep writing. Beeline!
This is a piece that you have expressed yourself well. You have no mistakes in the whole piece. It is a very good write. You made me shed a tear. Believe me that is hard to do. You ask alot of questions I hope they will be answered for you. Write on. Good luck. Beeline!
I found your piece to be very tragic. But in a good way. If this is about you I am very sorry. I really hope that you have grown up to live of what they call a "normal life" if this is about you then you have a clear picture of yourself that you let others see. You did well. You have done a good job. Write on Beeline!
I sympathize with you, loneliness at times becomes my best friend. it is really hard to shake it off. Sometimes professional help is really a good thing. Me, myself I sought professional help. Now I feel much better. Except for those times when loneliness becomes my best friend. Keep writing. Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your piece. Although, I didn't totally understand which could be my fault. Anyway, keep on writing. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a good job. You have done well. Beeline!
You describe broken dreams wonderfully. So much in such a short space. I had to force back a tear. The flowers in the attic was a very nice touch. I am not trying to be melowdramatic. I just enjoy reading. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done a very good job. Keep writing. Write on. Beeline!
Your words speak volumes. They were so colorful. You told so much in such a short time. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. It was very articulate. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a very good job. Keep writing. Beeline!
I enjoyed your piece. It was very colorful. And I will never pick another rose. They are indeed beautiful flowers. Among the fairest. I love the structure of your piece. it was a good job. You have done well. There were no mistakes found in the piece. Waiting for your next flower. Ha Ha. Keep writing. Enjoyed it. Beeline!
I loved the words you used. I like the structure. I am a musician and I would love to put it to music. It would make a beautiful ballad. I think you have a gift and you should explore writing beautiful lyrics. There were no mistakes found in the piece. You did a good job. Keep writing. You're good at it. Beeline!
This was a beautiful story about the moon. It is t he lesser of the two lights we have. You did well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You made the moon an exciting fixture of the sky. It was a good read. Please keep writing.
Brillant is all I can say. Maybe thereis something I can say. I enjoyed reading it. The clash between night and day is a never ending war. You interpreted this very well. There was a lot of color within your piece. It was a joy to read. Please keep writing. I will look forward to your next piece. Beeline!
Very easy reading not to say that it was bad. I actually enjoyed it. It slightly reminded me of the Count of Monte Crfisto. Only slightly. It was an excellent reading. I wish I could do as well. It isnt' easy to do something with only 100 words but you did a great job. It was a great one for sure enough. Keep writing.Beeline!
Interesting piece. Dark and sad but captivating. I couldn't stop reading. Homelessness and general conditions of many large cities I suppose make good reading. There was a sense of sadness in your words for the man. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece.
I enjoyed reading this though I got lost my fault. Fools are everywhere on the train, the car, on the bus, okay enough of transportation. I did enjoy reading your piece. I look foward to reading more. There was no mistakes in the whole piece. It was a good job. You have done well.
Though I am not religious this had a curious draw to me. It was hard for me to understand it all. As I said, I am not very religious. But it was a nice reading. There was no mistake found in the whole piece. There was a sense of forboding within the piece. Please keep writing. Beeline!
I find it very sentimental and touching. You must truly care for this person. And I love the comedy at the end. At least I hope it was meant to be comedy. If not, I apologize. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a very good job. You have done well. Keep wrrting. Beeline!
Although I don't understand all it was still an interesting reading. Just when I thought it would change to something else. But I liked it. What I could comprehend. Pardon my ignorance. There were some rather big words in the piece that not everyone is going to know. It is fine to use them for they are part of your vocabulary. I just think that it would have been better tohave broken the big words down so everyone could understand the piece. But again I enjoyed the reading. Keep writing. Beeline!
Short and sweet a very good reading. The sun always makes a good topic. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. I like to read some of your other matieral. I will be on the lookout. Would you please review some of my work in return for the favor of this review? Thank you Beeline!
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