I hate to say it but I really didnt' understand it. With the exception of a few lines. The structure was great. The poem flowed very well. I wish you would email me back and help me understand it. It is really frustrating to me. Not to understand what I am reading. No offense whatsoever. It was well written. I couldn't do any better. I hope I havent' angered you. All the best, Beeline!
I found your poem very amusing. I had to laugh. I hope that was your intention. Opps, I am sorry it is mine. it was very clever. One of the more humerous pieces I have read in a while. You are one thing yet another. For all I know, you could be superman. This is a great poem. Keep up the good work. Beeline!
This has to be the most depressing poem I have ever read. There was not a single happy note. I feel terrible for you. If this is true to life. I would have loved just a little upbeat. Still, it was excellent. Your phrasing and your words were great. Just because a poem is depressing doesn't make it bad. It was hard to read. Because of the depressing words you used. Nonetheless, I WOULD LOVE T READ SOME MORE OF YOUR OTHER MATERIAL. You are obviously a very good writer. Sorry it made me sad. But I tend to be emotional. All the best. Keep on writing. Beeline!
I too have felt the grim reaper of love. It cuts like a knife it blesses you with happiness. Your poem was a little hard to understand. That of course, is nothing bad. It is just my ignorance. I read it several times. The strucutre was excellent. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. Looking forward to finding something of yours. All the best, Beeline!
From what I have read it appears to be very good. There is good detail. Forgive me, I am not good at reviewing. I can't wait to read the rest. The structure was good and there were no mistakes found in the whole piece. Hopefully, the rest will be as good as what I have read. All the best, Beeline!
Dear Kayy,
That was very sweet. It isn't many that I like of this catagory. This happens to be one of the best. Wish you could have made it longer. But you can't have everything. Again, it was very loving. The rhyming was great. The structure of your poem was great. I could have never done a poem siimilar myself. Hope to be seeing something else from you soon. All the best, Beeline!
I could not understand your piece totally. It has alot to do with your abbreviations. If I could lhave understood itt I am sure I would have loved it. Had I been able to have understood it. It was sad. Anytime two people split it is a crash in both worlds. I am not sure if this is about you and your significant other if so I feel for you. I would like to read some more of your material. All the best, Beeline!
This was very,very very tender story. I almost feel like I was there. I was in 1990 I was on the oppostie end. All I knew that I loved her and our son. There is no more precious moment than the moment when you first look at your child than the other parent.. Agai this was a very precious story. You are as lucky as I. All the best, I am glad that everything worked out for you. Beeline!
I didn't quite understand the poem at first. The more I read the more I understood. It is a very interesting concept. It seemed strange at first but was actually a good read. I like to read more of your material. Something probably stranger. Keep on writing. Beeline!
This was very endearing. I understand slightly the main thing my father died forty years ago and I am only 43 now How wish I would have known him. The only death Iam looking at now is my mother. And that doesn't seem to be far off. I don't know what i'll do when she is dead. I guess the same way you feel. I never been close to anyone so close to death. I wish you all the best Beeline!.
This poem is really cute. I never seen or heard my Only Sunshine done this way. You must really love your partner. I got a nice laugh out of it. It is a very original idea. Of course, I know where you got the idea. I again I find it very amusing. Conttinue to write. I will wait for the next nursery rhyme with love behind it. All the best. Beeline!
This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. There is sadness very little. There are sentiments there is love, obviously. I can only wish to find what you have already. Me, I wish I could write with something so emotional. I would love to read anymore of your writing. Best wishes, Beeline!
IF you wrote this poem because you were bored, you really did a good job. It was very depressing. But there is nothing wrong with that. I can see myself writing such a poem. I would love to know where the origins of this poem are. If this poem is about yourself I really feel for you. All the best. Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your poem. It is very optomistic. I can just imagine you on your quest. I can tell you very light and hopeful. It is a very happy poem. I can only imagine your travels. I enjoyed the structure of the poem. And the wording was verry optomistic. Please continue your writing. All the best, Beeline!
I agree with you its wierd but I like taht sort of thing. Though it was short, I enjoyed reading it. I never knew how many times an eye bliinks in a day. It is an interesting tidbit of information. Three hundred to four hundred miliseconds sounds like an eternity. Again I enjoyed reading your piece. Keep writing. Beeline!
A very enjoyable read. Although, slightly on the paranoid side. I hope you reallly don't feel this way. That would be tragic. It was very well writtten. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece You did an excellent job. Keep up the good work. Beeline!
I found your poem very touching. It was a good read. Though, it was very depressing. It had a very nice strructure to it. It was very pleasant. I am not sure if it is true or not. If it is ttrue my heart goes out to you. Anytime your heart is played with it is an unpleasant situation. I wish you all t he best. Beeline!
Your poem was the sweetest i have ever read. I would love to be the recipient of those words. Your rhyming is perfect. I am a song writer. And I can imagine this being a song. There were no mistrakes f ound in the whole piece. You have done an excellent job. Keep up the good work. Beeline!
I enjoyed reading your poem. It was sad yet happy. I liked the ending prove your indomintable spirit. It sounds like a day in my life. You never know what is going to happen. I like the structure of the poem. There were no mistakes found in t he whole piece. You did a good job. Keep on writing. Beeline!
This is a great poem. You did well in the structure of it. You had my attention. I sympathize with you. I too have suffeed from depression. It seems to be a hole you can't climb out of. Again, I sympathize with you. Keep on writing. It is a helpful t hing for you to review too. All the best. Beeline!
I am not sure if the poem is about you. If so, my heart goes out to you. I do hope the rain has washed away all the scars. I did like the repetition. I too, am very repetitive in my wiriting. This was a beautiful piece. I could find nothing wrong with it. Alll the best, Beeline!
This is a very tender piece. I am assuming this is a true story. I myself have been through drug addiction. It is very difficult to overcome. Your friend is very lucky to have you. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. Good luck/. Beeline!
Very excellent reading. Tel me is it a true story? It kind of tugs at my heart. You said so much in a very short span. I think you're a great writer. The structure was good. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. Looking forward to your next endeavor. LOOKING FORWARD TO IT. GOOD LUCK. BEELINE!
great poem your use of words was very good i truley enjoyed reading this there seemed to be no mistakes at all i write song lyrics myself wish you would take a look at mine sometime keep up the good work beeline
I do hope this poem is not true to life. I'd would do in my best friend. That must be a horrible feeling to have your best friend betray you that way. I enjoyed reading your poem. Eventhough, it made me a little angry. But that just means that it was well written. Enjoyed Beeline!
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