I enjoyed reading your piece. it was short but sweet. The search for love had an element of sorrow to it. There were no mistakes found in the whole picce. It was a good job. You have done well. And you deserve all the accolades one would reserve . Keep writing. Beeline!
It is well written. Melchanoly down right depressing but definitely nothing wrong wiith that. I love reading depressing material often. I can't wait for chapter 1. There was no mistake found in the whole piece. It was a good job. You have done well. Anticipating your next chapter. Beeline!
It really made me cry. Right after the first few lines. It is sad it is not depressing. However, it really touched me. It reminds me of my writing. I tend to lean to the melchanoly. I really enjoyed reading your piece. And I know I would enjoy some of your other work. Keep wriiting. Beeline!
There was color within your words. It was like I was there. I felt the water and saw the shark. it was all very vivid. It was an adequate piece of poetry. There was no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a very good piece. AS I said, there was color within your words. Keep on writing. Beeline!
Yes I did fine your piece depressing. But, somehow I identify with it. It was well written. It could have been a litttle longer. And I would have enjoyed it morre. Perrhaps, enjoy is not the word. It was very down trodden. However, in the overall it was very good. I like to read more of your work.
I am not understanding this totally but it is a good piece,. I like your wording. I can't quite destinciguish between your romantic struggle and your technology. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading it. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. it was a good job. Keep writing. Right on.
I liked it alot. It is good. It sounds rather haunting. There was one mistake in the piece. The word passer byers should have been passer byers. That was the only thing wrong with this piece. I love your use of words. It was a little bittersweet and sad. But that is a good thing. Keep on writing. I enjoyed it.
I am glad that RAOK is a part of WDC. The requirements are a downer for I wanted to become a part of it. I haven't been with WDC for three months However I would like to make a donation of some gps.
For some reason this piece made me very sad. I am not sure what emotion you were trying to evoke. But I found it touching. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was good. You made your experience my experience. Wouldn't it be great to be a kid again?
Was hard to read. tt took my bifocals to read it. Please change the color. Nevertheless it was good. Bits and pieces was there from one point to the next. But it was interesting readiing. I enjoyed the quotations. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece.
I understand what you are saying but a little bit confused. You do get your point across. Your message is a good one. However, it took me a couple of times to reading to understand. Now that I do, I fully appreciate it. Keep up the good work.Don't stop writing.
It is a short one. But, it was brilliant and touching. Telling in a very short time what could last a lifetime. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. I enjoyed immensly. It flowed really well from line to line. I love your reference to Heaven.Please keep writing.
PERFECT! This touched me especially deeply,. It was full of sadness and happiness. I did not expect Zack'sdeath. I had tears in my eyes. This is a great example of great writing. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did well. You have done a good job. It was very profound. KEEP WRITING.
It was very pretty. The dark colors made it more beautiful. I wish I had one like it. The flowers show a touch of Springtime. I like roses. They reminded me of love and light. There was a great sense of freedom within this sig. Freedom from addiction is one of the things that you are talking about. I can sympathicise I have been through addiction myself.
I like it alot. Very touching. I sympathize completely with the poem. Excellent writing. It pulled at my heart strings. There was nothing I could see wrong with it. Please keep up the good work. I am looking forward to reading more of your port.
Really catchy. Good or well written. I love the flow of this poem. It gives you the sense of victory and defeat. High school must be rough. It was in my day. Keep on writing the good stuff.
I like it. The words are very expressive. You make me feel like I was there. Terrified and almost alone. Dangerous. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep up the good work.
Brilliant, entertaining humerous, serious, better than anything I have wrote.There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. Let the truth ring. There were colors within your words, too.
Not enough talking about the relationship of you and Sandra. You did a good job, however. I wanted more about your relationship. However, but it was a touching piece. I would like to read more. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added color to your words, too.
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