Dear Malcolm,
You told a wonderful story. In your piece called "Love". It was very mystical. Your words painted a nice picture. I can see it all. Your piece was very well written. it reminded me only slightly of something from the Lord of the Rings movies. No offense intended. it had that sci-fi fantasy touch to it. it was very good. Keep up the good writing. And I hope this finds you well. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Kristen,
I agree with you wholeheartedly. Your piece was written so well. People don't think of addiction unless its drugs or alcohol. The latter I consider a drug myself. People are addicted to many things as you said. Cigarettes, coffee, soft drinks, and etc. My doctor once told me that you could be addicted to Tylenol. I'm so glad that you wrote this piece. You are the first and only person who views this the same way i do This is a good piece. Everyone should read it. I know I enjoyed reading it. Keep spreading the word. All the best to you, Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ..
Hello ohheycolby,
"If Tears Could Form a Lane". I just finished reading this piece. As a song writer, I see it more as song lyrics very good song lyrics. I know you wrote it as a poem. But to me, songs are poems put to music. i am sure that wasn't your intentions here. Nonetheless it is very well written. I enjoyed the read. Good job. I wish you all the best, Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear mdma,
"explaining mom" i want to make sure i get this correct. Is it true to life? I suppose it couldn't be for you would be dead. WAs the death as a result of your mother's passing? I'm all confused. It was very well written. It flowed nicely. I apologize. I simply couldnt' quite grasp it. Feel free to email me and set me straight. I hope this finds you well. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Jen,
I just finished reading your piece "February 14}. I was very sad to hear what you have to say about Valentine's Day. I don't particuarly care for it either. Love can kill, I cannot imagine that. I am sorry for whatever bad event or lost love that led you to your bitterness. Your piece was well written. And it was tragic and sorrowful. I wish there was something I could say to make you feel better. I hope this finds you well. Bless you. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Rage of Gaige,
I just finished reading your poem "The One'. Aren't you the romantic? is this poem true to life? Because it sounds like some girl has found a lucky guy. This was a well written poem. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme very much. Is this for Valentine's ? If so, I hope the two of you have a wonderful time. Sincerely, Beeline!!!!{image:1644262].
Hello jonisen,
"Echoes in the Hall". I just finished reading your song. As a song writer myself I have to tell you that you have a good one here. It is not just about love and romance and a tear in your beer, it is about something substantial. You have a great rhyming scheme. And it was quite well written. I loved your lyrics. And it was organized. I hope this finds you well. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello IseeCows,
Couldnt' quite make this one out. Sounds like an advertisement for Antarctica. Itried to read between the lines but I got nowhere. i am very sorry it was a well written piece. I hope this finds you well. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** . PS Forgive my ignorance.
Hello Pappy,
I just finished reading your piece "The Black Widow". it was an excellent piece. You said so much in such a short time. Except "we all know who she is" I am out of the loop. I don't know who she is. I just know you have a well written piece here. It was a great read. All the best to you, Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Lil Vivi,
"In the Face of Death" this is a quite well written piece. though dark, perhaps gothic, still it was a good read. Anyone facing death I could imagine would be quite fearful. But your character laguhed in the face of Death and paid the price. Though short, it has an excellent structure. it was very original. I haven't read anything quite like it. Keep up the good work. all the best to you, Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello AJordan,
"Love Is Black" is a bit morbid. Referring to the dead body. You are really strecthing to get your point across. Who hurt you so badly that you have to write a poem of this caliber? And we know that stabbing a knife in your heart is( painful). I eally dont' know what else to say. I respect you as a writer. But I think you failed this time. You should have written it longer. Be slightly less harsh with your words. We get the point. I hope this finds you well. Please don't take offense to my review. I am only giving you my honest opinion. Take care. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Orange,
"The Rock Show" did you ever see the movie Rock Star? Not that it has anything to do with this. I was just curious. You did well on your poem. Although I think the word whore is a bit strong. But if they were your feelings you have every right to them. the structure of your poem was very good. You fell in love quickly. It must have been one hell of a rock show. And anyone with a gift of a good voice should not throw it away. it's not easy to sing. I know from experience. I enjoyed your poem. I was looking forward to seeing some more of your material. All the best to you, Don't stop playing. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Joetrikke,
I just finished reading "A Minds Journey". It was nonsense. But good nonsense. In the second half of the piece you painted a beautiful picture of some fairytale world you were lost in. Is this as far as your mind's journey will take you? I find that hard to believe. If you can up with this much. i can't wait to see part 2. Keep up the good work. I hope all is well with you. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Joetrikke,
"A Poem" I just now finished reading your poem. "A Poem". I thought it was cheerful. I never thought about the color of words. I have read many poems where the words painted a picture for you. But no specific color. Your poem was well written. i enjoyed it. You are a talented writer. And original. I'll be looking for more of your material. This is the first poem I have seen by you. All the best to you. I hope these words find you well. Beeline!!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Lil,
I just finished reading your piece "A Nonsense Rhyme". This is total cheesecake. You made absolutely no sense at all as you said. I found it very humerous. It was a break of all the I Love You's Don't leave me You're cheating etc. etc.. poems. I think it is as funny as hell. A break from all the seriousness. You did a great job. It was well written. And your rhymes though corny were fabulous. I enjoyed this piece very much. All the best to you, Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Margaretm,
"Fear" I just got through with t his piece. It was an excellent read. Fear can do all the t hings that you wrote. Fear can bring out the worst in you and the best things in you. This is a well written piece. I enjoyed the structure it was very solid. I saw no mistakes to speak of. Just an all around good piece. i hope these words find you well. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Hello Kristie S,
I just finished reading your piece "Fear". I thought it was well written. A great read. But similar to other poems I have found here yours stands out somewhat. I loved the ending. "But she did." He was always there and he left? She was not completely distroyed. And being the heroine, she moved on and found another. BRAVO. all the best to you. Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
hello Rainee,
"Cold" this was an interesting piece. I do not totally understand it. This is part 1 I assume. it wasnt' a bad piece. it could just be my interpretation. It seemed a bit disorganized. it was a good read. With your typos in this piece it was distracted from being a well written piece. All seemed too plain. I wanted more detail. Please do not get offended by my remarks I am only trying to give you an honest review. with just a few changes this could be an excellent story. I hope this finds you well. All the best to you, Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Harvey G,
"A Dialogue: What is True?" this puts a whole new twist on what is really is the truth. I can see your point. But I can also disagree with certain parts. Except for the part that "you;ll also find that very few of these truths are absolute." So true, so true, so true. They say "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder". I think that "truth" is the same way. Your poem is well written. I enjoyed the read. And it gave me a different outlook on things. Such as the "truth". Keep up the good writing. All the best to you, Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear AJ,
I just finished your poem "Found". it was a very nice poem. Well written. Encouraging and. Inspirational. When you speak of Him I assume you are speaking of God. I am not a religious man. But I do look to Him for faith and hope. When I say I am not religious, i mean I am non-demoninational. I do not believe you have to be Catholic, Baptist, Methodist, etc. etc.. God loves everyone the same. And that is great. You have an excellent poem on your hands. i thoroughally enjoyed it. I hope this finds you well. Bless you. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Malcolm,
Once again we meet!! This was a very very nice piece of writing. I loved the opening lines. Though it got a little dark in the end. It took nothing away from the poem Where do you get your ideas? You have a very vivid imagination. Nice rhyme. This piece is organized well. I enjoyed this very much. I am a little jealous. All the best to you and I hope you are well. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Dear Malcolm,
I just finished reading your piece "Hell". I found it to be dark. and almost sorrowful. The piece was well written. It was a good read. "Even in hell love shines". I love that line. Of course the Christians would be up in arms. He finally got his soul mate. Even if it was in Hell. I enjoyed your piece very much. I hope this finds you well. And all the best to you. Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello trippyhippydreams,
"dmt dreams" I just finished reading your piece. This was very original to me. Where you tripping on acid? The imagination behind this is very full. I didn't mean to insult you about the acid thing. Just a joke. Your piece was written well. It kept my attention through the whole thing. Your use of words were wonderful. It was a great read. I will be looking for more of your material. I thought this one was fabulous. Keep up the good work. And I hope this finds you well. Sincerely, Beeline!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
Hello Kai Kun,
Nicely written piece. You could have left out a couple of just light my fire. You sound like a pyromaniac. Good reading though. I hope you are well, Beeline!!!{image"1644262}.
Dear Jewel,
"Where Am I". I just finished reading this piece. And you are right it is a little dark. The character is afraid of happiness? Very sad. Very sorrowful. And tragic. it is well written. i was hoping for a happy ending. NOT. That's okay I was rooting for your character anyway. It was no rhyming scheme. Not necessary in a piece like this. As I read it, I grew more fond of it. Maybe there will be a part 2? All the best to you, Beeline!!!! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** .
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