I am honored that you think I am a good poet, I think you have all the talent I have and then some more! The imagery is so alive. I can see each animal in all it's glory. I also can't help but think of Dancing Doe as taking on a "personal person" description. I love that, it gives the poem even more meaning. An absolute pleasure to read! Thank you so much for sharing it with me!
Write on my dear friend,
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The love and feeling of this poem, really pulls at my heart strings. So many couples can relate to this kind of sadness. I am in awe of the sensitive writing and feelings this evokes. I love emotional poetry and this rocks. I give this a 5 star rating, I see no mistakes and I love it.
Write on!
Michelle
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I love your strong poetric voice and you wonderful message. I have gone into the pit of depression and thought I would lose my mind and my marriage in the process. Unless someone has actualy walked into a deep depression it is so hard to understand how people can't just "snap" out of it, it is a long crawl back to the light, but with good medications and therapy and the time for the brain to find it's way out it can happen. Thank you so much for sharing this very important poem.
Write on!
Michelle
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My final poem to review for the contest. I am so hapy I ended with this. I like to share a good smile and early moring is my favoirte time. It is a special time before we get too hurried with the day. I used to love to get up early when my babies were smaller and have that time to myself. Now it is so busy in the morning. I miss that sweet time. Thanks again for sharing your talent and sweet heart. I have really enjoy my time in your port. I want to come back when this folder has more poetry in it!!
Hugs,
Michelle
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I have had a dark dream, I carried a nightmare in my heart, so this poem pulls me into a place I don't like to travel. I can see many things in this all to familar poem. I love emotional writing and this rocks. I do wish your font was one size larger, it would make it a stronger statement.
Write on!
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I love the visual look of this poem, and have never given much thought to what a scream sounds like, I am pretty good using my voice! lol..I like the line we release our extreme. That is the truth! Great use of powerful words to describe a scream. Another 5 star poem in my eyes!
Write on!
Michelle
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Wow!! Am I so glad you bid on my package! I am such a winner! I love this kind of poetry, you bring me to the edge and comfort me with passion. The vision and feeling, real and beautiful. Perfect from beginning to end. 5 star all the way!
Thank you and Keep Writing from your soul!
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Oh girl I love this kind of poetry, it suggest romance and passion and I am a sucker for the true connection of souls. Oh I love the dark set up and his words and her desire. It is a perfect mix of emotional writing and imagery.
Great job and Thanks for sharing your talent!
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I am trying to get to all the Paper Doll Gang In & Outs. I love this and I think this a great idea. It is so clever to compliment someone and even someone you don't know but have to judge from their port. That is really a great idea to see what you like about someone. I look forward to coming back and catching some good vibes. Thanks so much for sharing your talent and great job!!
Write on!
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I am one of the judges, and I don't judge on grammer, but on feelings. I love how this poem flowed and the imagery was grand but it was your first and last line that made this very sweet to me. I really enjoyed that cute line. Thank you and good luck in the contest!
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I am one of the judges and you know how I love a good read. I like the little history lesson but most of all I love how the tradtion has continued for years. Love really is the greatest gift. Thank you so much for sharing your writing talent and now I am can't wait to read your mushy love poem!
Good Luck in the contest!
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To be nothing but dirt under your nails? Or a moldy piece of cheese. Yikes that is not good. I want so much more and with this poem I could feel that you did too. I think the imagery is great, but I have a very hard time with your small i's. You need to cap those and you have a few typo's that could really get cleaned up and you would have a 5 star poem. The emotional content is good.
Keep writing and sharing your words!
Welcome to Writing.com
Michelle
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I found this little posting in the Love Letter's contest and I couldn't help but read it. I hope you don't mind. Oh man do I hope some day my son write's me a love letter like this! You so got me with the mom thing. That was so funny. It could have been a letter to a lover. Really great job and I would wish you well in the contest, but I want to write a letter too! lol
Thanks for sharing and welcome to Writing.com!
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Oh how the pain is hurting my heart. You can't help but feel so much saddness when you read this poem. I feel so sorry for your sister, her life must seem so empty and the grief will bring her to her knees. She has a long road to travel to become the rock again. She will get there, she has a wonderful sister that will be there to pick up the pieces. Sending you my love!
Hugs,
Michelle
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Well I have been here and I felt this! It is amazing when a love can come like a ghost and change the entire way you think and feel. I have been fooled by my own foolishness and emotional needs. Great poem because I could feel it from beginning to end. Thanks for sharing.
Write on!
Michelle
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I wanted to congratulate you on your banner and winning the Challenge of the In & Out. I just read some of the entries and they are very interesting! I love your style and think you have much to offer in all your writing exerpience. Thanks so much for being apart of the Paper Doll Gang!
Have a great day!
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Thank you so much for your entry in the"Invalid Item"
I am one of the judges, I judge on emotional content and not grammer. I love the Acrosic style poem, but I wanted so much to feel the passion you started out with in this poem. I first line really sets up the tone with the kiss, but the last line...stops the passion. I think it is just me, but I wanted to keep feeling the emotions buidling, I do get where this is leading and I understand completely that need to want of true love. So Thank you so much for giving me a great poem to read!
Good luck in the contest!
Michelle
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I love the acrostic style poem. I think you did an excellent job of creating the perfect valentine's card. I do not judge on grammer. I only judge on my emotional feelings. I loved this! I liked the red coloring and the words just flow! Another great creation Pat! Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest!
Love,
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I hate mirrors! Oh wow is this emotional writing. I am not sure what is worse, her self-hatred or that she allows the beating from Tony. This is very disturbing and I like the format of the story. I find it interesting and easy to read. Scary in many ways. You do a very good job on describing her insecurites. Sad and realistic. Thank you for sharing your talent and weclome to Writing.com!
I am so happy to rate this a 5 star In & Out for the Paper Gang Newbie Project. Look I even beat Hannah In Here! I am so glad you are a part of the gang, and I am learning as much as you Newbie's!!
It is wonderful to share the talent of writing with friends! Welcome to Writing.com!
Write on!
Michelle
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Oh I don't think it will be your last breath or that you shall remain alone forever. It might feel like it at times, but hardly the truth. I did notice you have a few mistakes with this...I think it just needs a good over view and go back and correct your typos and you will have a good poem. Sad but good.
Thanks for shaing and welcome to Writing.com!
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Everything a parent does is hard work. Every child can bring a parent to the edge! Add a disorder and you live constantly on the edge. I know girl how strong you are, but I also know how weak the heart can be. I also know the down days can far out weight the up days. You are doing a wonderful job of helping your son, overcome something he will never understand. It is a sad story but it can have a happy ending! Thank you so much for sharing this important part of your world!
Oh have I been in this place before! I can feel it all come rushing back to me. Your vision is beautiful and sad and real. I get that. I get the longing and the tenderness and the what if's. I wonder if true love ever dies. We just move on to a different kind of love. Something less romantic but more real. Atleast that is what I like to tell myself. The days of youth! Thank you for sharing your talent!
Are you sure this poem should be E rated? Perhaps I am not of innocent mind when I read this! I have this thing for swords and all and if a man is involved. Well Lord have mercy!!
The imagery is shocking in it's simple form, it was my mind that went places that I love to explore. I think you did a wonderful job with very few words and you leave it up to the reader to define the beauty. I like that!
Write on!
Michelle
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It was the picture that made this all seem to real for me. Granny looks very much like my mother. I am still missing her and forever will. You line about the blood-stained dentures. That is such a visual line. You say a lot in this poem about Granny's death. Thank you so much for sharing this. It is very heart-warming.
Hope life is treating you well!
Write on!
Michelle
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