I am so glad I came across this psalm. I have never thought of writing my own, but I am sure I could, I doubt however I could be as complete and as loving as yours. From beginning to end, this flows well and cover's all the greatness of God. Thank you for sharing it!
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Wow I love reading honesty. I get into stories about people. I am interested in our different personalities and what makes us tick. I want to know what inspires our kid names and our playfulness. I want to know if we all bleed red. Your story is a sad one, lone yes but not without love or a good feeling or vibe. You can bite but it sounds like your not sure you really want too, but you will if you have too! Thanks so much for sharing your talent!
I have to say as a member of writing.com for over 2 years...I still struggle with all the reviewing type rules. I do agree with being honest. I do agree with being as helpful as can be. I think I tend to review on the side of feedback and not technical because that is not my strength. I really enjoyed reading this and learned a few things. I so enjoy the quality of writing on this site. It is a very helpful place.
Thank you for sharing your talent and you are going to be a huge help to The Paper Doll Gang Newbie's!!
I find this interesting that you have used words like valedication and valor. Not the most common of words when thinking of a broken soul. Interesting for sure. I like poetry that makes me think and wonder what the poet was thinking when they wrote the poem. This reminds me of someone leaving college and not sure how to find the motivation to make it in the big world. Could just be my take on the words you used. Thanks for sharing!
One has to wonder why you are so taken by the Gods. It is poem filled with imagery and yet I don't think I am seeing everything you are saying. It feels incomplete. I wonder if it is just my own knowledge of the Gods. I just don't get it. Hey that is what is so great about poetry, it is our muse talking!
I was looking for something to read and I found your title irrestible. I am in love with President Obama. Reading your poem is like a short histroy lesson. Unlike a real class, this was much more interesting to read! I think it is more then him being African-American. I think it was just time for a change of thinking and getting back to some hope for the future! I do wish the next 4 years bring us closer to a better America. Thank you so much for sharing your talent and your gift points! Too kind!
Write on!
Michelle
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The ending of this story is haunting. It starts out as any old southern town and soon you feel like something extra is going on. You bring something out in this story that needs to be developed. You can tell there is something here and I love that kind of writing. You have such talent! Great start to you book!
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How lucky you are to see the sunshine in so many wonderful ways, my favorite of course is in your Love for Linda. You are indeed a lucky man when you have your own sunshine girl.
Thank you for sharing your radiance.
Write on!
Michelle
Okay so I must be in some kind of dark mood, sense I can't seem to leave this folder! I am in a mood to get haunted and sucked into your dark and scary thoughts. What hell we put upon ourself. I get so much self-hatred from this poem and can really get into that kind of empty black pit kind of feeling.
Your words spill like ink or blood, thick with emotion and vision. Wow!!
You rock!
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I don't know if this poem is reality for you, but having a close friend go through this, I know this is her poem word for word. She still struggles with forgiveness and I think it is something that is earned and hard to give. I think my husband could even say this about me. I left him emotionally a while back, and although I didn't physcially cheat. I wanted too. This poem really hits home.
Thank you so much for sharing your talent! I love your 5 star poetry!!
Hugs,
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Are you trying to scare me? Okay so I am home alone and all!
Wow the words written in red, really add to the dark imagery. Creepy feelings for sure. I also couldn't help but think of my son and the voices he used to experience. I think in many ways, those with a mental illness could really relate to this dark poem. Your talent for bringing your reader into the poem is 5 star writing.
Thanks for sharing!
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Congrates you have won 5 poetry reviews. This is review number one! I should be thanking you. I love your poetry and am thrilled to get another chance to read your work. I won't be going away!
Oh girl, have I been here!! I can feel so much of this emotional pull. Perhaps it is because I feel a sense of loneliness in my own marriage and because your words paint a clear picture for me. Another 5 star poem.
Thank you so much for sharing your talent!
Write on!
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Well I love the line coma bound to act. The vision of that and what you are trying to say is really great. It is like almost...but not quite. You make the reader fill in the blanks to their own excuses for not getting it done. Great job and thank you for sharing your writing. I see no mistakes, so happy 5 star to you!
Write on!
Michelle
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You have made me laugh!! What a clever take on money. I have to say, losing interest with too much attention is clever as well. It is a complete twist of the words and yet some how the meaning is still there. Time really is money and you can never have too much of both. I am interested in the value of both as well. Thank you for sharing your talent and the prompt.
Write on!
Michelle
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Thank you so much for such an elegant and refined letter. I have to agree history is in the making in so many ways. I am excited for American and I pray his girls can have a dad at night to play with and talk too. He is young and I admire his strength. Reading your letter makes me realize how glad I am to be here and that I can be apart of this history. Thank you so much for sharing your emotions. I see no mistakes and this is 5 star writing!!
Write on!
Michelle
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Not knowing why you are packing the clothes is interesting. It makes me think of speration, death or divorce. It really can be a combination. It is like you are in shock. You talk of the weather and the things all having to do with your busy work but you leave the emotional element completely out of the poem, so it has to come from the reader. I like that!!
Great job and keeping Writing and Sharing your talent!
Michelle
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What a sad ending to love. I really have such a hard time reading about suicide. If you love someone you, you have to love yourself. I find it so tragic that kids think if they lose a love they won't find another one. I really enjoyed your story because of the way it made me feel!! I like a poem that can inspire my heart and my mind at the same time.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.com
Michelle
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As if the Trees could talk about this inspiring day! Wonderful imagery of the change that is happening in our country and how far we have come and yet still how far we need to travel. The trees will always bear witness to history. Thank you for sharing your talent and welcome to writing.com
Write on!
Michelle
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You have a nice start to a collection of poems. I like the emotinal tone and your feelings expressed in paper. I am like you, once a poem is written I have a hard time going back to change it. It will change the emotions at the time it was written. I have learned that poetry gets better if you go back and play with it some more. It couldn't hurt to do some editiong. I have one serious pet peeve with your i. I should always be Capt. It is just my thing. I like to see it that way. I learned in first grade that i is not a word, but I is.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing!!
Michelle
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Well I could just fall in love all over again reading this! Nothing like having a real Knight come into your life and open your heart that much. I truely enjoy reading this kind of poem. It makes me feel young and fresh and that life is great! Thank you so much and may you live happily ever after!
Thank you for sharing your heart!
Write on!
Michelle
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I love looking at Gage and Emma. In these pictures I see hope and sweetness and the love of a great Grandma! Kids are so cute when they are just being kids and you have captured some very wonderful moments here. I love how you made them mini postcards. What a fantastic idea. Can you do that with any picture? Girl your talent is awesome and Thank you so much for sharing it. 5 star album for sure!
Yes, Life is a variety of things, you paint a great picture of the ups and downs. I did notice a few of your Lifes were mispelled. Just a small typo thing. Thank you for sharing your talent and welcome to Writing.com. Where I love life and writing and it all comes together here.
Write on!
Michelle
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You are being offered a shower of Joy! ** Image ID #1508471 Unavailable ** Another wonderful idea of your generous heart and time in this site. I love the idea of helping our Newbies. I think that is what I love best about reviewing, find a new writer that can really spark my interest and show me a new way of thinking.
Time will not allow me to join another group, but I do support your efforts and hope you all have a wonderful time!
Thank you so much for sharing your time with all of us!
Hugs
Michelle
Oh the imagery you paint with your words are wonderful. I can see Jesus singing that angel right to sleep. That is so beautiful and such a painful loss! I love the emotional content and I love free form poetry! I see no errors. This is 5 star writing in my book!
Thank you so much for sharing it and how lucky you are to have your own angel!
Write on!
Michelle
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Your desktop sounds and looks a lot like mine today. Minus the empty cup! I admire you for writing your goals down for the year and placing them so you can find then next week and the next month, as long as you don't delete this! Writing and finishing is a big deal, are we ever finished? I have a book at the publishing house now and it has taken me almost 4 years to get it to print, No time like the present!!
Keep writing!
Michelle
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