You are being honored with this review from your sister...Dawn Embers She won a package, that included 3 reviews for a friend. This is your first.
What I like about this, is that you have several revisions and honestly, I think they all work. I am not familiar with the form, but I get the message of being caught in a lie and how you can play someone for being a fool. The crow is harder for me to understand. I think I might be missing some thing. Again, I really have no suggestions on improvement. Poetry is such a personal thing.
I stand Amazed that God's power is spread from one person to the next. He does not work alone! It is when we believe and share that awe inspiring belief that we get to see the big picture of our world and what he has done for us, and what he will continue to do for us. Thank you so much for sharing your powerful words. You know what else I love about this poem, that no matter how long ago you wrote this. The message is still fresh!
I am laughing out loud! What a great little limerick and so funny too! Can you imagine hitting the keys that hard? LOL I know I can and have! The joys of writing and the hardship of selling!
Write on your so creative with this style of writing. Fun to read!
I so agree with your message here! I can't imagine a Therapist being that bold! There are so many wonderful kinds of therapy and writing is my number one choice and I am going to school to be a Therapist! lol
I have a saying about the rating here, the stars are free, they look good and everyone is perfect for writing and sharing. I am the worse with typos and spelling and forget poetry forms or rules, but my heart leads my pen and I love to write and read.
That is what this site is about. Sharing our love of writing and some do it for all different reasons, we are all right to be here!
I hope you enjoyed the shower!
Oh what a dream to read this poem. I know I shouldn't say this, but I really believe this poem is about me. I want so much to be this free spirit that can love endlessly and make that kind of impact on a soul. I loved this from beginning to end. It is pure beauty and your images only add to the over all joy of reading your words.
This so rocks with emotions, I can't even begin to review this. I miss my dad so much. I miss how he was there and how much your poem feels so real to me. Like I can still see the man and his strong hands. Wow what a blessing you are to create poetry that is so powerful and strong.
Congrats on your third place win in the Paper Doll Poetry contest, I am so glad I am not a judge!!!
I love the message here and I can feel the emotional toll of the tree with a heart, I think it is this form of poetry I am not thrilled about the repeating lines. I still think you did a wonderful job with this poem.
You know I can feel this poem. You know in my mind the images are played out in real life. This is stunning and I am not familiar with this poetry form, but your right...It is powerful or perhaps that is just the words you chose. Great job! No suggestions for improvement, unless you want to put the definition at the end of the poem and get right to the good stuff!
I try not to push away winter...but I think I need to find some red berries to renew my spirit. I love the image and I'm not sure what was created first your poem or the picture but together it is a complete package. I love the whole thought of lover's holding hands with gloves on. What a great imagery that is and the ice I can see it and feel it. I do wish I could snuggle with a fire, that would make this feeling complete. Wonderful job and I can't improve on mother nature and your writing!
Oh I am laughing and cursing cuz your dissin my man! I love Santy Claus, and his big red arse.
Please tell me it aint so! I want Santa to come with his lame toys! This is so clever and well done! I can not find one thing wrong with it...other then your messin with my man! Write on!
I am so in awe of your writing. I think this one by far is my favorite. I just love your opening line and that you bring me to the icy ocean and pluck me out of the sea of dreams. This rocks with imagery and emotions. I love this kind of poetry. I can feel and see it. You have awesome talent thank you so much for sharing it!
Write on!
Now this left me laughing and saying to myself, I LOVE IT!
It is so true, unless you are a writer, I am not sure you would really get this, but for me. I got it and I could not think of one thing to make it better, well unless I was talking to an editor!!
In three short lines you have wrote a book. It is so true how memories when looked over time can become the pages of our soul. This short message is very deep and meaningful. I am so glad this was my first stop to read your poetry.
I have to say this is my fifth review and I am so happy I ended it in the sea! What a beautiful image you have given my mind. I wish so much that the sunshine coming from the gleer off the snow was really the sun sparkling on a ocean! In my mind and through your words you have taken me to the beach to see the day wake up! I love it and wish I could smell the seasalt! Great job of bring your words alive.
I knew I was going to like this, just by it's title alone and your description of dreams not being tamed. It is true such words and flowers have much in common. You can express so much in your poetry. You always seems to know exactly what words to use to inspire and paint a picture. Perfect!
I am in awe of your talent! Keep writing and sharing your gift!
You make me want to go build a clubhouse in my backyard! A few rough edges and a nice day, sounds perfect! I can feel and see and smell this poem. Wow is all I can think of to add. This is great.
I must say, I am not one to know poetry forms, as most of my poetry is free style, but I did enjoy this style.
You fooled me! I looked at your handle with the baseball and I thought this was going to be going on a feild for baseball. Yippee it was Football! My favorite all time college game! I am not into the pro's like I'm Michigan Football. So from beginning to end you had my attention and excitement. Damn you almost make me want to be a man! This rocks and I have no suggestions to make it better! Thanks for sharing your talent and write on!
Wow is this an interesting Poll. I had to really think, I mean I'm really a lot of wonderful things and animals rock, so I could be a monkey or a horse or even a turtle. I am a little bit of everything. I did say I was strong and attractive, as for now that is what I am sticking with! Thanks for a fun poll and something for me to think about!
I love the flow of this and even though I have been here and wrote so many love poems myself, I can still never get enough to that most powerful feeling. It is great that you could share your heart in this poem. Write on and Welcome to Writing.com
Well I have never gone camping, but I sure did in this poem. Oh sure I have gone with the girl scouts and all that jazz, but that wasn't in tents and it wasn't so much about the event of packing up the gear. This was a fun read and interesting. Also the whole outdoor bathroom, shower thing...no not for this city girl! Great poem and I have no suggestions on improving it.
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Wow is all I can think off and well maybe ouch! You totally have the imagery down in this sonnet. It is just like you say, short dark and sad. Painful even! Great job and I enjoy an occasional dark piece of writing. So thanks for sharing and welcome to Writing.com
And if this where the conversation ended...what is your beginning? OMG is all I could think of when I was reading this, it's so real, so intimate. So honest and painful to read, I can imagine living it, because I have been on the other side. I get it. It is amazing the power of your words. I wish you well.
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One can only last in the dark days of spinning out of control before you hit bottom or something really bad happens. It takes a lot of courage to change a life and move on. To sell the soul is not an easy thing to do. I am glad your darker days are gone, but without trying something you never know what you might have missed. Write on!
This is one of those powerful poems, that has a deeper meaning for the writer, then reader. It leaves me wanting to know more and to ask questions, I have no right to know. Interesting how you have captilized some words, but they are important to you. Keep writing from your heart. It is always important to express our soul.
Yes and he leaves me with a laugh! I knew I couldn't stay in that dark folder for very long, when you have humor near by. I love this! I laughed out loud! I love a dog that can swim and find love in all the right places! OMG your too much! I really enjoyed my trip in your port today. I am so honored you bid on my package. I have totally enjoyed your work. If you can call this work, your writing seems pretty easy to read and enjoy! Thank you again for offering such a great variety in your writing!
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