Moo,
You can't stop now, this has a decent start to it, so it's time to finish it. I like this story of young people at the beach after a day of surfing. Brings back memories of so long ago, I'd swear someone else lived them. I never surfed, but hanging out with friendss, and just being one of the guys, yeah, I can relate. But here's what you need to do,, honest. No critiquing, no review, just some advice on what to do to finish this.
1. Decide where it's going. Right now it just seems to be floating along, like the characters in the story. Doesn't seem to have a beginning, middle, or end, and it needs each of those. You want to pull your reader in, fast! So decide what's happening, and build yourself a plot.
2. Review this carefully looking for the smallest of errors, spelling and grammar are so important when writing. They are there, but I'm not going to point them out since since you are still working on it. Indent your paragraphs, double space between paragraphs (makes for better on line reading).
Then, sit back and enjoy the comments people leave you, and if there are suggestions on how to further improve this, read them carefully, decided if you want to make that change, and do it. Notice I said decide for the third time. You have to decide, it's your story, make sure you write it for you, and that it says what you want it to say. Correct errors when shown them, but change it only if it's a change you want to make, change only if it still remains true to the story you first thought of.
I would love to read this again once you've finalized it.
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