I am so sorry to know
you struggle with your child
and worry with a divorce to come
as you struggle with days and nights
in fear pain and doubts of the burdens that you feel
waiting there in faith for God to come and heal your soul.
I will pray for you tonight
that your deepest wishes will come true
to be the gifted writer that you are to me in this poem.
To a Countrymom that cares
to write a line against drunken driving
for those who dare for the fun out there
until the wheels are spinning in the air
the broken bodies lying on the ground
families crying too late to hold them dear
the funeral waits for those who die drunken.
O to be trapped in the freedom of love lost
the door now open to a new fresh start
where burdens are washed away
to yesterdays bitter memories
of sorrows now healed
for a new day
to love
again.
Hello Beth
My review in a poem, from your poem that was a pleasure to read.
This is a great short story ,written in a style to keep one guessing,right to the end
where the red faces slowly turn away to shame for judging the book by it's cover.
My thanks to you, for your kind review of my poem.
HI and please understand that I am slightly intimidated with being a buddy reviewer for a professional like you.
Firstly, my deep appreciation for your kind and clear reviews, of my poems that will futher inspire me to improve,
This is my first attempt at a short story, so here it is.
My first thoughts while reading your captivating account of the florists delema, was that you were in fact telling a story about yourself, which is why it is a five star story for me.
Two comments are as follows:-
Kenny were just --Perhaps [ Kenny was just ]
you do really beautiful work --Perhaps [ youre work is very beautiful ]
How brave can a child of twelve be, when confronted with the choice to run away ,or stay and shoot the abusive father, that beat her mother like the coward that he is, too afraid to stand up and say -Yes I am a bastard and need to run away and leave you to build a new future with a kind man that will love you and your daughter, to live without fear and grow old together.
Krisi, I laud you for your courage to write this.
My thanks for the wonderful news -The Awardicon and Gps.
Go in peace,
embe,that cares
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