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Review of Revenge  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

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Review of Revenge

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story about a girl who is bullied and has problems and decides to deal with one of her bullys. She goes to the bullys house and takes revenge.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Ivy is a creative young lady but has a dark streak in planning to do hurtful things to others. In the end she brutalizes a girl and cuts off three of her fingers and ends up stabbing the girl's mother.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Having Ivy pass out is not good enough. Finish the story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing. I hope you get lots of reviews this month.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Review of An Empty Screen

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem about painted faces. Not the true image of ourselves but the image we seek to push forward.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A good poem with good flow and rythmn.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing and exploring the world of poetry.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of The Sport of Bowling: Double Strength

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem directed at bowlers calling on them to straighten thier curve so to improve thier game.

FLOW:

There are three four line verses with a rhyming scheme of A A B B

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Not being an expert bowler I cannot report on the accuracy of the information.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review of Inspired By  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Review of Inspired By

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Merely eight lines but a great story told as well as an nice rythmatic tone poem.

FLOW:

Rhyming pattern of A B C B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Perhaps using a larger font would improve readability.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review of Dark Link  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


Review of Dark Link

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

She was abused and wanting to escape. He was a young demon that they were trying to destroy. They found one another.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I have to admit it is not an easy read but I sense there is much thought in the process.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of Conversation with an Angel

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A man has lost his wife and now is considering suicide. He has a conversation with a Christmas ornament.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

John who has been drinking and considering taking his own life because he misses his life. It is a much too common situation. The ornament talks to him and he does not kill himself.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep Writing and please enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Super Bowl  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.0)

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Review of Super Bowl

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Obviously not a lover of football. Short and sweet and directly to the point.

FLOW

There is no rhyming pattern. There are just three sentences.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more and use a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and please enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of My Love's the Flower

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem expressing the depth of love the writer has for another. He compares her and this love to various types of flowers.

FLOW

The poem has four verses of four lines with the rhyming scheme of A B A B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good romantic poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing on WDC.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


Review of Rendezvous with Drama

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An explosive situation where a husband and wife are fighting and the two children afraid that the step father will hit their mother. The oldest boy tries to intercede.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A good character presentation and a great storyline. I hope I get the opportunity to read more of the continuing narrative.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep up the good work.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

A story that might need to be told.


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Review of Witch Trials  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


Review of Witch Trials

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Comments from the Salem Witch Trials in which two young girls accused many of the townspeople as being witches. Those accused were given the choice of confessing to witchcraft or being executed. Not much of a choice.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The two impressionable girls Elizabeth and Abigail point out their neighbours as witches. There are comments from the people who were executed stating that they are not witches.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would have liked to see a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Good work. Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


Review of This is the Best Trap Yet

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is the story of Tara Rizer who is a dark pixie. a dark pixie it seems is something like a vampire but are only females and they attack degenerate humans. They are however able to be killed by vampires.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Tara sets a trap to get a human to follow her like a child molestor. She sets the trap only to find her victim is not a human but rather a vampire.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work.


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Review of Divorce Him  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Review of Divorce Him

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem giving an abused woman good advice. If the man is abusing him you have to get out of the situation,

FLOW & RHYTHM

Four four line verses with a rhyming patter on A B C C.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great information to give to those being abused.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for writing this poem.


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Review of Impaler  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


Review of Impaler

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very graphic portrayal of the cruelty of the known as the impaller The fact that his actions are not fiction makes his crimes against humanity even greater. Thank you for sharing this information with us.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

One of Dracula's leaders has difficulty in dealing with the action of impaling the live people who are defeated by his army. The result is that he himself is impaled.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your thought provoking stories.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Life and the Equinox

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The poem depicts a warning from a druid which comes on the equinox about having only a short time before some ending.

FLOW & RYTHMN:

There are ten verses with the rhyming scheme of A B C B. I read the poem aloud and that made no difference to the quality of the poem.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would suggest a larger font..

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work.


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Review of Pain  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Pain

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem expressing sadness and pain over losing a person or a relationship.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The entire feeling of the poem can expressed in this fifth line "nothing can fill the emptiness i feel".

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A larger font makes the eyes happier.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work.


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Review of Keira  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of keira

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A village has been attacked and everyone killed. Well not every one. Keira is missed as is Paul.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Keira who was wounded by an arrow and Paul. Keira realises that Paul was in on the massacre. She pays him back for his treachery.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

A good twist and a well written story.


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Review of Helen MCGummer  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Helen McGummer

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A woman reflecting on a one time daliance as a rock band groupie. She became pregnant and bore a son.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Helen remembered Tory and the one time relationship which resulted in her wonderful son Bob.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions. other than using a larger font to improve readability.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing.


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Review of Pretty Flower  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Pretty Flower

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Free form verse poetry using short almost stacco line lengths.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The comparison of the flower to life and the way we individually or collectively deal with the day to things.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Location, location, location

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This was a great question. It was good for me to see that there are others who get out from behind their desk.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I do some volunteer work driving people for doctors appointments. My waiting time is a great time for writing and editing..

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Thank you for creating this poll.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of Little Girl Misery

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The concept of committing suicide is so prevalent in our society today. The darkness of ending life is preferred over with dealing with it.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

One girl who is trying to fight the feeling to hurt herself and with just one moment she loses and gives in and dies. It is

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing. The more stories like this and perhaps there will be less girls like the one in the story.


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Review of In-Flight Repairs  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of In-Flight Repairs

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Two people a male and a female are flying in a spaceship to Mars. At first they are compatible and later he accuses her of nagging and she seems not to be happy with him either.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Duct Tape seems to be the repair medium on this spacecraft. Larry is the male astronaut but she is not identified by name. In the end Larry uses the duct tape to seal the complaints from the other astronaut.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Good story. I hope you won for that day.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of Letting Go Of Someone

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

a good statement of feeling about changing relationships. The dependent factor of course is the method or reason the relationship has changed . Do both bodies accept that change and are they content with that change.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

No characters just a straight forward statement of belief. x

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for sharing your insight.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



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Review of Rejoice or Regret

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An individual expression of faith and a declaration of requesting others to live by a higher standard.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

You either accept this premise or you don't. God gives liberation and he loves us will continue to ask much of us.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of The First Pizza  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Review of The First Pizza

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Interesting story about the creation of the perfect pizza. Of course only god could create something so heavenly.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Characters are God and the major pizza chains in the United States.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep making us smile.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for this story and I hope you enjoyed your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Review of In Play With The Storm

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I like the poem because you can almost hear the rain falling in the way the poem is structured.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Short rhyming couplets and trio give the poem a feeling of rain.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and I hope you enjoyed your WDC anniversary.


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