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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Review of A Call to Bible Study Leaders

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is an encouragement for those who work in pastoral ministries to realize the untapped resource of the seniors in nursing homes.Not only are these people have a sense of heavenly things they are more open to discussing end of life situations.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

There are several good suggestions and some scripture references that pertain to developing this ministry.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Well thought out treatise. Perhaps you might suggest some other ways of implementing it.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and I hope you enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Nostalgia  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Review of XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good story about the things the author remembers, These are the tings that are important.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Plot is the history of life and the characters the real people of that life.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font to make it more readable .

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing special moments like these. I hope you enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
My top three choices are the ones that were selected in your poll. They are even in the order that I would have chosen them. While I write erotic horror myself i do not feel the erotic is necessary for a good story. (It is just the way that my mind works). I love a horror story that i cannot figure out until the very end.
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Well not quite. I would choose tea instead of coffee. Of course the important aspect would be the chat. Besides having a million questions I would just love to share how others feel about my home planet. I don't even kno all the questions I would have for them.
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Review of Do you Recycle?  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)
None of your answers meet my truth. I recycle what I can but I am keenly aware that I do not recycle enough and much of what goes in the trash should/could go in some form of recycling bin. The problem that there are rules on what goes where. We need our leaders to find new techniques which will improve the amount we recycle.
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.0)
I guess you didn't get the results you wanted on this poll. Since my middle name is Bruce I would really like to find out what people really think. In the Scottish tradition the name Bruce is highly respected. Your choices were very poor and slanted . Perhaps you should do some addition research before engage in this type of activity.
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Review of Monsters  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)

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Review of Monsters

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short little treatise about a person's nephew feels about monsters of his imagination. They all evolve around the toilet.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Not a lot of plot and it can be developed into an amusing antidotes.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A larger font would make it more readable.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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733
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This will depend on your audience. What age group, male or female.
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734
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Not many votes and there still a difficult decision. I always like names that roll so I chose Braxton... thereby Braxton the blacksmith
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Many time there are things that direct our paths. However as we walk along those paths we will see that there are choices, Sometimes the choice is how we deal with the path we are taking. Are we joyful, accepting or upset because it is not exactly what we wanted. In 68 years I am amazed at the paths that I chose and the ones that I seemed destined to follow.
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Review of Wake up and Think  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Check my emails including writing.com Maybe I won the flash fiction contest I entered the night before? If you wake up thinking about any of those eight things then perhaps you should write about. I have written a poem about coffee and also about anxiety.
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Review of Do You Prefer...  
Review by dblameck (David)
Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm a fan of gingerale (vernor's) and rootbeer.
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
The advantage of Historical fiction is that you have a definite setting in which to set your story. If you are using historical characters they are also already documented for you. Some of the greatest fictional stories ever written are historical fiction, For example the Scarlett Pimernel. Some writers like James Jakes have written complete series of novels using historical fiction.
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Review by dblameck (David)
Rated: E | (3.0)
Too few votes to make an adequate assessment. Also you have to look at the target audience. You say hi guys. Do you only want male responses. I think this poll would be leveled toward the audience who responds. Give it more detail and ask direst questions,
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)
So few votes. I am very surprised not more people responded to this. I didn't particularly like your choices. I have family so I would be sharing my good fortune with them. Also I would buy a lifetime membership for writing dot com. I'm sure everyone would do that,
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)


Review of No One Ever Gets In Me

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story about a school aged girl who is control of her own life. She seems to be totally aware of other and does not care about thier feelings.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The unnamed woman/girl seems to enjoy being the controller in any relationship. It makes me not really like her.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Share more of your thought and your writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and keep sharing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

Review of An Otherwise Ordinary Day

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I seems the main character is involved some type of criminal activity. He is being followed by a woman in a black car. He calls his friend harry who he calls Puppy to his friend's irritation Later we find that the woman is Harry's neighbour. This is a sort of true crime drama.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The only character is in fact Jack as he attempts first to elude the woman following him and later looks for ways to scare her away.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

There was one sentence I was not sure of 'I back up to the front door of my car" I think I would have wrote backed

FINAL THOUGHTS:

You need to lengthen the story to get the full advantage of the criminal aspect.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


Review of A Night of Passion

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Hoping for a great lesbian love and was surprised to find an exceptional a very graphic horror story. I have reread the story several times and have enjoyed it each time. You have skillfully set up the scene and then explosively set the succubus to attack and take her victim. Well done.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The creation of the two characters is superb . One is awkward but the other knows her way around at least of undressing of another woman. You don't overdo the detail but set the story to head in one direction and then suddenly it changes and gets even better

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Only suggestion write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Well done I will have to browse your portfolio.


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Review of Elk Hunt  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Review of Elk Hunt

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very good and well detailed story that covers the efforts of a hunter attempting to bag a trophy elk. For those who are not hunters I will explain an elk is much larger that the average deer. Most stand as tall as a man and weight between 500 and 1,000 pounds. I enjoyed the detail of the efforts of both and hunter and the elk.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Great detail. I really got engrossed in the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It might seem strange but I would enjoy even more detail. Moving through virgin territory while tracking the elk would be a challenge by itself.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Good story. Write more. Please enjoy your WDC anniversary


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Review of Bodies on the Sand

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Imagery I understand but why you chose to make it erotic is not within my comprehension. I am not a classical poet but rather write mostly free verse.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The vision of people lying on the beach as waves wash over them is similar to the imasge in the movie "From here to Eternity".

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Fill in the empty space with more visionary material.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


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Review of A Conversation with my Muse

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Writing is difficult for many of us and having a muse who is supportive. In this case the muse seems to be not of the supportive nature.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Struggling with writing it is not always supportive to insist we keep at it. Many people think writing is natural. It isn't.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep at it.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for this story and I hopw you enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Between Friends  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


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Review of Between Friends

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story about the friendship of two girls. Much of the tale deals with opening coconuts. it is an interesting story about there early life together.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Both Elizabeth and Kathleen share their experiences and their lives.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

keep writing and sharing with all of us on WDC.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please enjoy your WDC anniversary


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748
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Of Lovers and Sinners

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is a well written scene that would be approriate for a story in a romantic fiction novel. If this is the type of fiction you want to write then this material is fine. However if you want to create something of a more erotic nature then you need to strengthen the terminology to something slightly more graphic My best way of describing this is with a movie comparison. An x-rated story is porn either in written form or visual. However an "R" rated film with a bedroom scene is not porn but the fiction today's society is looking for. Your story meets a family level movie.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Not using names makes it harder to identify characters in most aspects but since in this case there are only two characters so that does not make a difference.here. However having names does make a story more personable. The descriptive nature of the text is very good.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Technically I would use a larger font for readability.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed the story and believe it is a good beginning to something longer.


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Review of Annie  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.0)

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Review of XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting story but I think you need to spend more time with a word processor spell check. I have noted a couple wrong words. Take time to reread your material before you post it.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Good descriptions both of Annie and Buster.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

her waste was small. waist
into her sole soul

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep Writing and enjoy your WDC anniversary


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Review of The Longing  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of The Longing

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A compelling poem that speaks of looking forward to something better

FLOW & RHYTHMN:

Seven four line verses with the rhyming scheme of A A B B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing and I hope you enjoyed your WDC Anniversary. Happy New Year.


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