I was going to just rate this, but when I looked at the page I had to give a comment. I loved what you had to say. The flow was great. The poems fit well with the other written material. THe picture is what I was looking to rate, and it is beautiful with the little verse. I also like the other picture.
This is a good poem. The rhyme is good. The flow was smooth. I found it easy to read. The message is one that we all can relate to. I know the feeling to want to be close to the one that I love. Finding the first step is always the hardest.
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Subject: Comedy: Poetry
This is cute. I love the child-like descriptive work here. The rhyme was one that I prefer reading. The flow was smooth. The message was really relatable. I have been there. I love the protective guard that you gave MOmmy. This is one item that I can feel the relationship between a mother and her child.
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This is cute. I think that you did a good job with the verses. The rhyme was great. The flow was smooth. I could smile as I think about how many people marry to either get out of the house, others get married to have that special day. Most of us don't realize what the vows really mean until after we finish sayin them.
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I don't know why, but I feel young when I read this. I love how you chose your stanz. The flow is smooth. The rhyme is good. I enjoyed the message. I have had this one many times my self. I know that now I miss my daughter who still live in Kentucky.
This was unusual. THis is why I liked it. I love the descriptive way you created to show us that we can be who we are and God still loves us. I kind of thought of Cindy Lauper of the eighties or Punkie Bruister. I really love the message that you have protrayed on this page.
THis is wonderfully written. Byt the words that you have chose to write in this story, I can see that you have felt these emotions some where before. I think that you really captured a story line that is very hard to describe. I could feel the pain and heard the shot.
It is hard to tell a story in such a few words. You have chosen the right words to get the job done. I can see the woman. I too am a child of July. I like the use of the mirror in this poem. I mean that is the one thing that I am afraid to focus on.
I enjoyed this story. I think that I will show it to my sons. THey love this kind of story line. I did not find any real errors, and I really found it entertaining. The flow was one that kept me reading. I was done reading before I realized that I had began.
I like this story. I have two cats at my house. Chopper rode under a milk crate with my two sons sitting on it from Kentucky to Florida. He is a Blue Russian. He is truly family. Morticea, is an Britch Tabby short hair. She is a year old. Chopper was fixed by the vet, but he still dose the deed with her. They run and play at the most inabt times. (when I want to sleep).
Anyway, this story is about to receive a thousand word review talking about my little friends and children.
I love the this item. I can relate to the question of what makes us happy. This itme created me thinking about deep issues like what do make us more content in life. What are the things that are truly important, and what is just things to stress us more.
THis is well written.THe message is one that is important to all. I find that there are no apparent errors. This has a smooth flow, and the words that you chose to use brought me into your story. One of the best lines in the item is "We live to learn."
The is a very cool poem. The males in my house are dragon obessed. They have all kinds of trinkets and pictures. I am going to let my fourteen year son read this. He draws well, and I think that he would love to draw it from the discription above. I will try to get it placed in my port.
THis is a great well written. I like how it began, and I remember listening over and over to an answering mechine to hear the voice of the one that I loved. My attention was kept throughout the story. The story had a great flow, and the dialog was smoothe.
I have tried to review many of these stories but this is the first one that allowed me into it. This is well written, and I can not wait for more. Sounds like Mike is going to have a challenging life soon. I don't know yet what the title has to dd with this entry, but I guess I shall soon know.
This is such a well written poem. The story showed the message about survival. The lines were well formed. There is such vivid picture of the bird fighting for its life that I could almost reach into the story to help it out. I am happy that Ole MR CAT down the road didn't find him.
I love the vivid world that you created for the Writing.com family. I like that we have a vitural world to interact with each other. I love the way you have the other members acting and greeting the newbies. You described the feel of first becoming a member of the family.
I love this poem. The lines are fluent. The rhythem is wonderful. I really love the emotion. I could feel the pain of being afraid of the connection and getting hurt from another who got to close. Then you feel the pain of self guilt for what another does. You told the so well that I was able to see the events unfold. I wanted to be there to say, "Its not your fault."
Thank you for sharing this with us.
BTW. You have a beautiful port. It is well put together, and the graphics are awesome.
I love this article. I agree that sometimes the world tries to make us see who we are as unworthy of being one of them. If we do not meet with their perceptions of what a person should look and act like we begin to be an out cast. THen we begin to see our selves as less than we are.
I am a very over weight woman from a very skinny family. Even my children look anerexic (for give my spelling). NOw I love with a man who he and all his family are slim except his children. All girls ten, fourteen, and seventeen.
THis is well written. you have brought me into your work. The flow of the story is smooth,and you were very vivid discribed. I am glad that I have found this. YOur dialog kept the story moving along from one paragraph to another without any glitches.
This was cute. The only thing is that I have to re-read to figure where the fire in the box come from. I loved the twist in the ending.It made me question if he had found the sound or if there was going to be another sound adventure. I found no mistakes. The flow of the story was excellent.
I loved this poem. We all have been here at one time or another. YOu were able to tell an interesting love story in a few lines. The flow was smooth, and the beat was fluent. I enjoyed seeing the image of love being found in the well chosen words. This was a very nice poem.
The more I read the more I like it. The dialog is moving the story smooth. The flow of the events are nice. The one thing that I did notice (since I have been having problems of my own in this area) is that you were able to keep a constant verbe tense. You do not go from past to present and so forth.
This was an interesting story. I loved the twist at the end. I have one question, however. The people in the end are dead that gets to relive the last day of the living? The story could be longer, and I would love more detail. This is a great thriller. This did belong in the news letter.
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