This is so beautiful. I have signed up for the seceret pal group. I have not found out from them yet on who is my paw. I see that you have a cnote for anything or anything time. I love them. You are a very creative person. I will one day learn to do things like this.
The title stopped me in my tracks. I had to read it. I thought about how my son used to play with his shadow as a child. When I found that it was an adventure story, I promised myself that I would be back to read more. This was a greatly written introduction, and I hope to be back around soon.
I think that this is a well written story. Is it wrtten from a prompt? I would have liked for it to be longer. The flow was smooth. The story was very interesting. I liked the ending. It would have been great to tell us a little history about the cercumstances.
I remember those really foggy nights in Kentucky where I was raised. You could not see the road in front of you. I hated to see those wooden croses on the sides of the roads that were caused from the lack of vision.
Well, by the end of the story I was nearly in tears. It was a beautiful story of true love. It was moving and emotional. The traits that create a wonderful well written story.
I love this. Don't you just love those prompts? There are time that they bring out our best , as it has here. Or it can serve as a confusion. I like prompts because it is more like a skills exercize. I felt the emotion in this peice, and I could almost see the admiration on the woman's face.
I love this page. It is very helpful not only for the class but for all writing endeavers. I have copied this so that I can use it in the future. This form can be used in short stories as well as novels. I could use it in plays as well as other writing.
THe instructions were followed well. I liked the story that you are forming. You able to choose words that kept my attention and brought me into your work. I am glad that we are in class together. Your words count was much closer than I was. I may have done my templete wrong.
THis is well written and the story makes me laugh. The words that have chosen paints the picture and brings me into the story. Your message is one that we all could benefit from. I would love to see this in print with illustrations. I think that my son would love to read it.
THis is a form of poetry that I am not found reading much. The lines are longer with each one. This is new to me. I love the message. It is one that I can relate to. The flow was smooth. YOu story was told with well chosen words that brought the reader into it and kept my attention. Oh, have I been there.
I think that you got your message across wonderfully. I think that there are so many people are in such a situation. They stay together long after the flames of love are smoothered by hate, anger, jealously, or neglect. THese turn into someone getting hurt.
I can relate to so many things in this story. ONe of the things is not driving for years.
THis is a great story. It was well written, and the flow kept my eyes moving. I thinkg that it was one that could make a great movie. You brought the reader into the storyline with well chosen and discriptive words. The twist was really fun. We all have had to pay as we pass. Now the tables are turned.
Well, I have read and re-read this. I can not make up my mind if there are two or three brothers. I love to be made to think. This reminds me of my grandmother's riddles. So I find that Danh is not a brother but possible a sister. NOw I have to figure out if the older brohter is the older brother to the younger one or older than two. Or if the younger is younger than just one older brother.
Well, here goes nothing. I will guess two brohters and one sister.
THis was fun. I really forgot how much fun these could be. I really like these though I am not very good at creating them. I have plans to revisit your port to play around with more of them. It went well with the season. I think this is a real thrill at midnight.
I understand. I love the message. I found no errors. The item had a great flow, and you were able to bring your reader into the words. We can relate to the information. I felt that it was cute and encouragning in some ways. I love how it shows the battle that we have to fight sometimes is not others. It is a fight from with in.
I am so glad that I have found this. The poem is well written. I did not notice any mistakes. I see that you have had a busy night. Usually when I enter so many items, I am either showing old work, or working working through something. I love the way you brought the message, and I have been there.
Oh Boy, writing and math. This is an ouchie that needs a bandaide for me. If someone whispers the word percentage, you might find me hiding under my bed. I think that I will start this part of the lesson by copying your example. I will delete your book information, and study my story. I think that I might choose. I think that I will choose Mitch Albom 'Five People You Meet In Heaven.' I know that there is so much past and present things going on, but I loved the book so much.
I have been on both ends of those words when they were not ready to be said. It is so confusing when they are not taken the way we would like them to be, or we do not know how to react to them our selves. I know that they terrify me. I have felt the sting of those words being said when I have needed it.
THe words cut me as the knife did the subject of your poem. I have been there, and I wonder if this is written from that point in your life. It takes talkent to write an entire story in just a few words especially with such emotion. I have felt these words in my own life. My safty was wondering how I would get over the pain.
THis is a peom that is well written. I like the words that you chose. The flow was so calming and fluent. The rhyme at the end of each line in a stanz is one of my favorite. The message is one that at times nearly brought tears to my eyes. The butter has been a symbol of evil in my life at one time, but I like this story.
This is a very touching poem. I think that it is one that spreads an important message. I have teen ager. four girls and two boys. The way the world is, this could be one of my children. These words are reality to those who may become sexuality active, and strangly as it may seem, it is an inspiration to those who found themselves in that situation.
Thank you for sharing this well written poem with us.
Ida
I love thisIt reminds me of my son. He likes to pluck his gutiar to relax. He never forgets the simple finger places that he learns. I admire him, and I admire you for putting this into words. In just these few words you were able to paint a picture of someone playing in my mind.
Thank you for sharing this with us like the smooth. I loved the message. YOu brought one that we all need to think about. I like the symbol that you used to bring such a picture to us. IT seems that we complain and take too much for granted. We forget that every one who has fought in a war or war-like action has indeed given their lives. Some have not come home. SOme have died. Those who have made it home never found home the same again.
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Thank you for sharing this important message with us in verse.
Ida
I like both the form of this poem and the message. I like that it makes me think. Is the ordor one that brings painfully wonderful memories and seduction or feelings of mistrust and hate. I think that this is well written.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
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Great story. I am pleased that you used dialog to put it together. The spoken words did not interupt the flow of the story at all. I liked the message, and I could see the child in trouble. I wonder about the light and dark. WHat is real and what is not. This is a wonderful story that brought me into it.
I love this idea. I found it on the seduction contest, and I am glad I did. I have been wanting to write some items like this, and I believe that this is a way to get my nerve up. I love the choice of words. YOu can write anything about sex and find the words that are not so unlady like.
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