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Review of MY LIFE  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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#1308391 by SHERRI GIBSON
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*Idea* MECHANICS: No grammatical or other errors were spotted. *Idea*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: There are not any I can think of that would improve the item. *Idea*

*Star* MY FAVORITES: You did a fantastic job of using the prompt for this week. The rhythm is superb, and every verse expresses emotions I believe all of us have felt sometime. I especially liked the stanza about living life to the fullest by making the most of it. *Star*

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Review of My Life  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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#1308391 by SHERRI GIBSON
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*Idea* ERRORS: Not a mistake was spotted. *Idea*

*Note1* SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of for improvement. *Note1*

*Star* CHARACTERS: N/A *Star*

*Writing* PLOT: N/A *Writing*

*Pencil* OVERALL OPINION: You did a magnificent job of relaying your feelings about life. It has its ups and downs, but like you, I look for the beauty instead of the obstacles. *Pencil*

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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Peace* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted, and although I think the poem would make for a better presentation if put into verses, I see that this is a style of your own, therefore have no suggestions for improvement. *Peace*

*Gold* CHARACTERS: N/A *Gold*

*Flowerb* PLOT: N/A *Flowerb*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL OPINION: This is a unique form. What I liked most though, is your view on those stuck in their own style. It is easy to see that you are a writer who stands on conviction. Well done! The best of luck to you!!!*RainbowL**RainbowR*

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WRITE ON!

Sherri
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Review of Last Gift  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only an opinion of this humble reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Exclaim* ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, and there are no suggestions I can think of for improvement other than giving the characters names so they would be easier to relate to. *Exclaim*

*Pencil* CHARACTERS & PLOT: The characters are relayed well, although as mentioned above, I think they would be easier to relate to if given names. Only a humble opinion though. *Smile* The storyline is outstanding. *Pencil*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL THOUGHTS: You did a magnificent job of writing the story in a way that tugged at this readers heart. Tears literally came to my eyes when she recalled the feel of him and all they shared before his departure. The finale was the real tear-jerker, for so many soldiers and their survivors face this now as they strive to protect our country. *RainbowL**RainbowR*

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KEEP WRITING!

Sherri
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Review of Different Power  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only an opinion of this humble reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Exclaim* ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: The rhyming pattern is off in some of the verses. For example, "finances" and "differences"; "work" and "fork"; "weakness" and "difference"; and "lies" and "fly" do not follow the same rhythm as found in the other stanzas. "As they success in life together" should be "As they succeed in life together". "Insead" should be "Instead". *Exclaim*

*Pencil* CHARACTERS & PLOT: N/A *Pencil*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL THOUGHTS: The message is relayed well in my personal opinion. Everything we do in life requires teamwork and striving to reach goals no matter how difficult they may be. Without a lot of faith and hard work, we lose our dreams. Good read! *RainbowL**RainbowR*

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Sherri
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Review of One By One  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Peace* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: The rhythm is off in some of the stanzas. For example, "one" and "on"; "like" and "right"; "place" and "chased"; and "done" and "one" do not follow the same rhyming pattern as used in the other verses. *Peace*

*Gold* CHARACTERS: N/A *Gold*

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*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL OPINION: The imagery is terrific, especially in the stanzas about the night, moon, and stars. The emotions are expressed just as well. I thought the verses about the feelings being powerful and the heart no longer being chased were awesome. *RainbowL**RainbowR*

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WRITE ON!

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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*Pencil* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: It was rubber" should be "They were rubber" instead being as walls is plural. "a sea foam" should be "sea foam". A comma should come after "of heaven" with "heaven" capitalized. Just an opinion, but I think "I" is used too frequently in the paragraph. Deleting some and reconstructing the sentences would make for a better read in my opinion. For example, something like this: "....I could muster, and screamed."??? *Pencil*

*Note1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: The characters are defined well, although I think they would be easier to relate to if given names, and the storyline good. *Note1*

*Check2* MY THOUGHTS: You did a super job of expressing the main characters emotions, and just as well in describing the settings. My favorite paragraph is the one about the individual dreaming about the ocean and natural surroundings. *Check2*

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Review of A Day in the Life  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Idea* ERRORS: Many punctual errors were noticed. For example, no comma is needed after "crack of dawn", "high and mighty", and a comma follow "give me some money". A period should replace the comma after "on everywhere", "it" capitalized, a period replace the comma following "back alley", and "apparently" capitalized with a comma following it. *Idea*

*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: The first sentences of paragraph one are ones that I feel would read better like so: "I woke up at the crack of dawn just like I did every day to an empty room in a tunic that's getting a little snug and pain in my lower back." "my" could be deleted before "my bed" being as readers already know whose bed it it from the sentences read before it. *Exclaim*

*Star* WHAT I LIKED: I thought the feelings the main character had for the child Trunusca had the officials take away were as heartwarming as the last several sentences in the final paragraph. It is too bad the emotions were not voiced instead of only thought about. Good story! *Star*

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Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only an opinion of this humble reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Exclaim* ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, and the only suggestions I have for improvement is changing the lines "who I speak of" to "who I'm speaking of" and "while we're far apart" to "when we're apart". *Exclaim*

*Pencil* CHARACTERS & PLOT: N/A *Pencil*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL THOUGHTS: The rhythm is terrific, and every verse relays how deeply this individual is cherished. I hope He answers your prayers, and wish you the best of luck. Welcome to Writing.com! *RainbowL**RainbowR*

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Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 18+
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*Idea* ERRORS: A question mark should replace the period following "company policy".
No comma is needed after "Next time" or "Head Office".
"Sir" needs no capitalization.
A comma should replace the period following "sorry, Sir" and one come after "Actually".
No comma is needed after "tasted good".
"atleast" should be "at least" instead.
No hyphen is needed in "air-conditioner".
A comma should follow "my face away".
A comma should come after "gush of happiness".
"I leave nearby" should be "I live nearby".
There is an unnecessary space between "on the first" and "evening in my house,".
No comma is needed following "kilometers every day".
There is an unnecessary space between "I checked" and "myself", and "me sad, but I" and "couldn't bring myself...".
I learnt" should be "I learned".
A comma should follow "son today", "otherwise all I would have" should be "otherwise I would have" and "forever" cut.
A comma should come after "education".

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*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: Just a humble suggestion, but I would change the sentence beginning with "Next time" to "The next time" instead. I feel it reads better that way.
I think "reaching out for a second one" would read better like this: "reaching for a second one".
"Her soft voice when she spoke" would make for a better read to me if worded like so: "Her soft voice had a plaintive...".
I would choose a better way to describe Abena's son than "The little creature".
I would change "I turned my face away" to "I turned away". *Exclaim*

*Note1* MY THOUGHTS: Neil, Rosa, and the other characters are defined well, and the storyline good. I was certain Neil and Abena would become an item, and was pleased with the memories he had of her and the gift she gave him. Theirs was not a love to be with so many obstacles. Good story! *Note1*

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Sherri
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Review of I Love America!  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Idea* ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: Not an error was noticed, and there are no suggestions for improving the item. *Idea*

*Writing* CHARACTERS & PLOT: N/A *Writing*

*Pencil* OVERALL OPINION: You did a magnificent job of expressing your reasons for loving our country, and I couldn't agree with you more. Many have forgotten the facts relayed in the piece about the colonists and how hard the fight for freedom was and still is, along with the Civil Rights Movement. I especially liked the paragraphs about your own fight for freedom and women's rights. Thank you for sharing this with us. *Pencil*

Sherri
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Review of Deceived  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Peace* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were spotted, and I can't think of any suggestions for improving the piece. *Peace*

*Gold* CHARACTERS: N/A *Gold*

*Flowerb* PLOT: N/A *Flowerb*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL OPINION: I do not think there is a reader here who could not relate to this poem. Relationships that go bad definitely leave one, sometimes both, feeling like his/her world has been turned upside down. It is not easy keeping the tears from falling, which is relayed well in the piece. *RainbowL**RainbowR*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Peace* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: The rhythm is off in some of the lines. For example, "meads", "treads", "to", "goal", and several others that do not follow the rhyming pattern as in the others. *Peace*

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*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL OPINION: My personal favorites are the lines about the path leading to your destiny and never worrying about which path to follow. Lovely poem! *RainbowL**RainbowR*

Sherri
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Review of You're Crazy  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Peace* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "When the sun rise" should be "When the sun rises" with a comma following it. "It hurt when I'm happy" should be "It hurts when I'm happy" instead, also followed by a comma. No other errors were noticed, and I have no other suggestions for improving the item. *Peace*

*Gold* CHARACTERS: N/A *Gold*

*Flowerb* PLOT: N/A *Flowerb*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL OPINION: You did a good job of expressing how much this individual means to you, although it did not read as a love poem to me, but instead more like the ending of a relationship. *RainbowL**RainbowR*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Idea* ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted, and there are no suggestions for improvement. *Idea*

*Check4* OVERALL OPINION: The imagery used in describing the settings and characters is super, as is Christine and Summer's mission. Christine's concern about the children tugged at my heartstrings. Summer is an abrupt person that would not be easy to communicate with. I was elated when Christine stood up to her. My favorite character was Kalvin. He had a good attitude and the right idea about teamwork. Good story! *Check4*

Sherri
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Review of Silent Love  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Idea* ERRORS: No mistakes were noticed. *Idea*

*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: There are none I can think of that would improve the piece. *Exclaim*

*Note1* MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is terrific, and the emotions relayed just as good. It is so hard letting someone we love go. It tugged at my heart reading the lines about the person deserving the heavens and a part of you always waiting. I wish you the best. *Note1*

Sherri
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Review of mothers love  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Idea* MECHANICS: No grammatical, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted. *Idea*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: There are none I can think of that would improve the poem. *Idea*

*Star* MY FAVORITES: The rhythm is wonderful, and the emotions brought tears to this readers eyes. Making a choice like this is extremely difficult. I agree that the choice should be made by our Father in cases like this, but again, I realize it would be hard to do. You are right. Some things we are better off not knowing. *Star*

Blessings,
Sherri
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Review of Every Time  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Idea* ERRORS: No spelling, punctual, or others noticed. *Idea*

*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of that would improve the poem. *Exclaim*

*Star* WHAT I LIKED: The imagery and emotions leading up to the fantasy and reality are excellent. The feelings felt for this individual are certainly stronger than any chains. You did a magnificent job of expressing how the scent and touch of this person makes you feel. Well done! *Star*

Sherri
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Review of My gentle promise  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Pencil* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: There is an unneeded space between the e in "tongue"s and the apostrophe, and "You" should be "Your" in the first stanza.*Pencil*

*Note1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Note1*

*Check2* MY THOUGHTS: The last verse was my personal favorite, for it expressed how much your older sister means to you. Very lovely poem! *Check2*

Sherri
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Review of WEAVER OF DREAMS  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Idea* ERRORS: No mistakes were noticed. *Idea*

*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of for improvement. *Exclaim*

*Note1* MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is superb, the imagery excellent, and the emotions relayed just as well. My favorite lines are the ones about capturing your spirit, the magical hours, and dreams changing our lives. We all have doubts like the ones mentioned in the poem sometimes, but I find that trying to look for brighter days helps me trudge through the difficult ones. *Note1*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Flower1* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I have no suggestions to offer for improving the item. *Flower1*

*Note1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Note1*

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*Note5* MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is sensational, and the imagery just as terrific. My personal favorites are the verses about not complaining on the dark days and the storms. I just love a good thunderstorm! *Note5*

Sherri
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Review of Our Legacy  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Idea* ERRORS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed. *Idea*

*Reading* SUGGESTIONS: I can't think of any for improvement. *Reading*

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION: The rhythm is terrific, and I don't think a reader here couldn't relate to the poem. A naturalist, I could not agree more that man has destroyed much of the beautiful world He blessed us with, and it breaks my heart. *Star*

Sherri
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Review of Distance  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Note4* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: The rhythm is off in some of the stanzas. For example, "I", "nights", and "life"; "is", "kiss", and "lips". *Note4*

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*Note1* MY LIKES: I liked the way realism about lust were confronted and the fire put out despite your feelings for the individual. Relationships like this one almost never work out. Letting go is not easy, but for the best. *Note1*

Sherri

*Flower1* MY DISLIKES: There were none. *Flower1*
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Review of One More  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Idea* ERRORS: The rhythm is off in one of the stanzas. For example, "position" and "compositions". Other than that, nothing more was spotted. *Idea*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: None other than the one mentioned above. *Idea*

*Note5* PERSONAL FAVORITES: I liked the mystery of the poet's death, although it is sad that his ideas perished with him. It was refreshing knowing his last poem will be remembered though. *Note5*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Idea* ERRORS: "Even" needs no capitalization. Other than that, no errors were noticed. *Idea*

*Reading* SUGGESTIONS: None other than the one mentioned above. *Reading*

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION: The rhythm is super, and the imagery just as good. I like to think that the world is a beautiful place instead of the dismal one. A very dark dream must have inspired the poem. *Star*

Sherri
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