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ERRORS: No punctual or other mistakes were noticed, and the only suggestion this humble reader has to offer is that some of the words following the commas do not need to be capitalized. For example, "Alone", "Her", and "She". 
SUGGESTIONS: Only the one already mentioned above. 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No punctual or other mistakes were spotted. 
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MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is super, and the poem very inspiring. You did a sensational job of using the prompt. I could not agree more that a positive outlook will always bring the sunshine we're looking for. 
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OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is fabulous, and the imagery just as super. What really inspired me was the way the faults you feel you have are pointed out honestly and how you turn to our Almighty Father for changes. Well done!
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the item. 
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OVERALL OPINION: The imagery is positively awesome! I think the moon's comparison to an eye that circles the world is good. The last three verses are my personal favorites. Well written! 
ERRORS: No mistakes were spotted. 
SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of that would improve the poem. 
ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: Not an error was spotted, and I cannot think of any suggestions for improvement. 
Sherri
Sherri
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MY LIKES: You did a magnificent job of using the prompt. The rhythm is perfect, and the messages are just as splendid. I loved the lines about lighting up the night with the moon and stars and a loving God never forsaking us. The poem is lovely and inspiring. 
MY DISLIKES: There are none. 
Sherri
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: Numerous punctual and other errors were noticed. For example, a period should replace the comma that follows "a war", "the" capitalized afterward, no comma is needed after "is war", "I was knew her" should be "I knew her", a period should replace the comma following "the war". I also think "I" is used too frequently. Just my humble opinion though. 
SUGGESTIONS: None that would improve the entry. 
OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is perfect, and the message great also. You did a fine job of using this weeks prompt. I think all mothers could relate to your feelings. Sometimes we look back and wish we had done less preaching and more practicing. 
MY THOUGHTS: You did a good job of pointing out numerous reasons that we should practice what we preach. Everyone makes mistakes in judgment sometimes, but can usually rectify things if they turn to Him and their conscience. 
You did an awesome job of writing the tale. 
MY LIKES: The characters and settings are described superbly in my opinion, and the rhythm perfect. The couple certainly had a heck of a honeymoon. My heart went out to the groom when he had the accident, and the verse about the bear I found awesome. His words to his wife afterward touched this readers heart. Very well done! 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, punctual, or other mistakes were noticed, and I have no suggestions to offer for improvement. 
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