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This is the first of two reviews gifted to you by your Secret Santa as part of the Holiday Package from 
CHARACTERS AND STORYLINE: N/A 
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The rhythm is outstanding, and the imagery just as terrific. Being new at school is difficult for youngsters, which is relayed well in the poem. I was so pleased Jim made a dear friend. 
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were spotted, and I cannot think of anything for improvement. 
MY THOUGHTS: I found the story very inspiring and uplifting. The closeness shared between father and son was written in a way that touched my heart. You're right. Nothing is more important than togetherness. 
Sherri
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: "bigger then" should be "bigger than". "i" should be capitalized. A comma should come after "You said". A larger space than needed follows "your lead". "lean" should be capitalized also. "soposed" should be "supposed" instead. 
CHARACTERS & PLOT: N/A 
OVERALL OPINION: With some editing, I think this poem would be terrific. You did a good job of relaying what a genuine relationship is all about. 
ERRORS: "And" is not needed after "Brother" and "each" cut for a better read before "always had". A comma should follow "games" and "synch" (which should be "sync"). Several others like these noticed also. 
SUGGESTIONS: None other than giving the characters name so that they would be easier to relate to, although this did not take away from the plot in any way in my opinion. 
CHARACTERS: Giving them names would make them easier to relate to. 
OVERALL OPINION: As mentioned above, I was touched by the closeness you and your "brother" share even though he does not share your blood. Sometimes blood is not thicker than water. You did a super job of expressing that. 
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ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No comma is needed after "across the street. Just an opinion, but I think "a police uniform on" would be better if worded "and wearing a policeman's uniform". I also think "my curious mind" would read better if it was worded "curiosity got the best (or better) of me". 
CHARACTERS & PLOT: The characters are described well, and the storyline terrific. The last two paragraphs were heartbreaking, but summed up the mystery perfectly in my opinion. 
I thought it was hilarious. Those darn cats! 
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Thank you for your entry in 
OVERALL IMPRESSION: You painted a poetic masterpiece with the prompt in my personal opinion. I like the way many look past the blessings received and how the prayer was answered. He always comes through for us. Like you, I count my blessings regularly. 
CHARACTERS & PLOT: N/A 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the essay. 
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MY OPINION: You did a fantastic job of describing the storm. The imagery is written about so realistically that I could almost see the willow dancing and feel the iciness. Very, very well done! 