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4,187 Public Reviews Given
4,316 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
I'm good at...
Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
Favorite Genres
I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
Public Reviews
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Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Shanna,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your story. I enjoyed reading this piece; I thought it was well written, creative, and entertaining. You did a great job of telling a complete, satisfying tale in only 120 words. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
952
952
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
J,

I liked the concept of this story, and thought you did a good job with the overall execution. If there's one suggestion I could make, it would be to remove the unnecessary sentence fragments that sometimes come up in the piece, such as "...who was now a grown man." The fact that he's a school nemesis of George, coupled with the fact that you already mentioned George was grown up, removes the need for that detail to be reiterated.

Other than that, nice job!
953
953
Review of Cloud city  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Heather,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your work. I really like the imagery you've created in this story... it's descriptive without being overbearing, and really helped create a clear image in my head. Nice job! Keep up the good work and keep writing!
954
954
Review of Tsunami  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
super sleuth,

Nice job on this story. I particularly liked your use of description, which created a really great tone and sense of imagery with this piece. It was short and sweet, not too detailed, but not to scant... a solid little short story.

Keep up the good work!
955
955
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
ShiShad,

This was a cute, entertaining little story. It was short and sweet, and everything worked well together to create a wonderful tone for the whole piece. I didn't notice and spelling or grammatical errors and thought you managed to create a charming short story. Nice job and keep up the good work!
956
956
Review of Skin Art  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Lou,

I really enjoyed reading this story. I thought you did a great job with the imagery in particular, which created an incredibly vivid image in my head as a read it. The concept was interesting and your character was identifiable and realistic. Great job overall!
957
957
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Mike K2,

I really enjoyed reading this poem of yours. I thought you did a great job with the rhyme scheme, and the structure of it all worked very well. It was a stylish and fun way to get the sentiment across, which I think really succeeded. Nice job!
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958
Review of Firefighter  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (3.0)
Jimmie42797,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your work. I liked the story for its simple concept and execution, and liked the idea behind it... but ultimately felt that a little more development would help add context to the reason why someone fixed the fireman's bell, and would help explain the central conflict of the story.

Nice work... keep it up!
959
959
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
gothkitty13,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your story. I thought you did a really great job with the imagery and description in this short piece. You were able to really capture an emotion and convey it to the audience. The only suggestion I have is to establish the setting a little more at the beginning, so your audience knows where they are. Other than that, great work!
960
960
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
eightball,

I enjoyed reading this story of yours. I thought it was wonderfully descriptive and really did a great job capturing the emotions of your characters. It was well written and well executed, with no spelling or grammatical errors that I could find.

Keep up the good work!
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961
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
LittleJohn,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your story. I liked the imagination you instilled in this piece, particularly in the way you envisioned the monster. I thought the story felt a little rough in execution, but nothing that a little editing can't fix.

Keep up the good work, and try to vary your sentence structure a little.

Take care.
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962
Review of The Big Mistake  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (3.0)
elarive0717,

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your story. I thought the concept was cute and entertaining (and had a great message), but I felt like the execution was a little off. Specifically, in the second paragraph, you told your audience what the boys were going to do, and then had them do it. In the interests of keeping the audience interested, I would consider revising the story so that the audience feels like they're right there with the boys, figuring out what's going to happen as it happens.

That close proximity to the narrative will, I think, make this piece all the more compelling.

Keep it up and keep writing!
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963
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (3.5)
Tina,

I thought this was a very sweet and touching story about a little girl and her dog. Although it was a simple story, I thought the execution could have used a little more personal flair, but it was still a compelling story as written. Nice job and keep up the good work!
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964
Review of Mirror  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
LastFirstKiss,

I enjoyed reading this story. I thought you set it up well and had a great twist at the end. I felt that your sentence structured got a little repetitive toward the middle of the story and could definitely be refined a little bit, but overall it was a satisfying and thrilling story. Nice work!
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965
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Magi,

This was a fun, entertaining exploration of the prompt. I thought you did a good job coming up with a creative way to explore the snake prompt. It was well written and well crafted, with no spelling or grammatical errors that I could find. Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest!
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966
Review of Saturday Morning  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
E E Coder,

I enjoyed reading this story. I thought you did a good job of creating a fun, entertaining story to read. No spelling or grammatical errors that I could find. Nice job... keep up the good work!

Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your story.
967
967
Review of Toilet Toils  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Rock Lee,

I really enjoyed reading your story. Having been through a few toilet toils myself, I can definitely identify with the characters and their predicament. Nice job on creating a fun, entertaining story. Good luck in the contest and keep up the good work!
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968
Review of Rupert's Mistake  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dutch Skyman,

Great story! I thought this was really original, entertaining, and interesting. I loved the concept, and I thought your execution was pitch-perfect. No spelling or grammatical errors that I could find.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!
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969
Review of Broken Mirror  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Unrivaled,

Nice job on this story. I thought you infused it with the perfect amount of sadness and creepiness, which created a very effective dynamic. Your imagery was really good, and I thought, as a whole, it was a very well written story. Good work!
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970
Review of SLEEPY GILLIAN  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
mafspeed,

I enjoyed reading this piece. I thought it was written with a great sense of humor, and explored the art of being able to sleep anywhere... which I think most of us can identify as having known someone with that particular talent. Nice job... keep up the good work!
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971
Review of Common Courtesy  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dwarfstar,

I enjoyed reading this story. Nothing like covering your bases, eh? *Smile* I thought your story was well thought out, well written, and well executed. It was an effective tale in the span of only a few words. Nice job! Keep up the good work!
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972
Review of Frog on a Hog  
Review by Jeff
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Serf,

I thought this was a fun little story. Your description was good, and I really like the concept, although I feel that by mentioning Kermit in the first sentence, you kind of take away from the story's natural reveal of showing a frog on a hog. I'd suggest maybe moving that first sentence to somewhere in the middle, or even at the end... but otherwise, it was a fun read.

Nice work!
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973
Review of Butterfly on HIgh  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Warriorpoet,

I enjoyed reading this story of yours. I thought it was original, entertaining, and fun to read. Your premise was great, and you executed that premise well. No spelling or grammatical errors that I could find... keep up the good work!
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974
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
143,

I enjoyed reading your story. I like the way you took a simple observation and explored it, interpreting the birds' actions in a unique and interesting way, particularly one that your audience can relate to. Nice job... keep up the good work and keep writing!
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975
Review of 100 for Halloween  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (5.0)
Smoochdog,

Nice job on this story. It sounds like an interesting contest, and definitely a challenge. I thought you did a great job of writing a coherent story, especially while trying to use all unique words. I did spot a double "from" in the last two lines... but other than that, nice job! I know it's not easy!
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