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Overall Impression: I just finished reading this story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a circuit board inside a computer. A circuit board that was about to become obsolete.
Where Your Location Is: Your location isn't a place this time. It's a thing - it's a computer.
Your Main Character: There really isn't any main character in this story. At least not a physical one. The circuit board is the name character in this story.
How They Spoke to Me: This is one big thought. It isn't really dialogue. It's one big thought - without any Quotation Marks. Personally, I prefer to use Quotation Marks around my dialogue. But that's just me. There's at least one Contest Host who doesn't judge Contests based on Quotation Marks.
Any Last Thoughts: Don't get me wrong. I did liked this story a lot. I'm just not a very good Reviewer. What I say, and what I want to say, aren't usually the same.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story a lot. It was simple story. But it keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop reading it until I was done.
The Story: This is story about three kids and one stepfather who watch a scary movie together. The Movie was about a couple who get a Dummy as a marriage present.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story isn't specified in this story. But from the sound of it it's probably in a living room.
Your Main Character: You, Diamond, Tri and 'stepfather June' are all the main characters of this story. June I thought was a female name. But I guess it could be a male name too.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. Some of them think no dialogue is a no-no. And at least one consider it telling and not showing. But I'm not one of those Reviewers. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one
Any Last Thoughts: Did you write this story for a one hundred or less Contest? The reason why I ask that is because I think this this Review is longer than your story.
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Overall Impression: I was a little confused by this Short Story. It didn't really make much sense to me. This story seemed more like a dream to me.
The Story: This story was about a 'Cocktail Party.' But it wasn't a normal party. At first I thought this story was about Vampires or Zombies - but the it turned out to be more of a Swingers party gone bad.
Where Your Location Is: The location of this party was unknown. Personally, I always try to give my stories at least one location. It depends on the length limit of my story as to how much detail I have I my stories.
Your Main Character: Who is the main character in this story? That's a good question. The answer must be: It has to be the author.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. so I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who would. Some of them will say that no dialogue in a story is no-no. And at least one Reviewer says it tell and not show. But I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Don't get me wrong. It might sound like I didn't like this story. But I did. It's just not my type of story. I like it a little scary. But I'm not really a big fan of vampire and zombie stories.
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Overall Impression: What can I say about this story - except that I liked it. I like this whole Serial. I have only read the third and four parts in this Serial. But I think I like this one the best.
The Story: Someone just gave birth to a girl. And they named her Sarah. Almost the second Sarah is born she is taken away from them because she is an illegal birth. The rest of the family is put under 'house arrest.'
Where Your Location Is: The location is a house. Where that house is unknown to me. If it is mention I either missed it. Or it's on one of the other parts to this story.
Your Main Character: It's hard to tell who the main character is. I say it's the whole family. Not only are they in it from the beginning but they are all represented pretty equally among each other.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what I see it looked good to me. Personally, I would have separated the dialogue into individual paragraphs. But that's just how I write.
Any Last Thoughts: What I don't understand is why you put in that part about Cher in the first paragraph. It wasn't needed for the rest of the story - or did I miss something.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about two Confederate Soldiers on patrol on the planet of Mar Sara. They are on a normal patrol when they hit a Zergling. At least they think they hit a Zergling. But looks can be deceiving.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this is the planet of Mar Sara. When they hit the Zergling they are in the Wastelands.
Your Main Character: Lester is the main character. But The Sarge, no given name, is also a main character too. James is also a big part of this story. Personally, I would have given The Sarge a name. But since this was based on a Video Game you might not have had any choice.
How They Spoke to Me: What can I say about your dialogue - nothing. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I liked that you explained that this was based on a Video Game. It was the first time I have ever done that.
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Overall Impression: Once again you did a good job with this story. I liked your story a lot.
The Story: This story is about Eli - who is pregnant. But she can't be pregnant according to Aden because she is made of clay.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure where the location is for this story. I have re-read it a couple of times. And I don't see any. Did I miss something? Personally, I try to describe at least one location in my stories. It depends which Contest I am writing for. If it's a Flash Fiction Contest then the description is going to be a brief. But it's for a longer story, like one thousand to two thousand plus words it's usually more detailed.
Your Main Character: Eli is the main character. But Aden, Raven and even Seth are also part of this story.
How They Spoke to Me: The Dialogue in this story is very well written. At least it looked that way to me. Good job.
Any Last Thoughts: I still don't understand the title for this story. True, you mentioned Christmas and Christmas lights. But that was it. Also I used 150% with this Review. Can you still see it?
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Overall Impression: I did like this Short Story a lot. But it's not really my type of story. Yes, I do believe in God, and Satan, but I'm not really very religious. At first I thought this was a story about God and Satan. And it is in a lot of ways. But it's much more than that.
The Story: This is a story about Satan, aka The Devil, and about how he's going to use a new invention to rule the world again. At least that's the way it sounded to me.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is an auditorium. And The Devil, Satan, is talking to the press about the new invention.
Your Main Character: Satan, The Devil, is the main character in this story. But the Reporters there for the Press Conference are also part of this story too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there is looked good to me. Personally, I would have separated that dialogue into separate paragraphs. But that's just me.
Any Last Thoughts: I magnify the stories I read to 175% to make it easier to read. But I de-magnify them to 100% - like I did with your last review. This time I used 125%. Can you read this Review at the magnification?
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Overall Impression: I liked your story very, very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: At first I didn't know how this story was considered a Science Fiction story. It was about halfway through it when I found that this was another invasion from Outer Space against the Earth story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure exactly where the location of this story is at - except that it's outdoors. But the way it sounds it's a celebration for Anna. She is being honored for her fight again the invaders.
Your Main Character: Anna was the main character, of course, in this story is. She wasn't the only one being honored I'm sure. But she was the only one mentioned.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of thought in this story. But not too much dialogue. Personally, I would have put Quotation Marks around what Anna was thinking. You choice to use itailize instead. And as far as I know there is nothing wrong with that. But that's just the way I write.
Any Last Thoughts: The first half of the story was about Anna's past. And the second half was about the Invasion of Earth - again. Personally, I'm not a big fan of Aliens Attacking Earth stories. I love to read, and watch them. But I don't write them. I write Pure Science Fiction.
I liked your story I very, very good. Keep on writing.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story too. You did a very good job with this Short Story. At least I think you did. Good job.
The Story: At first I thought it was a Short Story about Angels. Then you mentioned 'Starbucks." And then I thought it was about Angels who have returned to Earth. I guess I was right about that.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this Short Story was 'Starbucks." We don't know where on Earth that 'Starbucks' is at. And we don't know if it's the present, near past or the future. But we do know it's a 'Starbucks.'
Your Main Character: Vertigo is the main character in this Short Story. But there are several other Angels in this one too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And it looks good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I'm trying this new template. And I would really like to know how it looks to you. I would also like to know if this turned out right. Can you read my Review without using the Slide Ruler below - or a pop-up window?
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Overall Impression: Another great story. I liked that our world is now even more Racial than it has ever been. Good job.
The Story: I just said above what this Short Story is all about. At first I thought it was about the Vegan Star System. Maybe even Vega Three. But as I read on I realized you were talking about other planets now inhabiting Earth.
Any Last Thoughts: I liked this story a lot. And I think you did a great job in writing it. But I have liked all of your stories I have read. A lot of these stories a pretty short. And I like that. But I am curious about something. Do you write these stories because of a contest or contests? Or is there another reason why you write them?
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Overall Impression: I really did like this story. But it was a little over my head. And I think it will be over the head of most, if not almost all, of those who read this story. Personally, I don't like to get too technical. I write so that anyone can read my story. Some of my stories might be a little scary. But they aren't gory or graphic.
The Story: This is a Short Story about the discovery of a new theory about life in the Universe. A Press Conference was called to tell the world about that discovery. And at least part of the world did hear about that theory on the news.
Your Main Character: Eugene is, of course, the main character. It's his theory he has discovered. But Dean Flatulence and the press are also a big part of this story too.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you have a good imagination when it comes to your theories about how the Universe works. All of your stories appear to be like this one. Good job. You are a very good writer.
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Overall Impression: This was a much easier read for me. And I liked what I read very much. I especially liked that you made the 'missing link' a female. Usually, if not always in other stories - television - movies, the 'missing link' is a male. Also, I liked the part about her not being Human because she talked about the ninth planet.
The Story: Cassy had been frozen for one hundred million. When she is revived the subject comes up that she might not be human. She also had a lot of learning to do - about one hundred million years worth.
Where Your Location Is: The lab where Cassy was being reintroduced into the world, tested and studied is the main location. Where she was discovered is also a location too. But the lab was the main location.
Your Main Character: Of course, Cassy was the main character of this story. After all, she is the 'missing link' isn't she. But Janet and Dr. Lawrence are also a part of this story too.
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Overall Impression: This a strange read to me. It's not that I didn't like it, because I did, it's that I had trouble understanding it. This looked more like a Poem than a Short Story to me.
The Story: If I understand this story correctly this story is about China joining the Space Race to the Moon. Komachiya was a Sniper. That's what he is called. But he was more like a Guard - that could shoot a long distance.
Where Your Location Is: It looked like the location was the outside of the launching site in China - way outside. After all, it's seen from the point of view of Komachiya.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. At least one of those Reviewers would say this story was telling - not showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I don't like to do one sentence paragraphs. There needs to be two sentences minimum. But that's just the way that I write. I have had to write one sentence paragraphs - because it's part of a Contest.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a spaceship that is about to be destroyed. There are only a few minutes left for them to live. I really like the ending to this story.
Your Main Character: There is only one main character in this story. And he is the Captain of the doom spaceship. He is recording the last few minutes of their life so that any other visitor to that hostile planet would we warned not to come there. Personally, I try to give my main characters a name. I think that a character feels more real if they have a name.
How They Spoke to Me: I can't comment on any dialogue for this story - because there wasn't any. And for some Reviewers that's a no-no. But I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently all of my story, if not all of them, were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: It wasn't too hard to figure out where this story was leading. I knew about half way through what this story was really about. But I was surprised about the ending. True, I knew what the outcome would be - but I was surprised about the year in your story. I love this ending. Good job on this story.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it a lot. It keep me reading from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished. Good job.
The Story: This story is about Florin. Who is more machine that he is man now. he also had an ego problem too. I'm not sure if he thought he was better than everyone else or not. But he definitely was better than the three females, all females, he had trapped.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure what the location for this story takes place. It doesn't say in this story. Personally, I like to have at least one location. And sometimes it's more than one - or several. It sometimes can be very detailed, depending on the length of my story, and sometimes it's barely mentioned. But I always try to describe at least one.
Your Main Character: Florin is the main character in this story. But I think the three trapped females are also main characters too. After all, they are in it almost as much as Florin is.
Any Last Thoughts: Where did you get the name of Florin? That is real name. It's not a made up one, or an Earth name, like the other, than me, come up with in their stories.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I was finished.
Where Your Location Is: It looks like the location for this story was a SpacePort. At least that what it sound to me. After all, there is a spaceship involved. And the loading of cargo onto that spaceship. But the SpacePort wasn't the location for this story - unless the office is attached to the SpacePort. But it doesn't sound like it is because there is a second part to this story.
Your Main Character: Jazzell and Berek were the main characters in this story. But I think Jazzell is the main one. Not only is he in part one of this story but he's in part two also. The third character in this story is the man Jazzell is talking to. Personally, I try to give all of my characters names, even the ones that are barely in it, to me it makes the character feel more real. But that's just me.
Any Last Thoughts: This story reminds me of Gremlins. But instead of eating, then growing, these 'Gremlins" reproduction a thousand times when exposed to air. It also reminds me of Tribbles too - because of the mass reproduction.
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Overall Impression: I liked your story a lot. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good job.
The Story: This was a continuation of a story about a family who are outcasts because of their involved with Martian. And what I mean by involvement is the sexual relationship with them - and the possible birth of a baby because of it.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is the family house where they are confined because of there involvements with the Martians. you did mention Mars Colony. And the house could be there. But from the sound of it the house is on Earth.
Your Main Character: Your main character in this story I think has to be Whitney. But she isn't the only one. Once again I like that you give your characters names. I think that makes the characters feel more real if they have names.
Any Last Thoughts: To me this sounds more like a Serial than a Short Story. There are nothing wrong with Serials. I watch them all the time on daytime tv. But this story was categorized as a Short Story.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story a lot. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading your story I couldn't stop reading it until I finished reading it.
The Story: What was this story about? That's a good question. I was kind of confused about what this story was about. At first I thought it was about witchcraft. But then it went into an alien baby being born. And how embarrassing, if not disasterous, it would be for the Congresswoman.
Your Main Character: There are no main characters in this story. I think all of your characters are the main character. And I really like that you gave your characters names. It makes them feel real to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I disagree with how you describe the aliens on Mars to be. They aren't like that. At least you didn't call them little green men - like most people do. Good job with that.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story very much. It was a simple straight forward story. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good job.
The Story: This was a story about an interrogation of a guy who was arrested for being naked in a dumpster. His reason for being naked was because he was abducted by Aliens from Mars.
Your Main Character: Of course, the main character was the one who was being interrogated. But the Cop was also the main character too. Even the female Cop who gave him the report was a main character to me. She wasn't in very long. And she didn't have much to say. But she was in it - especially since she was the only one with an actual name. Personally I would have given them all names. I think they sound more real if they have names. But that's just me.
Any Last Thoughts: I disagree with your story on one point though. The probing of your naked man. Aliens aren't like that. They are only here, or come here, to observe us.
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Overall Impression: I liked this story. It was a simple story. But it keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I got started I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good job.
The Story: At first I wasn't exactly sure what this story was about. But once I finished it I realized this was about an attempt to gain access to a computer so they could decode something.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not exactly sure what the location of this story is. But the way they were talking about partners it sounds like they were cops. And if they were they were either at the office trying to gain access to a computer or wherever the computer was at.
Your Main Character: Rosa was the only name given in this story. But the real main character was the boy. Who wasn't given a name. Personally, I give most, if not all, of my characters a name - especially the main one, but that's just me.
Any Last Thoughts: I have been doing a lot of the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge the last few weeks. And I like it a lot. It's been a real challenge, especially for a SciFi writer like me, for me. Have you entered any other Daily Flash Fiction Challenge?
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Overall Impression: I'm not sure what I have to say about this story. Don't get me wrong I did like this story. What I can understand of it. Which isn't much. And I don't think it will be like that for most of it's readers. It's too technical and confusing. At least it does to me.
Where Your Location Is: What is the location is for this Short Story. That's a good question. I'm not sure what the location or the locations are for this Short Story.
Your Main Character: I'm not sure who the main character. I know it's a he. But I don't know who he is. Personally, I try to give names to all of my characters, at least most of them, but I definitely do with my main characters or characters. To me it just make the person more real. But that is just my opinion.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't much in the way of dialogue in this Short Story. In fact, there was only one piece of dialogue. And it was confusing too. At least it was to me.
Any Last Thoughts: What was this Short Story about? Did anyone who has read it so far understood it? Am I the only one who didn't? I'm sorry I am so bad at this Short Story.
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Overall Impression: I liked this Short Story a lot. It keep me reading it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop reading your Short Story until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a drunken Actor by the name of Rex Farr. He is drunk in the beginning of the story. And he's drunk at the end. In between he doesn't do much because he is drunk.
Your Main Character: Rex Farr is the main character. In fact, he is the only character. He talks about, and looks at several others - mostly cops on guard, others on the Film Site.
Any Last Thoughts: Don't get me wrong I liked it a lot, and it keep me reading from beginning to end, but it seem a little boring to me. But that's just my opinion.
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Overall Impression: I liked this Short Story very much. It keep me interested in this Short Story from beginning to end. Once I started reading this Short Story I couldn't stop until I was finished with it.
The Story: This was a Short Story about a boy who should have been born a girl. But he didn't realize that until he became older. He tried to perform like all the other boys. And he did okay with that. But deep down he knew he was different than the other boys. In the end he was different. And he wanted to treated different.
Where Your Location Is: Where this Short Story took place wasn't ever revealed. But the way they were talking, and acting, it sounded like a big city to me. Probably Los Angeles or New York City.
Your Main Character: Gloria was of course the main character in this Short Story. But we really didn't know her by name, except the title of this Short Story, until the end. Personally, I think you should have given us his name before Gloria. I'm a strong believe that a name makes a character more real. But that's just my opinion.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this Short Story. So I can't comment on it. But there are some Reviewer who might. Some Reviewers think that no dialogue in a story is a no-no - but I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories where just like this one.
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Overall Impression: I liked this Short Story very much. It keep me interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading your Short Story I couldn't stop until I was finished with it.
The Story: This was a Short Story about a lost love. He meet her during a few months vacation with his parents when he was eighteen. After he returned home he moved on with his studies - and then his life. But he never forgot her. Many years later he went back looking for her. Only to find out everyone thought she was crazy because of what she believed.
Where Your Location Is: There were several locations in this Short Story. The first one was of course the beach and island where they meet - and where he went back to look for her. But between them was the life he had after meeting her and before he went back to find her.
Your Main Character: The two main characters in this Short Story was the man who lost the girl. And the girl the man lost. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to give all of my characters names. But I definitely give my main characters names. It makes the seem more real to me.
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Overall Impression: I liked this Short Story very much. It keep me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started it I could finished your Short Story until it ended.
The Story: What is his big secret. That is what this story was about. A man most of his time in this story at a café. While there he got involved with a stranger that looked a lot like an enemy he used to know. A enemy who knew his big secret. And was willing to use blackmail, even though he didn't call it that, to get what he wanted.
Your Main Character: The main character is the man with the secret. But stranger who seemed to know that secret is also a main character. Personally, I like to give my main characters, usually most - if not all- my characters, names. It makes them feel more real if I do. But that's just me.
How They Spoke to Me: There was not dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewers that might. Some Reviewers think no dialogue is a no-no - but I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories was just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I would have liked to know what that big secret was. But I understand why you didn't reveal it. A lot of my stories end just like this one. The only reason why you might end it like this is because you planned on doing a follow-up on it. Did you do a follow-up on this story?
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